Chapter 16- Finally Erupting
Rainbow Dash and I trot through the town as we gather the last of my school supplies. I feel guilty about the fact that Rainbow is buying me everything, from my quills to my lunch bag and she even bought me a new saddlebag, telling me that it's her treat to me. I do have to admit, my old saddlebag was becoming frayed and torn, so I am thankful that she did this for me. Still, all I can think about is Cloud Chaser and wonder what he is planning to do.
Now, I need to be even more cautious when I am around him and the other Cutie Mark Crusaders, but knowing that he is going off like this behind Apple Blooms back, makes me so angry. I could hurt him without feeling an ounce of guilt.
"Hey, squirt, are you awake?" Rainbow glances down at me, making it obvious that she knows something is up.
Smiling sweetly, I nod at her. "Yup, sorry, just thinking."
Rainbow Dash laughs and ruffles my mane. "Wow, that's worrying."
I roll my eyes as I continue to walk, knowing that Rainbow is only joking around with me; I don't take her insult to heart.
I challenge Rainbow to a race without wings, knowing that I will lose by a long shot. She agrees and gives me a head start, nonetheless, she still manages to shoot ahead of me and win in ten seconds flat. Strangely, I am not so upset about losing. Maybe it's because it was against Rainbow and I knew I had no chance, or maybe it's because I just enjoyed the thrill of the race itself. Either way, I am still happy.
Finally, we have collected all my school supplies, so we stop off in Sugar Cube Corner. We find Rarity and Applejack stuck talking to Pinkie as she blabbers on about some new cupcake recipe she's got. Rainbow Dash walks over to her friends and I follow close behind.
"Why hello, Rainbow and Scootaloo, it is lovely seeing you both here, darlings," Rarity says, and she smiles her beautiful smile to greet us both.
Applejack looks away from Pinkie to greet us both too. "Howdy girls, how are y'all doing?"
Rainbow Dash smiles and ruffles my hair. "I've been doing good, just hanging out with the squirt here."
"Oh my gosh, hi guys, it's so good to see you. I love seeing my friends, did you come and visit me? that's so nice! Have a cupcake!" Pinkie Pie beams and hooves us each a cupcake before going off in a tangent about the recipe again.
I blink in confusion before looking around the group, Rarity smiles at me before pointing over to a sofa booth in the corner of the shop.
"The other crusaders should be over there, darling, I know you wouldn't want to be stuck listening to our boring old conversations," she laughs.
With that, I'm off running towards the booth as I call back to Rainbow. "I'll see you later, Dash!"
Sweetie Belle smiles at me with a look of relief across her face. Apple Bloom and Cloud Chaser must have been leaving her out again, which makes me hate him even more. He's causing both of my best friends to hurt and I hate him for it. Still, I have to resist the urge to punch him since I know that he will use his silver tongue to talk his way out of my accusations.
"Hey Scoots, how're you doing?" Sweetie smiles sweetly, I'm glad I had a chance to save her from being alone today.
"I've been doing good, hanging out with Rainbow and stuff. How about you?" I shoot a look towards Cloud Chaser, who is gradually leaning closer to Apple Bloom.
"I've been okay, do you want to come crusading with us later?" She asks and I instantly nod, knowing that I can't leave her alone with Cloud Chaser and Apple Bloom.
Pinkie Pie bounces over to take our orders. "Hey guys, how can I help you today? Do you want the regular?"
"Yes please, Pinkie, 4 strawberry milkshakes and chocolate muffins, please!" Sweetie grins as Pinkie bounces off to get our drinks for us.
I watch Cloud Chaser as I think about the events which happened earlier on today. I hate the fact that he is sitting so close to Apple Bloom, I hate the fact that he's doing this to her. He can hurt me, but he can't hurt my friends. I hate him for this.
"Why are you looking at me like that, Dodo?" Cloud Chaser sneers, bringing me back to reality.
I frown and glance at Sweetie. "Looking at you like what exactly?"
"You were giving me a dirty look, don't you dare look at me at all," he growls under his breath, causing me to instantly look away.
Pinkie Pie returns with our orders and places them down in front of us before bouncing off in her usual fashion, leaving us all to awkwardly eat in silence.
A thought suddenly crosses my mind and I realise that my Cutie Mark Crusader cape had been torn that night I crashed on my scooter, and I've had it in my saddlebag ever since. I've been meaning to ask Apple Bloom to fix it for me, since she is better at sewing in comparison to the rest of us.
