Two kids Chris and Mark always dream to be in the world of Equestria. One night they make a wish during a Full moon. Suddenly after they make their wish princess Luna comes to visit them and aked them if they want to come to Equestria? Without another word they set off to the world of Equestria where soon they will be tested on courege, and the power of love.
the spelling and grammar are horrible, the dialogs are terrible and you miss a lot of quotes. Your mother tongue isn't English I presume? :P
2280513 I do speek english and I am doing my best on trying to make good stories ok so don't blame me for making a few set backs
2282150 *speak
Pretty good, bad grammar, otherwise it was good
2308217 Well I do the best I can
2310359 I understand :) might want to get a proofreader
2331533 thanks
Good story need work on speling but I musatmit I'm no good at speling ether good jod tho
2800025 thanks
it this really the end of this story because it still say incomplete and i love it
3239700 sorry I forgot to change incomplete to complete but I did it now so yes it is the end and I'm glad that you enjoyed it and also stay tuned for I'm in the process on making the second part of my Sonic and Shadow in Equestria series.
3239838 ok and can you make a sequel for this story in the future about the 2 married couples having a foal or foals together and doing all of the stuff a family would do together and they friends and i will stay tuned
3239865 ok sure I was thinking on doing a sequel for this story anyway.
3239955 yeah and ok
holy crap this is poorly written
3241176 know what if you don't like my story then don't read it
3241335 This is best fanfic I have ever read in my life. And I also love Richard Marx's song right here waiting.
3326592 well thank you so very much
3331141 You're quite welcome
Good story concept but ye might wanna consider gettin' a proofreader
3564391 I understand I just like making my own stories without during a editer or a proofreader I hope you understand.
nice and good work
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nice and yay lol
nice chapter and loving it
dam i love this butty of a chapter in sip this chapter dus romance, darmer very well
dam that is good feel some what short for a first one but any way me love to see a sequel at less to this one
ps: if this the chapter that rd punch that bich for what she did at the theater then yes go rainbow.
3331141 Hey Will I was wondering if I could help you with A dream come true 2 if that is alright with you.
3714143 ok sure and could you make a pic with Chris, Twilght, Mark, And Applejack
3715667 You got it and must say you picked the right person to do sketching because I like art.
3715667 okay I made a picture of what Mark and Chris should look like...
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3715958 wow it looks great man thanks
3718336 Your welcome my friend.
3718482 now we need a pic with Chris, Mark, Twilight, and Applejack with there foals for the cover for my story.
3718932 Hm... Since their twins I'll let that image from earlier slide, for Applejack, Twilight, and their foals... I'll get to work on that tomorrow.
3719350 great
3720749 Here's the full sized image...
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Very interesting story concept indeed.
However, I agree with Flying Mushroomxii. You might want to consider getting a proofreader or an editor. Some of these sentences have words repeated from last sentences that don't really need to be there.
And that kiss scene really surprised me. Seriously dude, that was a bit fast.
But the overall story so far is very good and very interesting. So I will definitely continue reading this.
4695804 yes I will a ment it was fast but I was still new at making stories but don't worry for I have a reader that is helping me with my other stories and my feature romance stories won't be as fast as this one. And im glad you decided to keep on reading this story.
PRINCESS CELESTIA'S HAVE A DAUGHTER WHOA
5807100 This is just a headcanon. It's not part of the series.
Holy shit this story sucks.
It's a pretty Good story so far
Very good I except great thing s from you