When Rainbow Dash rushes into the library and asks Twilight to cure her, the new alicorn doesn't realize exactly what this is all about.
But as the situation becomes clearer, she understands that her friend isn't ill, but could need some advices and even to learn a new thing or two.
However, the more the two mares discuss Rainbow Dash's problem, the less easy it is to know which mare is learning from the other, what the lesson taught is and, in the end, if anything has been learned at all.
A little story without much ambition but multiples little subjects and the will to discuss what it means to understand something or to learn something.
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my fics always end up shorter than I expect them to be
You pulled the rug out very nicely there, didn't see it coming at all. Made for a good subversion of common ponyfic themes.
It doesn't feel like the Pinkie asides really added anything to the story or fit its tone, though. I think you could've done without them and kept the story just an eensy bit more focused.
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I'm sorry, I don't know what "Imy" means. So I'm not sure what you're saying.
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Well, to be extremely honest, I added the whole "party in town hall" thing because... it was funny (yeah, I'm very easily amused). Okay, it's important to understand I was kind of tired (which is also why Twilight was tired too). I had to justify that Spike wasn't there. Then, I figured out, I wanted to make the reader understand that it wasn't going to be a serious story. The waffle conflict between the mayor and Rarity as well as the party at the town hall were both hints to say: "take it lightly, let's have some fun if we can."
Yes, I could have let it out without hurting the story. I personnally thought to take the "stallions don't have emotions" out, because I didn't have time (and the will, I was really tired) to integrate it fully into the story.
Now, I'm just not sure how the ending would go if I hadn't used the party at the town hall. I could have finished on Twilight wondering, but, even if I'm not able to explain or justify it, it would feel strange in my mind.
Yeah, I really wrote that whole story following only my feelings. One of those story that writes itself without my full control on it.
2390425 *my
was it so hard?
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, my bad. Well, you have to understand, english isn't my mother tongue... sorry.
I should go take a look, maybe there is something for me to learn...
2390457 if Russia is the Motherland and Germany is the Fatherland, which country is the daughterland?
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I didn't understand the question, so I asked the ponies.
- Twilight told me it's either Kaliningrad or Poland, but that both don't make any sense.
- Applejack asked me what Gernanny was and how it had anything to do with apples.
- Rainbow Dash asked me why we weren't caring about the sonland.
- Fluttershy told me she didn't know and didn't want to know because Europe is scary (for some reason, I don't know, she went hiding right after).
- Rarity's opinion was that I should shave, buy a new suit and by Celestia try looking less like a human and more like a pony. Not gonna happen.
- Pinkie Pie told me that the answer is a lie. She told me other things about whatever country where the citizen want to care for their country and not the opposite as is usually the case, but I forgot because I got kind of drunk at some point in the wild party she was hosting.
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Note: by the way, Rainbow Dash's sister is pretty extreme, makes me happy no to have a sister.
2390741 oookay? You didn't actually have to answer that, it was just me being random again
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2390537 Poland??? Sadly, Poland had an abusive fatherland. Cops got called. Daddy got pretty violent, paid for it. Now Daddy is reformed... Kinda like Discord!
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Bad luck, when I decided to write for ponies, I decided on some rules, mostly:
- only post complete stories
- respect the readers
- accept the criticism
- and reply to every person who would take the time to post a comment.
And I love randomness and totally absurd questions. Actually, that one is a good one, just touch a subject that I don't feel concerned by.
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yeah PC Churchill and Lt Roosevelt
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Yeah, Poland got violently abused by both parents in that analogy. And I don't know a lot about that.
What I know about Poland is that the country gave Piotr Rubik to the world, who made "to cala prawda" for Prilla 111 to use for one of her PMV
Okay, I'm mostly ignorant.
Time to go to sleep.
Which movie is better? Robo-cop or Terminator?
I'm disappointed with the implied twidash that never paid off.
This is very interesting. I love the ambiguity of it. Was Rainbow not gay after all, was she gay and lost attraction when she learn he was a stallion, or did she lie to Twilight so that she would have to reveal who the mare was or confront the problem? It doesn't hold our hands and leaves it to us to interpret the meaning of this story however we see fit. I also like how the situation was handled realistically. These kinds of things don't normally get solved in a day and we often have to come to terms with them on our own.
One negative criticism I do have is that there are a ton of spelling/grammatical errors.
"the sun was shining outside and she had no other complain that the fact she was kind of tired."
Do you mean 'no complaint other than the fact that she was tired'?
I also noticed you forgot to capitalize the T in Twilight a few time throughout the story.
Still, love the story.
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It's hard to choose, you see, I'm afraid of robots: they swore they would kill me. But at the same time, the cop have sent a cyborg to protect me.
So I kind of hope Robo-cop will be better.
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Yeah, I understand. But even if I did ship two of the mane six in a story, I try not to unless it serves a purpose.
Even if I did want to write a ship fiction when I began, just to try it once, I'm not sure how I'm supposed to make it work, as it is mostly a matter of description and I struggle with english words.
And I think the most interesting combination is Applejack and Rarity (not that it needs to be, it clearly doesn't, but it seems to be the shipping combination that offers the most possibilities and the most symbolic for me).
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I didn't think of that interpretation
. Mine was that Rainbow Dash wasn't gay after all.
Originally, I wanted to use the story as a: "Everbody say RD is gay, so let's have her think she is but not be in the end". But then, yeah, she could be lying too.
I swear I try my best. Word helps as much as possible, but I can mostly only rely on my english knowledges. Which aren't the best in the world. I try to improve on that side of things.
Yes. I'm going to go correct that now...
Corrected the "T" of Twilight too.
It's funny:
When I first read this (I don't remember when, but I know it wasn't when it first came out), I had no strong opinions on what I thought RD's sexuality would most likely be.
Now, after having been in the fandom for about 4 and a half years or so, I now believe that RD would more likely end up in a situation like in the story than be a straight up lesbian, with one exception.
Specifically, I believe RD would most likely fall in love with either Soarin or Scootaloo (yes, I realize the latter would likely be foalcon unless it occurred a few years in the future, but I don't really care about that).