"Hey, Apple Bloom, I ripped my cape the other day, do you mind fixing it for me?" I ask before taking a sip out of my milkshake.
Apple Bloom smiles at me, "Yeah, sure, chuck it over now and Ah'll take it home with me."
I lean down and reach into my saddlebag, before carefully pulling out the torn cape and chucking it over to Apple Bloom. However, the cape falls onto Cloud Chaser's milkshake, and knocks it onto his lap. He jumps up in shock and sends me a glare, before Apple Bloom reaches over and tells him to calm down.
"It's okay, Chase, y'all can share mine," she smiles sweetly before taking my cape and putting it into her own saddle bag.
Cloud Chaser smiles thankfully at her before cleaning up the mess I made with a napkin.
I continue to watch as Cloud Chaser begins leans closer and closer to Apple Bloom, and without knowing it I kick my hoof forward and hit him on the knee. Suddenly, he buckles over and falls out of the chair, hitting the ground with a thump.
Apple Bloom is up instantly, helping him back to his hooves. "What happened, Chase?"
"Somepony kicked me." He glares at me and I smile at him sweetly.
"Whatever do you mean, Chase?" I say, as I flutter my eyelashes innocently.
It all happens in a flash, Cloud Chaser has pounced at me and now has me pinned to the ground. Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle are yelling out in shock. Out of instinct, I bite down on his foreleg as hard as I can, so hard that I cause blood to flow out of the wound. He yelps in pain and I use this as an opportunity to kick him off me and punch him as hard as I can, over and over again. I can't hear anything around me; all I can see is Cloud Chaser with his bleeding nose and bruised face. I feel him punch and kick me in the stomach, but at this moment I can't feel pain, the adrenaline is pumping through me and I savour this moment of revenge. I'm not just doing this for myself; I'm doing this for Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle too.
Suddenly, cyan hooves are wrapped around me, pulling me off of Cloud Chaser's body. I look up to find Rainbow Dash, holding me as tight as she can as I struggle to get free and make Cloud Chaser suffer.
The dark blue colt jumps towards me and tries to swing at my face, but Applejack has now grabbed him and pulled him back, restraining him as well. My senses all begin to come back to me as I realise that I have the eyes of everypony on me. The taste of blood finally fills my mouth and all the pain rushes through my body.
Apple Bloom is crying hysterically as she asks Cloud Chaser if he is okay. My heart clenches when I realise that I've gotten the blame for this. This is the one thing I didn't want to happen, still, it was worth it. I hope that someday soon, Apple Bloom realises how bad of a pony this guy really is.
"What in tarnation was that all about, Scoots?" Applejack asks as she continues to restrain Cloud Chaser, even though Apple Bloom is begging her to release him.
"He started it, he jumped at me first!" I argue, anger rising in my voice with every syllable.
Cloud Chaser looks up at Applejack, his eyes full of fake hurt. "Well, that's because she kicked me, and she's been tormenting me all morning."
"I did it because you're cheating on Apple Bloom!" I blurt and the moment it's out, I want to take it all back.
Everypony stares at me in complete shock, and Apple Bloom looks between Cloud Chaser and I.
"Chase, is that true?" Apple Bloom's voice wavers as she gets to the verge of tears.
"Of course not, Bloom! You know how much she hates me, she just wants to break us up, and after all, she did just pick a fight with me." Cloud Chaser does exactly what I expected him to do: smooth talk his way out of this.
Sighing, I look at the floor and kick it with my hoof. "Apple Bloom, you know I'd never want to hurt you, we've been friends for almost three years now."
"Who are you going to believe, the victim or that crazy psychopathic filly over there?" Cloud Chaser asks.
I feel Rainbow Dash's grip tense around me, but I gently shake my head, I'm not going to fight back. It's what he wants. Still, I can't help but shake with anger at his words.
"Ah don't know what to believe anymore!" Apple Bloom cries and runs out of the shop.
Rainbow Dash silently picks me up and flies me out as well, knowing that I need to get away from all of that.
"Scoots, can you please tell me what happened now?" Rainbow says as she places me on a cloud and sits before me, looking deep into my eyes.
Finally, I give in and begin to tell her the whole story. I just hope that it's not too late to seek help from her.
welcome back, good update
that was a good chapter
welcome~ Though, its kinda sad that a friend for 3 years isn't trusting what you say....makes you wonder..
