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After a tragedy, Karam Al-Asif must take the throne of Saddle-Arabia.
In the shadows around him, assassins lurk, and he must find the traitors and stop them before it's too late.
Sadly, they are not the only enemies he must face.
(Takes place about a thousand years before the show starts.
Part of Karamverse, my Parallel Universe.
Nothing too scary, don't worry.)
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So the Zarfaim are besically jews/Christians?
Ooh, just desserts coming up
Nice tie-in to the show
Well frick. This sucks. Poor Karam and Daud. Victims of others schemes
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WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAA? A COMMENT!?
Oh wow, I'm so glad I am getting feedback
Ahem, but yes, the Zarfaim are basically Jews, and I was wondering how long it would take someone to figure that out. I figured it'd be soon, heh.
But yes I saw all your comments, and indeed, things are pretty rough. That's all I'll say because... Spoilers, heh.
Wow, sad but justified. If I had to war with my brother for years I don’t know how I would react. The two brothers are too good, an immovable object vs an unstoppable force.
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Yup, and I designed them like that.
After all, one is "Wind" and the other is "Rock". Just like how Celestia and Luna fit the warmth of the sun and the introverted cool of the moon, I wanted my boys to fit their roles.
Unfortunately it is very sad to write, yes.
So yes, thank you for reading this far! It's almost finished being published.
I really appreciate you continuing your story even after you got no feedback it appears for a while
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Thank you!
I hope to write more stories in the near future :D
Personally, no Karam should not use the fire halter. However he probably will and end up realizing his mistake after the fact.
If the main OCs in the Karamverse story were voiced, what would they sound like?
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hmmmmmmmmmmm that's a tough question. I'd have to think about that! Since they are both teens, they'd have pretty young voices. As for the advisors, well, different adult voices of course.
That's a really good question. I'd have to think about that! Thank you!
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Thank you for the input! I would, uh, comment, but you'll see the answer in another chapter or two, heh.
:( sad. Well thankfully Kara. Didn’t do something he would regret. He is giving his brother a chance and I hope that perhaps Daud can be reformed or at least have a honourable end.
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Damn this is sad, better then Daud being killed though.
A suggestion: Daud wanders the desert and when on the brink of death comes across Pony Jesus or some holy creature, who helps Daud see through the lies and decades of Anger. Eventually older and wiser Daud returns in secret to watch over Karam and his family, perhaps becoming Karam's childrens "imaginary" friend and protector. eventually, he reveals himself much to Karam's Happiness and ends up becoming a part of the family again
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hmmmmmmmmmmmm I will consider what to do with Daud. And yes, MUCH SAD.
Thank you for sticking with this story! I'm glad to get the feedback
Question one is Avram an analogy for Abram, Abrahams old name.
Second in this story does the god of Avram deal with the sun and moon issues or is it royal sisters.
I imagine that Avrams God is one who tends to work behind the scenes and puts pieces in place for the dominos to fall instead of using godly strength to strong arm everything.
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"Avram" is the Hebrew version of "Abram"
And I didn't really mentally decide how God works in this universe, since it's such a wacky universe, but I figure, like you said, He probably does work behind the scenes, and He is the source of all magic. He is the reason why the magic of Friendship exists, leading to the elements of harmony and other things like the Halter of Fire and all that. Basically each nation was given whatever artifact God knew it'd need to survive. In the case of the Crystal empire it was the Crystal Heart.
Et cetera.
*shrug*
I'm all up for ideas though since this isn't really a "religious" fic. I just didn't want to leave Karam without any hope and I wanted him to have someone speaking life to him, hence I gave him Avram and had this moment.
Also yes, the royal sisters DO move the sun and moon, but Karam doesn't know that yet, ha ha.
And the story is almost done. We just have an epilogue left. Kinda sad, innit?
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Wow, honestly I kind of want a series of stories following just the life of Karam. Thank you for making these.
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Don't worry, I do plan on writing more for Karam!
In fact, my MLP Parallel universe is named Karamverse because he's basically the main character... ehhhhhhh kinda.
Oooh, dang I don’t know which ship to build hmmm
Karam x Celestia, certainly has appeal two alicorns who were cut off from their families and who can help each other and saddle Arabia’s relationship with the sun
Karam x Grand princess, another powerful nation, this also has potential and would be interesting too.
Karam x Karam, clearly the favoured candidate right now Karam needs no one. This ship has holes though and may sink pretty quickly.
And finally the dark horse candidate
Karam x Rikuma Princess, even more mysterious then the grand princess. This could be really interesting a nation coming out of isolation and a princess perhaps doing so as well, really interesting potential for story and perhaps conflict between saddle Arabia and other nations.
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Lol, I'm glad you're not opposed to shipping Alicorns. I wasn't sure if people would be angry at the suggestion or not.
I do hope to get started on the next big story soon but I have other things to do in real life and some other side stories too
Thanks for reading the whole story and commenting on it for so long! Thank you so much!
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no problem.
I really enjoyed this story
take your time for a sequel no need to rush amazingness
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Have you thought of anything yet?
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Oh wow, hello!
Voice actors? No, and I'm rather touched that you remembered me this long! Thanks!
I am seriously working on my latest story, by the way. I'm determined to finish it, some day.