The Child of Technology
By: White Dragon
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Chapter 6: Foreboding, Name Calling, and Chuck Norris Kicks.
(Unknown POV)
(If you want listen to this while reading this)
Death and destruction rained around her as she stood on the broken blood and bone filled streets, looking around her in a panic. “What has happened here?” she whispered as she tried not to gag on the foul air. She turned her head as she heard a buzzing in the background. What she saw scared her badly, a floating metal orb covered in blood spots, with a single red glowing eye.
“Intruder detected, what is password?” The hovering robot said.
“Password?” She says confused. The robot starts shuddering and its eye turns blue.
“Password accepted, follow me.” the robot starts hovering away towards a tall dark structure in the background, but the foggy air was blocking a better view of it. As we drew closer to it I started to ask the robot questions.
“Um.. robot what is the date?” I ask hesitant.
“18th of November, Lorem ipsum dolor octo.” It states with a flat tone.
“And where are you taking me?” I ask.
“To see the King, he states that anyone to figure out the password must come see him.” I was about to respond before I saw a sight that is burned into my brain.
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(Aren’t I just great at text art?) Noooo My text art broke. im sorry
“The Graveyard of the Damned, For Those that have gone against The Almighty King Of The Land,” I said with a bad taste in my mouth. I step through the rusty iron gate and my eyes start to water and I try keep myself from crying. Everyone was there, all made out of stone, but they weren't statues I could feel the magic around them they were like what we did to Discord, there was Celestia, Cadence, Shining Armor, Twilight, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rarity, Discord… Discord? I take a quick look back at that I had expected him to be free but the only one not here is… No. No, No, No, No, No, No, No… I won’t believe it, I won-
“Well… what do we have here…” says a deep voice with an icy tone. I turn my head slowly and see a wall of black and gold, with two red glowing rectangles. I open my mouth to scream but I couldn't find my voice, his hand reaches towards me as he says one word.
“Petrify”
(You can stop listening to the music now)
(Tech’s POV)
“Waffles, how can you be so fluffy, yet so filling?” I said out loud to no one. I sit in silence for a few minutes and it-.... wait…. silence? I quickly look around without moving my head, to signify anything. I quickly saw a flash of gold out of the corner of my vision, and I let out a small sigh. “You know, to be a lot more sneaky, you shouldn’t wear gold armor and have metal horseshoes.” I hear a quite ‘Dammit’ from the shadows, and three guards come out of the dark.
“How did you see us?” One asks with a defensive stance. I point to the stove, “the stove?...” I point a bit up, “what you can’t- oh bloody hell.” He finally sees the air duct which lets the smoke from the oven out, and it is a sheet of polished metal. he does a face hoof, as do the other two guards.
(EPIC MEAL TIME)
“So if you don’t mind, I have to make some food for my lovely princess and hopefully not get blasted in the process,” I say as I finish my waffles and put my plate in the sink. I then head over to where I was making waffles before and pour more batter into the cast. I then grab a pan and pot out of the lower cupboards, and set them on the stove as I turn it on. I go to the fridge and pantry and grab four eggs and some hay, I then weave the hay to look like a blanket and throw that onto the pan and throw two eggs into the boiling water. I then flip the hay blanket on the pan to cook the other side. I grab another pan and set it on another burner. As I crack the eggs and throw them over my head and they land on the pan. I hear the sounds of hooves clopping together. I use my metal arm to grab the boiled eggs out of the pot and I de-shell them over the sink, and set them on a plate. I look through the cupboards till I find a tray and I set a separate plate on it. I grab the handle of the pan with the hay on it and set it on the plate and fold it so it fits. I then grab the eight waffles and split them into stacks of four and set them side by side. I grab some butter and syrup and place a little bit on top of each waffle and I grab the second plate and set the cooked eggs on it with the boiled eggs on the side. I then go into the fridge and grab orange juice and some fruit. I get out a glass and a bowl and fill both up and set them on the tray. I hear the clopping of hooves, as applause, and I take a bow.
“Now if you excuse me I have to go wake a grumpy and tired princess,” I say as I grab the tray and walk out of the kitchen. I head up the staircase and start to walk towards Luna’s, and mine (I guess), room. I open the door and close it quietly, as I set the tray down and go over to Luna’s sleeping form. I poke her once and this is the reaction, a scream, she opens her eyes, and double kicks me in the chest, sending me through the wall and about 98hf outside the tower as I start to fall. “Well that happened…” I say as I lay on my side while still falling. “Did I do something wrong? No, that can’t be it. Maybe I was too rough with her… maybe, but I liked to hear her moan.” I quickly look towards the ground, that is moving very fast towards me. I quickly snap my fingers and appear back in Luna’s room. “So, mind explaining what that was about?” Luna quickly looks up and I see tears in her eyes.
“Oh Creator Tech it was horrible, everyone was turned to stone and… and a lot of ponies were dead, there was no one lef- left.” she says with tears and bursting out crying. I grab hold of Luna and rock her slowly,
“Its ok Luna as long as I am here nothing will happen.” I say trying to get her to calm down, she stops crying and starts to quietly sob. I softly pet her mane down as she stops sobbing.
“Te-Tec-Tech..” Luna says with another sob. I look down at her concern.
“What is it Luna?” I ask concerned.
“The thin-thing is that you…” she starts crying again. I look at her in confusion.
“I what?” I ask. She looks up at me in tears.
