An entity begins to transport inhabitants of Equestria to the world of Gravity Falls.
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I'm glad you did this chapter, I was worried you were going to skip talking about Rarity and Pacifica, so good job!
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Thank you and I plan to have more MLP characters appear, but I doubt that I will give you an introduction.
Nice! Can't wait to see who you have next!
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that's fair
I think you handled the meeting very well, very nice. Nice little set up with Gompers as well.
Yes! It annoyed me how they teased a potential 'Pacifica gets kidnapped by the gnomes' but never actually did it...
Also love you bringing Fluttershy into this...and I'm interested in where your going with teasing 'Maple' and the Summer Sun Celebration.
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Pacifica is smarter than Mabel, she wouldn't be fooled by the Gnomes costume and the only reason she went to meet Norman was because Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom had asked her to find out where there were unicorns in Gravity Falls, because Norman said he knew.
When Mabel said her name, how it was very young, they believed that she was wrong, because the name Mabel did not fit very well for ponies, and that is why they believed her name was Maple and she got used to being called that, although she still remembers that his name is Mabel and she doesn't remember being human, but she remembers having parents and a brother, but she remembers his name was Manson. She just started calling him Dipper, when she was teleported to Equestria and Dipper just remember that someone, doesn't know who called him Dipper once and he liked the nickname.
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wonderful. All good. Thank you.
Aw, that was sweet of you giving Scotaloo that grappling hook...
And Crysalis! Well..didn't see that coming...
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While placing Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo, I remembered that Mabel or Maple does not have the grappling hook and does not need it because it can fly very well and it occurred to me that Scootaloo had the grappling hook.
I also wanted Maple to remember the ones that disappeared, but only the ones that she knows, because she wanted someone to take care of Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash and Pinkie's pets.
And in the last chapter I gave a little track of Chrysalis, when Fluttershy said that Schmebulock had said that there was a unicorn with wings.
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Oh...clever and VERY sneaky. Good for you.
Uh...wait...is that it? I think the rest of the chapter got cut off!
Don't you mean residence?
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If you're right, I said earlier it was too long and that's why I cut it in two.
Another winner!
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I thought you were going to comment that Pinkie managed to avenge Abraham Lincoln of wax.
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Oh, that was a good scene too, I always wondered about that...
This was great!
I did not see the whole thing with Cozy Glow coming!
And thanks for bringing Spike into this!
Him being here brings up so many possibilities! I'll bring them up in our conversation thread so as not to spoil them for other readers...
I liked the fourth wall breaking AND Dipper dissecting her plans...very nice...
Oh, that is very clever! Good for Dipper!
p.s. What did you think of my ideas?
Uh...why do you keep referring to Chrysalis as 'he'?
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Sorry for the spelling mistakes, but English is not my original language and I use the translator to publish the chapters and don't hesitate to correct me, if I'm wrong.
If you want more people seeing this you should post it on some of the groups so that more people can see it.
It's a good story
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It's fine, I have friends with similar issues. Will do.
I like this, nice to see you evolving Twilight and Dipper's relationship a bit!
Are you doing 'Dipper v.s. Manliness' yet? Please tell me you'll at least consider my ideas!
So... Are Discord and Bill going to team up in this story?
hiya, I noticed that you seem to be having some difficulty with your grammar, and was wondering if you'd like me to proofread your fic, since it's only a short way from being a stellar fic, if you don't want help though I understand, and I won't pester you.
I liked this chapter! I felt you introduced Ember very well and the interaction between Twilight and Dipper- although short -was very sweet and cute.
I can't help but notice some of my comments are missing...did they get deleted? Did you get that message I sent you about my ideas for the next chapter?
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English is not my original language, I would appreciate it if you find more errors and tell me to correct them.
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I plan to make them meet, but there is still a long way to go.
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It would be a lot easier if I perhaps had editing permissions, but if that's not possible, I could edit it in a separate document and send you a PDF of it?
I like this, especially the heart-to-heart between Spike and Dipper. But while I feel like you did the 'Pacifica is still arrogant/cheating during contest' thing well, you should probably have that confronted by everyone...maybe the next chapter?
Did you mean to say everywhere or everyone?
Alright, I was trying not to criticize you for this...but you REALLY need to find a beta or proofreader. I'm sorry, I like your story and this chapter...but it's REALLY hard to read.
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I already corrected it
Ummmm...okay...are you...EVER going to do anything with Chrysalis? You keep teasing that you'll do something with her...but then you keep finding excuses for her to not do anything...so what was even the point of bringing her into the episode at all?
Also...what was that with the entity? He showed them applejack and Applebloom showing up....but nothing came of it, you didn't do anything with it. ....so what was the point.
Sorry man, but it feels like you didn't accomplish anything with this chapter. It just feels like you had all the characters do random, pointless stuff that did nothing...
I liked this chapter, it fixed all the issues I had...I'm confused why you didn't just merge the last two chapters into one..but other then that, great job!
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Uh... No you didn't. The synopsis still says "An entity begins to bring chaos to ever Equestria, making characters from that world disappear and take them to the world of Gravity Falls".
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How do you think the synopsis turned out now?
Wait...I thought we avoided Wendy being Robbie's boyfriend?
In any case, I enjoyed this episode. I'm gald you(mostly) avoided the whole thing with Robbie. I'm not saying that the cannon was necessarily a bad episode...but it had very preachy 'nonviolent' aesop that just felt very forced...like the writers just slapped it on last minute because they couldn't think of a way to rest everything to the 'status quo'.
So this was a HUGE improvement, thank you!
Also, good to see Chrysalis actually getting involved for once!
No offense man, but your constantly teasing that she'd get involved...only to abort it at the last minute was starting to get annoying.
So all and all, great chapter all around and I look forward to the next one!
Well, ANY 'little Dipper' episode that no longer has the horrible 'Mable being an ungrateful jerk and that whole being idiots over who's taller' bits will only ever be an improvement! So thank you for that!
Also liked that bit in the end where Twilight made sure they got the money...but the tax collector got it? Do I understand that right?