The town was bathed in screams as ponies were either being tortured or killed on the spot. The Gryphons had gone for the most vulnerable town in Equestria. Twilight and the others, along with the nearly-dead Gilda, were surrounded by four elite Gryphon hunters. One of them stood right in front of Twilight, his head arched down.
“What are any of you going to do? Ponies are weak, so there must be some reason that bitch over there chose you over her kind. What was it? Was it the fear she inspired that made her feel like she was on top of the world? Was she turned by that pitiful flight school up in Cloudsdale? Perhaps she just likes the plot.” The gryphon reached a talon over and grabbed Twilight’s flank, making her blush as well as cry out in slight pain. He let go immediately; he was not about to touch a pony any longer than he had to, disgusting creatures as they were in his eyes.
“So what makes you all so special? Perhaps you over there can tell me?” the hunter looked at Rainbow Dash as he spoke. Twilight took the chance to erect a barrier. The gryphon drew his head back, one of his feathers scorched as it touched the surface. He grinned.
“Not bad, pony. But there was a reason we were such formidable enemies to you ponies centuries ago. Our bodies produce a natural oil that acts as a solution for anti-magic. That barrier won’t hold long enough for you to gasp.” The Gryphon clenched his talon and punched the barrier. Sure enough, it shattered, knocking Twilight back into Fluttershy who yelped in surprise. The gryphons around their leader laughed as he did, their chortles sounding like a train wreck.
“So, which of you ponies has the guts to try and fight me? I mean, you won’t have any guts afterward, but you might as well show them to me before I rip ‘em out! So, who’s first?” he demanded.
Among the screams, there was an indescribable sound that repeated. It grew louder and clear as it approached. The leader tilted his head as he tried to make the word out.
“-ne, Mine, Mine, Mine, Mine, Mine!” The next thing any pony or gryphon saw/heard was a loud crashing sound, followed by bones breaking and a squawk from the gryphons’ leader. A cloud of dust erupted from the impact and everyone’s vision was barred as sounds continued to escape the wall. Ripping and chewing sounds could be heard, as well as more bone breaking. The dust showed no sign of clearing, but it was forced apart by two large, very strange wings that hung upside down from a Purple and green Dragon’s back. The ponies looked at him in awe. He was completely different from the Spike they’d seen before. He was wild and without sense. His clawed hands were stained in gryphon blood and what was once the surrounding gryphons’ leader was now a shredded husk of red meat and feathers, with bites taken out of it.
Spike’s tail flicked up and down, showing sharp, pointy barbs on the end. The gryphons took one look at him and realised their primary target was standing right in front of them.
“You son of a bitch!” one of the gryphons shouted out at him. While Spike would have made a comment on that, he just growled with glee and swung his tail. The gryphon was impaled on the spikes immediately. The muscles in the dragon’s tail worked with ease as the husk of yet another gryphon was lifted into the air and sent flying upward. He then shot toward the other two, his wings causing a trail of dirt to follow on each side of him. With two gryphons left, he went for the one on the left first. He grabbed its head and jumped over it. He grabbed the gryphon by the beak with two hands and used his weight and momentum to force the gryphon’s head to lift backwards. There was a sharp crack and the body went limp. With weight beginning to press on Spike, he flipped the gryphon open and forced it to eat dirt, resulting in its face being smashed in. He then went for the last gryphon that was too stunned by the sight of his comrades’ demise to move. With his head caught in Spike’s grip, he cried out for reinforcements before his skull caved in and he was silent as the aftermath of this battle would become.
Out of immediate danger, Spike turned to his friends and approached them. Needless to say, most, especially Fluttershy were so scared of what he’d done that they backed away. Rainbow Dash remained behind to protect Gilda.
“Yep! Just gonna stand here and keep bein’ awesome!” Spike declared as he knelt down and examined the wounded Gilda, much to Dash’s displeasure.
“Spike… how did you do that? That was amazing!” Twilight said, avoiding eye contact with the bloody masses behind her.
“Uh, hello? Awesome… right here!” Spike said as he gestured to himself. Rainbow Dash made an involuntary huff at that. “Second only to the fastest Pegasus in Equestria.” he added afterward. Spike made one last quick observation.
“Looks like Gilda’s gonna be fine. You should take her to Zecora so she can quicken the healing process.” he said, standing to his feet.
“Wait, what about you?” Twilight asked, seeming to be the only one capable of forming words among her friends.
“I’m going to look for Applebloom, Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo.” he said. With those names brought up, Applejack and Rarity both called out their respective siblings’ names, while Dash called out Scootaloo’s.
