Chrysalis has been driven home as her father and mother are removed from the throne of Noraak Thu'm, and must flee to Equestria to remain safe. There though she meets Cadence, a beautiful girl who she falls in love with, and has conquered her heart. This is the story of the love that develops between Chrysalis and Cadence, and Chrysalis's rise to power as queen of the Changelings.
Totally Cadence/Chrysalis shipping, and definently Alternate Universe. Also it is very much human!
Cover-art by magisapphire on deviantart
Chapters (4)
Get a fav and a thumb.
Edit: FIRST. Sorry, but it's my first first.
Question, do you want harsh critic or friend? Also, I saved a copy of your chap and I'm revamping it.
I am intrigued. I shall thumb up and fav
only two errors i have seen which is fairly impressive.
“Hi! I’m Cadence!” and when Chrysalis was able to see Cadence, she blushed as she saw the pretty girl in front of her extending her hand to shake and help her up.
“Um…Hi, my name’s…Chrysalis” she said reaching up to shake her hand, not knowing that fate would have these two stay with each other forever.
aren't they supposed to be 'hoof'?
“Apparently things have been bad in Noraak Thu’m, so many of them fled to Equestria” the stated as she served breakfast to her husband and daughter.
I think you might of put 'the' instead of 'he' :3
That is all for now and I anticipate more chapters
Actually i was just looking for that shipping about a week ago^^
interesting... i'll read later
you get a fav
i with hold my thumb till after the first kiss but before saint Patrick blows a fuse about them being together
edit: a screw it have the thumb
this is really well writen so far
and didn't see any grammical errors
1263694 I take it you didn't see the human tag?
Missing a few periods, and the paragraphs need spacing. Apart from that, it looks like different characters with pony names stuck to them, but I can't really complain right now since its AU. I'll just have to wait and see.
so many feels
Hello there, can you answer my last comment?
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S-Sorry about that, I've been very busy lately since I work nights, um...let's go with friendly
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No problem, and here goes.
It's a good story concept, one of which is severly under-rated and unused, and you've taken a rather nice spin on the events. It does hurt me to see that you're doing the swap of POV's, where you speak in third person with everyon's thoughts being brought to the for-front. This makes it hard to decipher who's thinking or saying what, and has made many good stories fail. It's not something that is inherently bad, just something that I personally don't like. If you don't mind, I'm making a re draft of your first chapter with it only following Chrysalis's POV. I don't mean to intrude, but if I gave you the link to it on google docs and allowed you access, would you mind reading it and seeing my problems?
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Sure o.o I would mind at all ^^ Send a link whenever ^^
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(╯°□° ) ╯︵ (Human tag)
God I'm stupid!
edit: just began the reading of the second chapter and I came across this:
Human tag you say? x3
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It's just to differentiate one from the other ^^'
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Yes, human tag.
Cadence and Chrysalis as childhood friends? This is new.
Oh man... I forgot what is meant to feel compassion... Wait. Compassion? AHHH! IT BURNS!!!!!
I AM SO SORRY FOR THE LONG WAIT! T-T
SHIT JUST GOT REAL
and celestia good job 
Glad to see you're back and working on the story again!
Don't let it happen again if you value your life...
Joking!
Maybe...
couldnt stop laughing at celestia
“Hot lesbian sex is hot lesbian sex”
great end to a great story 
So now write the "Hot lesbian sex" Extra-clop-Chapter, OK?^^
1541521 mayhap you could write it?
Trollestia strikes again!
a fun little story that I enjoyed. Though, even mentioning they had sex would have been awesome.
Hah! One of the best shipping fics I ever read. And I don't even really read shipping fics. Pervlestia has some of the best lines!
You sir really did this couple justice.
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Thank you, I'm actually looking to do another Chrysalis/Cadence fic.
To Kill a Mocking Bird Reference?
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I wish someone see this fanfic turn into Fan Movie.
This more Movie script.
So I love see that happen don't you.
4041497 plz do? this was beautiful...i sadly cried at one point.
also...
KILL SAINT PATRICK!!!!!
4626971 Don't do it saint Patrick is a saint A SAINT
4652908 yeah...siant of the damned maybe
...how dare he hate on chrysalis. that love-bug is a lustful beauty.
4652919 O_O
4652945 ok...maybe my mental s-drive is realy broken...but it doesnt chang the hotness that is the queen.
4653095 woha but you are right about 10%
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you want some too?
4656042 OH GOD yes please
4656046
ok darling?
4656065 what ever
im gonna play Xbox
4656065 IM EVIL
a very cute ending
This was one of the best stories I've read yet. ^^ You really pulled off the CadenceXChrysalis shipping well.
hah gaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy come on now we all know it was a comin so there beep it
Corrections offered without malice.
in description:
definitely
“Good morning Canterlot,” the girl said, stretching herself.
daddy,” she said
to Equestria,” he stated
get it,” he said
after all,” Saint Patrick
relaxing,” Valentine answered.i
(And so on. Speech tags should have a comma inside the quotes, if it's not a question mark or exclamation point.)
You could move the A/N into an actual A/N section now that they've added that functionality.
aren't
Is it blooming or blossoming?
Might want to make that consistent.
Chrysalis
Queen's
Queen's
Laying it on a bit thick there, Chryssy.
YOUR
Changelings
guards'
a wedding
... Cadance is totally changeling Pinkie Pie there.
Them feels...