Well sorry to say but there went all my intrest. was really looking forward to the interesting dynamic of twilights embarrassed reactions and the banter between her and the former queen. reguadless hope the rest of the story gos well
That's part of what I was intrested in. Watching chrysalis embarrassing the crap out of twilight while she's trying to have sex with her friends was a concept I found intersting.
1685226 Ah, well, sorry. I just... it's not working. I'm not going to write something I'm not happy with, let alone post it. It'd be worse than Fifty Shades of Grey.
I have to say, A lot of writer's don't know when they can't write something. Nice to see one who does! Maybe with some practice you'll end up writing some funny sex scenes but Don't let the lack of it deter you. I'll for one be loving this story just as much!
1685750 Well, one day I might do a humanized ponies story, and then, oh the sex they can have. Most of my knowledge ends when you remove fingers from the equation.
This story doesn't really need clop I like it anyway, but if you really want to write clop you can always try reading some for Ideas as to how it works with 2 ponies. But yeah I don't really care in this ones case a humerous Twilight as a changeling sounds great to me as is (For the most part Dark and/or tragic stories are not my thing, some of them can pique my interest but in the end I tend to regret reading them, I like happy endings).
I can't speak for the guys who are interested in only the cloppy sections (I tend to skip over those myself), but I'm here because of the strong storyline, and I will stay for the storyline. So don't worry, write on!
It is so good to writer who can admit when they don't know how to write something. It's especially refreshing when you've recently been in an argument with the king of stuck-up jackasses "FelixDawn" Also, I personally think it's a good idea that you're avoiding the clop scenes. I've seen many a good fic ruined because they slowly changed into nothing more than an over-complicated clop fic.
I usually skip clop scenes, but as I was about to hit the next chapter button I couldn't help but be amused at the length. I'd be annoyed if clop was why I read stories.
How is this any different from human sex? You just use a few different words, like hooves instead of hands.
I don't really get what the problem here is, and before you judge your own work as bad, maybe you could show it to your viewers first? I bet they won't think about it as bad.
the dark tags are not bad in and of themselves it just means the story is grity, its the grimdark ones you have to watch out for those things will give you nightmares...in fact one of my favorite twi/chrysi fics has the dark tag iirc, the trilogy queen no more, hive alive, and queen of equestria its a lovely series theres also 'six queens' a sadly...dead...series of stories that is 'basicly' the same as this one but a bit happier, chrysi realizes she done fucked up on deaths door and transfers her authority to the mane six in death, along with her power and the status of changeling queen, the swarm arives at canterlot to swear fealty to them, comidey and drama ensue
Yeah, a vast majority of human positions are (in reality) much more difficult, uncomfortable, or just plain impossible on a pony frame. Cartoon physics and flexibility help,, but eventually you realize that it's easier to just imagine anthro and more on.
Well sorry to say but there went all my intrest.
was really looking forward to the interesting dynamic of twilights embarrassed reactions and the banter between her and the former queen.
reguadless hope the rest of the story gos well
1684950
There's still going to be that? I'm just not doing the actual clop?
meh
1684972
That's part of what I was intrested in. Watching chrysalis embarrassing the crap out of twilight while she's trying to have sex with her friends was a concept I found intersting.
Other than that sounds ok
1685226
Ah, well, sorry. I just... it's not working. I'm not going to write something I'm not happy with, let alone post it. It'd be worse than Fifty Shades of Grey.
1685260
Perfectly understandable and it still sounds neat and as long as you enjoy writing the story that's really all that matters
Damn, sorry to see that you are unhappy with your clop-writing.
Still, this shaped up to be a great Fic and the lack of on-screen sex by no means deters me.
Do continue.
For Great Justice!
I'm just here for the story really. I've been getting into the stories with Twilight being turned into a changeling.
So sad to see you're unhappy with the clop scene. Probably for the better since you can now change the rating to teen.
1685538
I'd have to delete the scene in the first chapter.
I have to say, A lot of writer's don't know when they can't write something. Nice to see one who does! Maybe with some practice you'll end up writing some funny sex scenes but Don't let the lack of it deter you. I'll for one be loving this story just as much!
1685750
Well, one day I might do a humanized ponies story, and then, oh the sex they can have. Most of my knowledge ends when you remove fingers from the equation.
This story doesn't really need clop I like it anyway, but if you really want to write clop you can always try reading some for Ideas as to how it works with 2 ponies. But yeah I don't really care in this ones case a humerous Twilight as a changeling sounds great to me as is (For the most part Dark and/or tragic stories are not my thing, some of them can pique my interest but in the end I tend to regret reading them, I like happy endings).
Hey as long as it's a good fic who cares about clop. I'ma stick around to see where this goes.
Clop or no clop- the story is based on originality and giggles. 10/5 for you.
You know... You could TRY to write the clop, and ask for feedback.
Listen to your readers.
Practice...
And become better!
There goes my wing bonner!
I can't speak for the guys who are interested in only the cloppy sections (I tend to skip over those myself), but I'm here because of the strong storyline, and I will stay for the storyline. So don't worry, write on!
It is so good to writer who can admit when they don't know how to write something. It's especially refreshing when you've recently been in an argument with the king of stuck-up jackasses "FelixDawn"
Also, I personally think it's a good idea that you're avoiding the clop scenes. I've seen many a good fic ruined because they slowly changed into nothing more than an over-complicated clop fic.
1704008 damnit, now whenever I see that smiley all I'll be able to think is "Dinkleberg..."
or "Lulamoon."
... FUCK now I have random ideas!
We don't care if there is no clop, its not what we read for after all clevernoob.com/forums/public/style_emoticons/default/princess_luna.png
Try practicing with some one-shots, then come back and do this chapter.
LMAO
last chapter: "next chapter will be a clop scene"
this chapter: short as hell
I had to laugh at the chapter. All those people interested, and this chapter is less than the last.
>there won't actually be any clop in this story
You bastard!
did Trollestia come by?
I usually skip clop scenes, but as I was about to hit the next chapter button I couldn't help but be amused at the length. I'd be annoyed if clop was why I read stories.
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You could ask someone you know who's good at writing clop to help you. *Is extremely disappointed because thought I could fap to this*
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How is this any different from human sex? You just use a few different words, like hooves instead of hands.
I don't really get what the problem here is, and before you judge your own work as bad, maybe you could show it to your viewers first? I bet they won't think about it as bad.
And so... We were trolled...
This somehow does not anger me.
In fact. I chuckled.
6 laughing Dashies.
the dark tags are not bad in and of themselves it just means the story is grity, its the grimdark ones you have to watch out for those things will give you nightmares...in fact one of my favorite twi/chrysi fics has the dark tag iirc, the trilogy queen no more, hive alive, and queen of equestria its a lovely series
theres also 'six queens' a sadly...dead...series of stories that is 'basicly' the same as this one but a bit happier, chrysi realizes she done fucked up on deaths door and transfers her authority to the mane six in death, along with her power and the status of changeling queen, the swarm arives at canterlot to swear fealty to them, comidey and drama ensue
Yeah, a vast majority of human positions are (in reality) much more difficult, uncomfortable, or just plain impossible on a pony frame. Cartoon physics and flexibility help,, but eventually you realize that it's easier to just imagine anthro and more on.