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Well he has been separating her from her support group / friends. Has been ensuring that he gets as much time as possible with her to make sure that his words and not of her friends are what she hears. And has been using threats, intimidation, and physical violence to ensure that Scoot is as far away from her friends as possible.
Alot of brainwashing / conditioning techniques. Not done as efficiently as he could do it, but pony whose not an adult, he's doing a good job. And I so want to see Dashie and Scoots destroy him. Ruin him like noponies business. I can't help but be filled with hate for that cheeky git for what he's doing to the CMC and Scoots.
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How long has she been with him? I was thinking days but sounds more like a year. I'm assuming such..maybe a month? But that's stretching it for a filly who directly faced Zecora.
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But she wasn't attracted to Zecora. Emotions do funny things to a person or a pony. Facing a pony that is just misunderstood, and is good at heart as well as needs a friend. Is different from a pony that you / well her feels romantic feelings for.
And I think it's been months. I think earlier chapters said that her original separation from the CMC for three months. Then you have all of Summer break mostly away from them. So ... I haven't been in school for a while so at most she's been away for all of summer break. Give or take a month.
I've just read this story in an hour, and I'm just gonna condense my notes into a list:
1. This story's awesome.
2. You're awesome.
3. My Little Dashie, one of the saddest MLP fanfics ever, couldn't bring me to tears. I'm one of those people who doesn't cry unless they're in actual physical pain, and if they do cry, they try to cover it up with an excuse or stop crying. The flashback chapters in this nearly brought me to tears, which is a HUGE feat. There were literally tears at my eyes. Not that I'd admit it if a friend asked.
4. Your writing is great. You capture the feeling of feeling completely unwanted by anyone (even your family) really well, if I do say so myself.
5. The only problem: the spelling and grammar. No offense to your editor, but there's still a good amount of mistakes in this chapter. If you want any more help with that, I don't mind going back and doing the other chapters and being a proofreader for the future ones.
6. Overall, one of the awesomest (it's a word. Not really, but it should be!) stories I've read, including real books. Great job, liked, favorited, and looking forward to future chapters.
2741935 Thank you :) It's good to be back...
2741947 Thanks!
2742040>>2742115 Well I'd say it's only been a couple of months... But yeah...
2742378 Can you point out which spelling and grammar errors there are? Because I tend to be good at spelling and grammar, and so does my editor... Also, this may also explain some errors:
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/162449/just-to-let-you-all-know-something-in-case-this-ever-comes-up
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Definately enough time to mess with her mind. So it is possible for her to have trouble believing her friend. Especially since the last few times it hasn't exactly thrown her in the best light or allowed her enough time out of Cloud Chaser's reach to reassert herself as it were.
So it's not really stretching it. Although it does put his actions in a more harsher light and will make whatever happens to him so sweet and delicious.
2742456 No, I know how British people often spell most words differently, and know most of the different spellings. When you used things like mum, centre, realise, etc. I barely noticed, because I'm used to seeing spellings like that, even being American. But just for this chapter:
Should be a comma between 'still' and 'all'.
I don't think but is the right word there, 'because' might flow better. Needs to be an apostrophe in 'Bloom's'. No comma after back.
I think a period might work better between 'start' and 'nonetheless'. That one's optional, but the sentence is long and a bit awkward.
Comma before darlings.
The comma after 'me' should be a question mark, or if you want to display Pinkie's
insanityhyperactivity, an interrobang. Also, it should be hands us each a cupcake. Unless she's given them one cupcake to share.Comma should be a period.
The comma should be 'and' or a period.
First comma should be a period.
Period should be a question mark.
'Ya'll' shouldn't be capitalized.
You forgot a space between the paragraphs.
Comma should be a period.
*Chaser's
*everypony
Comma after 'about'.
Comma after 'Applejack'.
Don't take this as me hating on the story, again, it's one of the best I've ever read. And I guess the problem was more grammar than spelling. But, heck, the grammar here is much better than most stories I've read. It's just that there are a few typos and mistakes here and there.
Not enough to keep me from reading this amount of pure awesome, though. Keep up the good work, and knock Cloud Chaser off a cliff.
