The time has come to tell Rarity what he feels and Spike is not entirely sure he's ready. But it's now or never... will she return his feelings? Will she break his heart and brush the pieces under the carpet and send him back an empty husk devoid of hope? He's almost willing to take that chance... okay, maybe not. Better get out of here before she opens the... door...
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WHO THE HELL DISLIKED THIS SO QUICKLY
THEY SHALL SUFFER
I loved it! All that preparation
lol @ the ending.
What the buck? I'm not following Wanderer D and I get an update he published a new story?
Lame. I don't care.
Cute.
2215290 Not sure why you did, but... I do wonder if that's the right way to react to it.
Yes Celestia.
Twilight is trying to tell you to eat some flowers and lay off the cake.
Yeah Spike... besides you will live 1000000000 years more than Rarity and she belongs to Wanderer D so better if you find someone else.
I laughed so hard at the... Ending? Err... paragraph after the ending. Twilight is gonna learn something new today!
Edit: P.S. Wow 2 vote-downs already?
Pretty good; that is almost exactly how I've pictured the inevitable 'reveal' in my head all this time. But that ending...
Spike, enjoy it while you can; youth doesn't last forever.
Dat ending. Write a sequel.
lol that story was cute, and frankly brings up one of my issues with Sparity.
Babs+Spike... huh.
Eh, I'm more of a TwiLuna guy myself.
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Oh, do forgive me then. I just found it suspicious an admin can notify those who don't follow him that he wrote something.
2215479 If it happens again, let me know. I noticed you're part of the World-Building Alliance. I'm wondering if members got it as well because of that, even if they don't follow me. If that's the case it's something that must be fixed, I'll still ask knighty & Xaqu to check on it.
The afterword or whatever it was was awesome.
2215329 I don't know what is up with the downvotes, I think some readers on the site just downvote everything they can.
2215513 Well... some of them are legit, given their rating history and some of them I wonder... but to be fair, RariSpike is heatedly defended by its fans.
OH MY GOD SPARITY, I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU WROTE A SPARITY FIC, I MUST UNFOLLOW YOU NOW AND TELL OTHERS TO DO THE SAME.
......is the exact way NOT to react. Well written, and I liked it.
2215523 ~shrug~ it's cute and all, but it can't happen, you pointed out exactly why. It's as likely as FlutterMac, two ponies who wouldn't say two words to one another without some prodding. Also I have to admit I enjoyed the little part at the end with Celestia.
The whole Spike and Rarity relationship is interesting. It can be used as a lesson that you shouldn't ever declare you're in love with a girl and want to marry just cause she's your first crush. But Sparity can also be used as a lesson that your "prince charming" isn't usually the one you expect him to be.
2215523
It may also just be people that are upset over this NOT being more Sweetie Chronicles.
Why would you lose followers for this? I thought it was kind of adorable.
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I concur.
2215598 To the point of downvoting it? That's... childish. Plus it won't stop me from writing what I want.
2215577 This is indeed true, good sir. There is definitely something to that effect as well.
2215486 Actually this happened to me about a week ago with a different author. I figured it was just a weird one time occurrence.
As for the story I saw the title and the first thing that popped into my head was:
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I approve a sequel of Celestia teaching Twilight about courtship.
SpikeSeed is something I see cropping up here and there. Wonder why people are becoming interested in that.
Ouch, D... Careful with those typos.
That, I believe, should be *sitting*.
You said this already. Rewording is advised.
Change that to *gonna* and you're good.
Final personal thoughts of this cute story:
I never would've thought of shipping Spike with Babs! Nice job there! And the funny joke with Twilestia made me laugh quite a bit. Cute story! I liked it a lot. I hope there's a continuation of this as well. Can't wait til your next story!
2215712 Thanks! Fixed!
Commence read.
Poor Spike. Rarity wasn't too harsh. Just a downer for him.
SpikeSeed. Huh. Never thought about that until just now...im interested.
Hell I like Sparity but you gave a fine reason why not, and it was very well laid out with a cute ending.
The ending after the ending
2215523 Honestly, I was debating whether to downvote or leave it neutral because I do enjoy a good RariSpike ship and that scene was rather heartrending. You made me feel sad for poor Spike! Although if I'd downvoted I'd've left a comment that the story is well-written and emotionally powerful, but I'd rather not watch Spike get his heart broken. My plans were ruined by the postscript, though, and had to upvote. I want to see more of that postscript scene and its aftermath.
2216003 Well, I am glad you didn't dislike it, but I also want to thank you for being the only one who might have disliked it, but left a reason why! That's a great thing to do.
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Especially if it's a comedy where Twilight has absolutely no idea what's going on.
Neat little story, sir.
Now write the side story involving Celestia and Twilight? 
(Has anyone done one in which Celestia likes Twilight but Twilight does not feel the same? I don't think I've personally come across that.)
2215282 They're not worth our time.
Dat ending.
2215262 i.chzbgr.com/completestore/12/6/29/wqqFKbW4WkuIoLYxjntOdg2.gif
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2216044 It's the only decent thing to do, unless the story (or author) is obviously entirely beyond redemption. You can't please everyone, and oughtn't try to, either. Dislikes are inevitable. But everyone deserves a reason for a dislike, even if it amounts to "I'm really not sure why, but whenever I look at this I am filled with a sense of unutterable loathing." In this case, it was more like "damn it, now I'm sad since I'd really rather hoped that would go another way and am displeased with this outcome." But the brick joke saves (if not makes entirely) the fic. Well done.
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The Equestrian Gentlecolt did one. It's extremely tragic though. And dumb. That is an opinion. And I stand by it. But committing suicide by proxy because a goddess took you as a concubine and you don't like her that way is dumb. Dumb dumb dumb dumb dumb.
Well written and well reasoned. Spike should be spending time with ponies his own age.
Only one thing didn't fit with the rest of the story logic:
Foaling doesn't come into it because ponies and dragons can't interbreed. Right?
My sides...
2217218 No, but, what if she wants kids? She'd be waiting for Spike to grow up so she would also lose her chance of having one of her own. Sure, she can definitely adopt, but it's on the same lines of not marrying just because she's waiting for him.
Awwwww
It was so adorable i couldn't take it! and the ending made me lolz all the way home! Great job on this story and i can't wait to see what you will come up with next. 
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I know it can be read that way. I just felt it could have been phrased better.
I had to try really hard to find something that could be improved, and that was the best I could come up with. This is really well written
.
hah. Fell right out of the sky.
2217218
Well, dragons have, in old and modern myths, been able to have a child with most anything, having magical reproduction and everything. It could be applied here as well.
That was very good Mr. D. I've never gone from
to
to
to
all in the span of <2,000 words. Wield this power of yours for good you silly Latias.
Loathe,
Your Antagonist
2217218 I hate it when people assume that Spike's some little child. He's somehow old enough to consider matters of the heart, clean up after an adult, travel to Canterlot, and be someone that confided in. Yet, people want to throw him in with toddlers.
As I saw the direction this story was going, I thought I would end up loathing this. Yet, Rarity's points about emotional development and limiting himself was actually quite good. The ending with Babs came off as sudden and ruined the effect though.
Maybe one day, the writer should come back to this story and consider doing an expansion where Spike slowly gets over his heartbreak, albeit not by instant rebound.