“Spike, please hurry. Big Mac’s probably trying his best to protect them, but if he’s going up against anything like those gryphons, he won’t last much longer.” Twilight said urgently. Spike grinned at her and nodded.
“Make tracks then. We’ll meet you at Zecora’s.” Before he could fly away to save the younger fillies, Twilight pulled the dragon down to her level and gave him a strong kiss. There was a smashing sound as the wards placed around Spike’s body solidified and smashed to pieces. Spike felt like a large weight had been lifted off of his body as his scales darkened slightly.
“War is hell.” he said. With a single powerful flap, he was sky high, looking down on Ponyville. He then noticed a large platoon of gryphons flying in formation headed for the already defenceless town. He grinned with glee as his magic flowed through him like adrenaline.
“Your majesty, you brought me a present?!” he began to laugh as the magic in him built up. With a loud roar, his wings transformed into a pair of giant arms. A small sphere of dark purple energy formed between the hands, flashing with green electricity as it grew. Spike’s voice grew distorted and echoed throughout Ponyville. He imagined every head turned towards him as he unleashed the dark ball upon the oncoming reinforcements. In the distance, the swarm could be seen scattering. But it was useless as the ball exploded into a wave of dark energy and a dense cloud of red replaced the gryphons as their bodies exploded upon contact with the wave.
The crusaders, along with Big Mcintosh, were staring up at the sky in wonder as somepony they didn’t know destroyed a stealth unit of gryphons. The group that had surrounded the four took to the air in search of their new target, leaving the crusaders with a badly injured Big Mac. He collapsed to the ground as his legs buckled.
“Mcintosh!” Applebloom cried as the three fillies gathered around the battered stallion.
“Now girls… y’all have ta get ta safety. Make your way to Zecora’s. Ah’ve a feelin’ Applejack and the others will be there. Leave me behind and go, now… git!” Mcintosh croaked as his words fell in deaf ears. The young mares didn’t budge, but remained by his side.
“Ah won’t leave you, big bro!” Applebloom cried into his coat.
“And we’re not leaving Applebloom.” Sweetie Belle added. Scootaloo said nothing as she wished she had somepony to run to.
To all their dismay, a lone gryphon landed neatly near them. “Ooh, this must be my lucky day. Two ponies full of apples and a couple of scrawny toothpicks for afters.” she said, cracking her talons. The fillies leaned into the large stallion, ready for their demise as the gryphon raised her talon over her head, ready to strike. She was about to when something landed between her and her prey. A gryphon had fallen to his death, the force of impact with the ground crushed his body. his talon stuck up in the air, the claws bent at unnaturally odd angles. His wings had been ripped from his body, enabling the fall. The female began to fret as she felt a presence near her.
“What you looking at dugong?” a creepy, distorted voice called out from above. She looked up to see the blackened body of a dragon with his arms crossed, just hovering horizontally above her.
“Dragon?” she asked.
“Crazy gryphon. Whoops, tautology!” He threw his leg toward the gryphon, his clawed foot kicking her head into the ground. The impact made a small crater that stopped just short of the four ponies.
“Hello, fillies and Gentlecolts. Tonight’s special is kick-ass gryphon death with a serving of pony rescues on the side.” he said, landing gracefully in front of the ponies.
“Spike, we can’t leave Big Mac. He’s too injured to move and Applebloom won’t leave him.” Scootaloo said, jumping up to him. She ignored the black scales and green eyes.
“You say that like it’s a problem. You’re talking to the most bitchin’ dragon this side of Celestia’s rule.” The black dragon took in a deep breath and blew a massive green flame at the remaining three ponies. They disappeared from there instantly, undoubtedly headed for Zecora’s. Scootaloo shuddered at the memory of going through the fire. Spike looked back at Ponyville and grinned.
“Anypony else you can think of saving?” he asked.
Scootaloo took a second to think, but wasted no time with her response. “Miss Cheerilee!” she replied. Spike nodded and grinned up at the sky as a whole bunch of gryphons descended upon the two, having found their target.
“Ballin’!”
Twilight and the others managed to navigate the Everfree forest to Zecora’s Applejack helped Rainbow Dash with Gilda and placed her gently down on the couch that Zecora had laid out for her. Not a minute had passed when Big Mac and two of the ‘Cutiemark Crusaders’ had popped into existence outside the hut. Appljecak hurried over to her siblings while Rarity braced for a leaping hug from Sweetie Belle.
Rainbow Dash had left Gilda’s side in search of Scootaloo, but grew heavy when the little chicken of a pony wasn’t present.
“Where’s Scoots?” Dash asked, fretting.
“Spike has her. He sent us ahead.”
Twilight sighed in relief. “Then I guess so long as she’s with Spike, we have nothing to worry about.” there was a moment’s silence before Twilight looked around. “Um… Where’s Pinkie Pie?”
