If you knew your time had come, what would you think back to? Would you think back to all of the happy memories that you made, or all of the sad ones? But then, what if you didn't have those memories, forever lost to the changing times and replaced by memories of what could have been?
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Aww...sad, but certainly sweet in the end. Good work.
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Thanks :) That's what I was trying to shoot for.
Very nice, Ortumbra. Evokes all the right feelings. A gold star for you :D
Not what I expected from a fic written at 3 AM in notepad :P
Flying Wingnut (or, as you may know me, AmusableBman.)
That was truly impressive, sir, especially your use of descriptors.
The only thing that it lacks is aesthetic appeal (whenever dialogue, or a significant idea, is introduced, start a new line/space, but how you do the spacing is entirely your call), which should be a very easy fix for someone like you.
All in all, it was very nice.
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I'm going to assume you mean how people will normally emphasize a new paragraph by having a line of space in between each one? I thought about doing that, but ultimately decided not to due to the fact that books don't have those. I never really understood why people put spaces in between paragraphs, as people still enjoy to read walls of text in books. But none the less your constructive criticism is appreciated :).