Lovely to see you're finally done with the exams (right?), and that you are back to writing. I liked this chapters concept and you played it out nicely. 10/10 i.imgur.com/3g0yr4G.gif
Oh my gawd. YES new update
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2742933 in my opinion, I think that for some of them-ie the ones where you say the commas should be fullstops instead- are fine the way they are, not all of them but some. It is sometimes a matter of opinion, and I prefer not to use a mass amount of fullstops since it looks a bit sloppy, and it makes me feel as if I could have written it when I was in year 1...
Also, I was taught that commas can be used in place of and, so maybe it's slightly different over here. Again, I don't like using the word and a lot...
As for the missing apostrophes, I don't normally do that, I think this time I was rushing and they aren't really easy mistakes to catch So I shall go sort those out.
I know you aren't hating, I'm good at grammar generally... I was just rushing to get this chapter out.
2742574 Thank you XD Glad to hear you like it
2743327 Yup, all done, finally!
2744053 Hells to the yeahs! I'm finally back!
2742933 OK
2745824 Thank you though
2745798 you aced 'em didn'cha?!
2746011 Not all of them, I'm pretty sure I messed up a few of my science ones (I had 3 overall) Our teacher wasn't that good so I had to bullcrap my way through a few of the big questions XD But the others went well I suppose...
Consider yourself lucky, you get multiple choice exams, we don't...
Just happy it's all over though! I'm free for 11 weeks!
2746022 WOOOOO FREEDOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM
QUICK
DO ANYTHING
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2746029 Yeah! I've been finishing off Fairy Tail XD I'm on episode 145 now XD I don't have to feel guilty about watching it anymore XD
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FINALLY! You're FREEEEEE. FREEEEDDOOOM! WAHOOOOO
2746912 Yup! And I have 2 and a half months of freedom! Mwhahaha!
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*Already dreads August 26th* Enjoy it~
2747551 Don't worry, I normally just get from July 20th- Sept 3rd... it's normally just 6 weeks...
Enjoy the rest of yours too though!
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I actually wish it was shorter..namely because everyone gets in earlier then me and I stay home bored out my mind. I think mine is double your normal 6 weeks...(Its 3 months...or..well...close enough to three...)
2747700 Trust me, in only six weeks, you cant do much... Plus, our government have been plotting to make it even less. Like, really. I hope I get out of education before that happens... Our ministers for education are really stupid, to be honest, they've gotten rid of modular exams for any years below me, and we were unable to do course work. But yeah...
2747731 For me..I don't do much anyway They've been wanting shorter summers for a while here, but they weren't successful. The only thing THEY changed was the meals. They make baked bads. They also started new programs and measures...Its horrible...(God, I hate them locking doors...)
2748012 I've always had baked bads, my friend once found a fly in the middle of her wrap, they tried to make out it flew in, but it was clearly cooked and dead. So...
We're locked in the school grounds with a gate, so locked doors are nothing, they've always done that too
2748252 Better then eating food that was tasteless...*shivers at taste* Worst thing I've ever tasted. We found corn in the nuggets...without having corn as a dish ^^" And the meat was not finished...that's why I don't eat school food after that first month. (Michelle Obama be messing with the food.... It got smaller, worse, and more expensive. Lots pack now) Its not like gates...the FRONT doors are open...but the classrooms? NOPE. Never ever sit near the door. Warning: DOOR MAID. Plus..I've been LOCKED out...that is not very safe..
2748613 I never eat school dinners. Their desserts are sometimes okay, but other than that...
That's weird with the door locking, they only lock it if no-ones in there for us?
Scoot getting her first taste of blood! Glad to see that sleezy fucker get what for! Good show, can't wait for more!
Wonder how RD reacts to ol Chaser tryin ta smooch him some Scoots?
2756812 Indeed, I had to make her snap at some point XD
Hmm... We'll have to wait and see I doubt it'll be very well though!
moar plz
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I'm in the process of writing this chapter now! Hopefully it'll be up soon!
ok really though its been almost a MONTH since that last chapter was posted. Can we PLEASE have a new one?
2891165 Sorry, I have had a massive writers block and I've also been getting distracted a lot too. I'm almost finished now, it'll probably be going in for editing soon. It was a very hard chapter to write.
its ok im just getting worried this story will come to a halt :D
2906301 It won't, don't worry! The next couple of chapters are gonna have some big event's It's just being edited now so it wont be too long! Thank you for showing that you care about my story though! you're brill!
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