The group scanned the immediate area before the pink pony emerged from behind Big Mac.
“Here I am. Like I told Spike, I’d turn up near the end of the story.” she said, bouncing around the group.
“Pinkie? Wait, what story, what end?” Twilight asked, trying to find a book on the mare’s person.
“Oh, but don’t worry, Twilight. There’s still another Chapter after this one. But that only makes it the end of ‘Book One’. There’s another on the horizon according to the author.” Pinkie said, bouncing up and down on Big Mac who seemed unable to feel it.
“Pinkie, what book?” Twilight urged.
“The Darkness of Love, duh! It’s based loosely around yours and Spike’s life. Jeez, Twilight, I’d have thought you’d have read it, what with you being the bookworm and all.”
Twilight gasped as something terrible dawned upon her. “Oh no, my books!” she cried.
“Got ‘em.” a voice said from behind her. Twilight turned to gaze upon the blood addled dragon with rich purple scales, clutching a sack full of the library’s books in one hand, an unconscious Cheerilee under his arm, and Scootaloo perched happily on his head.
“Spike!” Twilight gasped, rushing up to him.
“Nice to see you thought of the books first. I feel so loved.” he chuckled. Scootaloo hopped off his head, buzzing slowly to the ground where Dash scooped her up and held her tightly. The sack of books fell to the ground as Spike wrapped his arms around Twilight, and the two of them shard a kiss with the kind of passion they wished they’d had the time for earlier on.
a very good read before work!
Thanks!
So. Many. Hellsing Abridged. Quotes. XD
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Simply amazing.
this is guna be DAMN GOOD WOOOOOOO
DBZ Abridged Returns. The Millifore Family Approves!
Pinkie, Stop breaking the fourth page(wall substatute)
Looking forward to the next story
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That attack where his wings turned into big hands and shot a ball of dark energy was from the game Asura where he goes into berserk mode.
Your story is so full of references and I like it.
A bit of Asura's Wrath in there. This is so AWESOME
Btw, that's Macintosh, not Mcintosh
Were all those spelling errors on purpose? Cause I got kinda confused by 'em.
Gotta say I lost a lot of love for this story in this chapter.
I really don't like you the ponies were basically made helpless before the gryphons. Anti-magic feather oil that instantly shatters a barrier from one of the strongest unicorns? So basically unicorn magic is useless against them, and the natural weaponry makes pegasi mostly helpless... Even Big Mac, who is close to the peak example of earth pony strength (if he's not the peak himself) was unable to take down any.
Given that Spike took down Celestia with a single hit, this fic does not subscribe to the "Goddes Mode" Celestia, so without Spike there is really nothing protecting Equestria from the gryphons. So why did they not take over yet?
I get that you want a badass Spike, but you really overdid it. And did you really have to make everyone and everything else so pathetic?
1650838 Ah, but that all changes in the next story.
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I agree, he basically made Spike THE only thing that could stop gryphons. If you look at any fearsome enemy faction in fiction, they're defeatable by simple means and the right strategy, even without the obligatory "superweapon".
Reapers? They could be destroyed by conventional means, i.e. ship cannons. Covenant? Decent tactics and firepower can take those fuckers down. Ceph? Same as the Covenant.
For Chrissake, The Grimm Reaper, you not only made Spike OP as fuck without explaining his dark magic or angst, but you made everyone besides him helpless. I've enjoyed the story until this point, but this is the first time I've ever used these words: Your protagonist is a Mary Sue.
Spike and vegeta used petora fusion
Just standing here looking awesome
That was great, how could you hate on that? Couldn't stay working at school because I whanted to read this! Got a C+ lol.
This was yet another amazing chapter, can't wait for the next one, and have a wonderful Thanksgiving.
Awww hail yeah
That DBZ Abridged reference
Lets check my email before work *darkness has been updated foo!* Damn it! I have to wait until i get home before I can read it! *after work* so many hellsing abridge and badassery!
A New chapter, and Spike is on a Rampage!
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I see what you did their.
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you cheeky dick waffle
You are credit to team
Someone sure loves Dragon Ball Z Abridged.
1651383Yes, yes they do.
I see 3 big problems on this chapter. And none of them is the overpower Spike.
First of: How in the hell did the gryphons invaded Equestria and reached Ponyville before Spike could? The gryphon's king had to fly all the way back to his kingdom and then send his warriors to invade Equestria, Spike only had to fly right back to Ponyville. So it doesn't make any sense that the gryphons arrived first.
