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Charpter 3 here I come!
you say "i" alot, but you also say "you" which one are you going to do? first or second?
I'm four paragraphs in and already it's stupid. I'm sorry, I like the idea of an MLP choose your own adventure. But to have a fan of the show go into the show is just bollocks. There's no way I can take this seriously. The fourth wall is there for a reason you hole!
If you say I'm not supposed to take it seriously...well...screw you. If I can't immerse myself in the story, it's impossible to enjoy. This is especially true in a choose your own adventure.
Now, if it opened with a new pony just arriving in Ponyville, and one plays the pony, that I could accept. But if you ask me, this is just pure fan wank, nothing more. Worse than a Gary Sue! It reminds me of Ponyfall!
Of course, that's ignoring the fact that you can't keep your POV straight. Is this first or second person? Make up your fucking mind.
I can't read something this stupid. Sorry. I really wanted to, but I simply cannot.
If I sound mean, I'd like to apologise. I'm not very good at phrasing these kinds of things nicely.
Well started off a bit creepy then for sum reason I was laughing a bit around the end.
Hopefully you will finish this someday. Although i will never get past Fluttershy, how can anyone turn her down?