"It's not very good." ~ PPEF1 on almost every one of his stories
Button Mash's flank is blank. He goes up to the Cutie Mark Crusaders for some help. Luckily for him, the Cutie Mark Crusaders have had a 100% success rate when it comes to giving ponies their cutie marks so surely, they can do it for good ol' Button.
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Okay. this has jumped to the top of the New Stories thing twice now. What the fuck? No I'm not sorry about the language. It just doesn't make any sense.
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Would you care to explain?
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I keep seeing this story jump to the front of the line in the New Story que. Only to be replaced by my latest story a little bit later.
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That's odd
Not a bad start, but the prose is a bit on the bland side. You make flat statements as to what the CMC are doing, though there isn't a clear POV character. Maybe spice it up with showing us their body language? For example;
Turn into:
This informs us more about their emotions, while using common phrases to sell the emotions. Basically, avoid writing like Maud Pie :P.
Also, why casually drop youtube as a name? When is this set? Is this a Pony Life style fic where they have smartphones? Seems out of place.
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To me, I was imagining in my head they just had blank expressions on their faces and then just randomly started bursting out in laughter. And about the YouTube thing, I knew someone was gonna bring that up. And to that I say... how else is Button going to watch my videos ;) ... and play games without the internet