Chapter V: Almost Two Hours Later
Chapter V:Almost Two Hours Later
As the credits rolled across the screen Chrysalis turned to Twilight Sparkle, smiling ear to ear. "So, how did you like the movie? Be honest with me now."
Twilight turned to Chrysalis with a sheepish grin on her face. "Well...umm..."
"Well what? The suspense is killing me!"
"Well" Twilight said cheerfully "it was better... than getting raped?"
Chrysalis stared at Twilight for a moment. "That bad?"
"Well rape is worse but that was pretty close, but hey we can always watch another better movie next."
"Oh, I have just the one. Its on the hard drive of this console I think." Chrysalis flipped through the menus until the title screen for 'Super Mario The Movie 2: Warts Offensive' popped up.
"Umm, Chrysalis?"
"Yes Twilight?"
"Please rape me, It would probably hurt less than watching this"she said jokingly.
Both of them laughed heartily as Twilight grabbed the remote with her magic and changed the channel to the home shopping network. Because I would rather watch Billy Mays peddle shit cleaner than watch actual shit.
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In my to read list, may read it at some point. Will let you know what I think of it then.
It was alright. There are a few punctuation errors and style issues, but it was still readable. One of the things that disturbed me most was the 'It's for possessive' thing. Never do that. I also think that the swearing was kind of unnecessary. It's so rare that you could easily replace it with other expressions. It just doesn't feel right. The jokes were well placed and got me laughing a few times. Good job sir.
Well, what can I say about the plot. Yet another one of those turnaround stories, but it was well executed. It took me until halfway through chapter 2 to figure out what's going on.
Chrysalis looks a bit too nice after the turnaround, I'd say. Surely she's supposed to be just misunderstood, but that doesn't mean she can't get a bit sarcastic, which she didn't do enough, imho.
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I mess up some words quite a bit "it's" and "its" being one of them. I'm quite bad pre-reading my own material as the entire thing becomes a swarm of words after a paragraph or two. As for Chrysalis being more mean spirited: I could have done it but it really wouldn't fit her tone after she was accused of trying the horizontal monster mash.
In any case, glad you liked it.
What did I just read? This is plain torture! Those poor ponies!
Seriously, I had a good laugh.
I am so glad this is not what I thought it was, you really shouldn't do that though everything sounds so disgusting.
TROLOLOLOLOLOL!
*Facehoofs*
Now I'm curious as to what movie Celestia was forced to watch. Mortal Kombat 2 maybe?
Da faq did I jus read?
And why did I just click the fav button?
My mind was not in the gutter at any time during this fic!
It was in the sewer.
...
The moss is much prettier down here.
I really didn't know where you were going with story, it was totally awesome. A few minor typos here and there but otherwise fantastic.
Dafuq did heavy just read?
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Would the story be better if twilight was wearing
twelve different hats at once during it? :p
846585 Niet. I didin't think that there would be such a plot twist would have been better if twilight was right
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I thought about that but decided to keep this a Teen rating instead of going mature. I do have a zecorz x fluttershy in the work if you are into that kinda thing.
Jesus, I could have sworn that it was going to get nasty. Like FILLED with clop, but no, just mind games. Bravo good sir, bravo.
Oddly i was dissapointed there wasnt a rape scene
Total trollfic
Marvelous trollfic!
Now I want to watch bad movies with a bunch of changelings.
Ok What the buck even was the "condom"?
I miss Billy Mayes.
3677608 It was wrapped up video game controller cord in a really tight plastic package
4512766 Hi, Billy Mays here. If you order now, you can get three times the nothing for absolutely nothing. (Man that video was awesome)
6944399 heh yea, that was a good Commercial.
Hahah, that at hilarious.