“You were the only one that wasn’t petrified,” she says with more tears. My eyes open wide at this and then quickly narrow, and quickly regain their concerned look,
“Luna why don’t you eat your breakfast I made you I have, to go and meet an old friend.” I get up and helped her onto her bed, I covered up with her sheets and placed her tray next to her
and tuck her in a bit. Before I leave i kiss her on the snout, “we will talk about your dream later, k?”
“Ok, Tech and by the way this breakfast looks amazing.” Luna says with her cute smile.
“Discord, why do you constantly, hate me?” I say before I activate all my armor, after I gain my mass and height. I take out some magic chalk (chalk that blocks all magic, on inanimate objects, i.e. statues.) and draw a circle around his neck, then I put my armored hand up to his head.
“Freedom from stone, breather of air, be free now and you shall not pay the fare.”
My grin widens a bit when I hear the tiniest,
crack...
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
I think this is irrelevant but...............PRAISE THE OMNISSIAH, GLORY TO THE MACHINE GOD!
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But keep up your good work
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This is confusing me wat happen next?
4208116 only irrelevant if no one gets it!
Blood for the blood god!
Enjoy your cyclonic torpedo.
This, this is way to rushed, the time frame in which these six chapter occur is within a week, it isn't a problem that six chapters cover one week it's the events that happened in this week, not enough time was given to them, the two major things that I find to be problems within the story are, it took seven days for Tech to gain the trust of the princesses and fall in love with best pone(Luna).
As I pointed out in my previous comment Tech was, until recently, an enemy of Equestria and he was cleared of all crimes based off his word, the word of someone who could very well be a liar and only going off Techs words he was allowed free travel around the castle, without so much as an escort no matter how ineffective it might be, while still discussing the princesses I also want to point out that they should be able to better contain their emotions, keep a better poker face, its understandable that Luna might not be able to because she was absent for 1000 years and had little experience being a ruler before that, but that doesn't excuse Celestia for not being able to keep her emotions from being expressed in her body language seeing as though she was ruling for 1000 alone.
On to what I find to be the biggest concern is the relationship between Tech and best pone(Luna), there is no problem with shipping the two but its the way it's done, there is no emotional attachment between the two, if they where to suddenly hate each other next chapter for no reason at all I personally would feel nothing, I would read it, acknowledge it and the only thing that I would have to say about the sudden hate is "meh, it ended with just as much effort put into it as the establishment of their love.", they both know nothing about each other, almost as soon as they meet it went straight to sex, in the second chapter when Tech explained what happened I expected some empathy between the two, they where both exiled for 1000 years, as a base for their relationship, as soon as I read that Luna was crying for Tech I got hyped thinking,'yes, this is the perfect way to start a relationship, both of them have been thrown into a world that cant understand what they went through creating an empathetic bond', and then I was meet with the littlest of effort put into the relationship, I cant stress enough how much potential is being wasted with the lack of trying to create a reason for them to love each other, just have them have a private talk about their lives or something and have them connect over that.
I'll continue reading because I'm interested in whats going to happen, but I'll hold off my like until I see some improvement which I hope it does.
4215918 Ya Im sorry at the moment I am redoing this chapter. I was a bit rushed when making this for you awesome people.
All these chapters and you haven't made a Fullmetal Alchemist reference yet? AGGGGHHHH!!! Just say he doesn't like milk or get one of the guards to call him short so he can get angry or SOMETHING! I mean having one metal arm and one metal leg is gunna need some FMA references.
Also,
" k " should be written as " 'Kay " or " Okay "
4208116 praise the omnissiah
Update?
5598240 How do you know that!?!?! How DID YOU GET PAST THE BARRIER?!?!?! SEIZE HIM!!!!
5607165 Dude you could FEEL the damn castle SHAKE from the action bro.
Huh.
It's nearly a year.
i like this story..i really do.. it earned a like from me on humor alone. but i have to agree with some of the other comments...it moves way, way, WAY too fast (and not just relationship wise, wink wink). like to the point that its just becoming gag after gag and one joke cascading into another joke far beyond the tag of "random". Its paced like a shameless clop fic minus the clop, or a bad anime dub...i.e. "we must now kung fu fight! HA HA HA", "Your moves are impressive but you have been defeated HA HA HA" "You have honor, we are now friends HA HA HA"! its severely lacking any character building and that is crucial for a good story. Although i AM a fan of epic tomes of great length and substance and i can understand if this is not that type of story...but it constantly seems like it is, being set up as one with characters with rich history and back stories that go untouched. i like the jokes, i love the cut scenes...but this story could be leagues upon leagues better if it were slowed down and took on a slightly more...serious undertone. not as much of a complaint as it is more constructive criticism. ill still be awaiting the next chapter with gusto!...if this story is not dead that is.
Are you up dating or is this dead?
over a year.
Tech then draws a circle around Discord to protect from seabears. -puts sombrero on discord statue-
Nice d8, m8
WHAT IS HAPPENING ????? What was that dream all about ?? What did it mean?? The only characters that weren't in the graveyard, were Luna and Tech. Was it a prophesy ??? Was it a vision of the future ??? I would really hate to see this come to pass.
I don't see a dark tag, so...is there going to be something happening, or is this just a random dream ??
Or...maybe their love outlasted the lives of everyone they knew ?? Is Tech, the guardian of the graveyard ?? Is there another player in this story, that has yet to be revealed ??
Holy shite, it has been forever and a year since i last saw this. Amazing what you lose to the 'read later' folder.....