Second: We already get from past chapters that you like abridged series. But here you're just over doing it. And instead of funny it's anoying, cuz you don't allow the reader to take the scenes seriously. Which wouldn't be so bad if this was a comedy, but it ITN'S. And you can't change that at the last two chapters. Wich brings us to the last problem of this chapter: Spikes new persoanlity. In previous chapters you presented Spike like a quiet, cold, introvert, and somewhat insecure dragon (among other things). I understand that you may need or want to change that a bit with all the invation and shit going on. But why could you possibly make him a mix between Abridged Vegeta and Alucard, that has nothing to do with you previous character?.
I mean, Can you imagine if at the end of SW a Return of the Jedi, Lucas decided to make Luke behave like Flash for no reason? NO! You can't change you characters, specially not the main character right at the climax of the story like that.
Another awesome chapter.
My two favorite lines from this chapter. You sir, deserve ALL the mustaches.
1651570 listen just shut up and if you don't like the story don't read it. I find this new Spike pretty awsome even if I didn't get most of the references.
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Finally someone else realizes!
And on that note... Bitches love dragons!
Holy fack, I can't wait for moar, Moar, MOAR!
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- Thanks by new chapter.
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Yes it is awesome. But is not the character you've been working with, and is an awkward and unnecesary change, that would have totally worked out in other circumstances.
I do like the story, cuz is a good story. That's why I'm complaining. Because all the changes youre making are to huge and are ruining it. Even if the majority of the conformist and easily impressionable readers tell you otherwise.
In any case, theres only ne chapter left, so I might as well finish what I start.
Good chapter. I wish there was another.... since spike didn't say it this time, I will..... shit.
Spike IS overpowered, i mean sure i love it when spike is made badass but hes only a teenage dragon....I mean sure he can probably be able to hit celestia since she wouldn't see hostility from spike coming but she wouldnt fly across the room unconscious. Also you really would expect twilight to be able to fend off atleast one and piss off the rest which would have been a nice cue for spike to enter and kick ass. Also you really did change spike throughout the story.lastly big mac can freaking accidently break trees with his left hoove so that means he can hold his own and very much protect three young mares. Remember im only sharing my oponion hoping u might listen but its not obligatory, this is your story and u can write whatever you want but im just saying what seemed a bit off to me
- The change was necessary, because, it was in this form that the history begun, with violence and death.
- But, see: there are some questions.
- Whon is the Spike master in black magic?
- Why the King lied?
- Why Celestia is so weak and frightened?
FUCK THE POLICE! THIS IS AWESOME!
Pinkie you fu-
What now?
-nny little fella, stay awesome. How in hell did she-?
I like to brake the 4th wall!
Ah! True dat.
This seems to become very nice short "kickin' some ass like a bauss." -fic. You stay awesome too
Awesome job
Alright. The only reason I can really think of for the change of Spike's personally change is the battle and allowing his dark to be more in charge. He was actively trying to push everypony else away. He didn't want to get attached. He's attached (to Twilight) and is going all out to protect what he now considers home.
Big Mac was surrounded by a group of griffons. How many I couldn't tell you. Big Mac is strong, but strength isn't always enough. Especially, against trained carnivores that have to constantly take down prey (maybe some as big as Big Mac.)
The ponies being unable to do anything I do disagree with. Granted, they were probably prepared for this attack. It would surprise me if these griffons were nearby, waiting to attack if their king didn't have their captive. I can see them being able to neutralize Twilight's magic, but natural oils that secrete from their feathers?
I look forward to see how the next chapter will tie most everything together. After all, this is book I, according to Pinkie.
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The Reapers could only be destroyed by ship cannons while they were charging their lasers or their shields were disrupted somehow. Just had to reply to this, I hate it when people say they could be defeated like that.
On note about Spike, though, I expected Twilight would be able to take them out or at least hold them with ease. Third strongest magical being in the world, hello?
And Big Mac. I really thought Spike would get there and Big Mac be standing over an entire platoon of Griffins with some battle scars or something. One of the strongest earth ponies alive, hello?
His kicking Celestia in the face in the previous chapter was, although probably one of my favorite scenes ever out of all the fanfiction I've read on this site, also just plain impossible. He curb stomped a Goddess. Suspension of disbelief has been breached.
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That was a Reaper Destroyer. For all we know, those things have no shields and stronger armor. Plus, it was peing bombarded from orbit by only a few ships, judging by the amount of explosions. And since the projectiles had to travel into the atmosphere, they were likely weakened as well. I mean, we see the allied fleet at the end of ME3 destroying the Reaper fleet fairly effectively, so I hold some doubt about your claim.
Glad to hear that the "end of the story" isn't actually the end of the series. Also, you're going a bit heavy on Pinkie's wall breaking for my tastes, but everyone is different.