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8121038 Thanks! I was really happy with how it turned out, so I'm glad you like it too. I'd love to work on a sequel, just let me know when.

8121038 I don't recognize that image.

8123430 If I wasn't saving money I'd commission a whole damn epic about this.

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I just got it online.

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Don't worry! I commissioned this and I'll commission a sequel soon enough.

8125370 I'm looking forward to it! I liked how the character dynamic worked out in this story, and I think it'd be fun to revisit it.

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I plan on the sequel being the rest of the rainbooms going to visit Sunset and Aria answers the door in her clothes all like, "Sunset! Your lame friends are here!

8125370 Make it longer. I'll donate if I have to, but for the love of Shakuras let there be more!

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Feel free to donate! It'll only be longer that way.

Aria needs to learn the magic of friendship and girlmeat.

He'd totally be Sunny's tsundere little boyfriend. The sequels gonna be five chapters long. Lotsa amazon on sissy boy action!

8126319 shorter than I'd like. I could theoretically do about 20 a week.

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Sure it's kinda short, but that leaves room for the THREEQUEL!

And 20 is more than I was expecting you to offer!

8126414 Theoretically. I might have to lessen it from time to time.

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I'd be cool with just 10, no worries.

I love the dialogue between these two. Sunset is loving and kind, but also saying "Hey. I'm 7'1 and lots of muscle on you. I love you, but you're kind of the bottom bitch."

And how she's just both tenderly yet roughly makes love to his ass. Yeah, that's the stuff

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Oh god yes, I'm so glad I commissioned this. Best $60 I've spent in a long time.

Keep an eye out for the sequel. It's in the works! Even longer and much more Aria action!

This is... Surprisingly hot. I dunno if I'd rather be Sunset our Aria... :rainbowhuh:

AU tag please?

Hmm, this story looks promising, though I balk due to the overabundance of futa in this fandom. Not that there's anything wrong with it, of course; I just get tired of it.

8126805 Yeah, the characters were really fun to work with. Sunset's not evil anymore, but she knows how to stand up for herself - and Aria is accustomed to feeling superior to everyone, so she can push back just as hard.

8128710 Yeah, I know what you mean. Futa's pretty easy to find, and the flip side of that is that I'm sure it's hard to avoid if you're not into it. A little while ago I found some people (outside of fimfiction) discussing one of my non-futa stories, and then bemoaning the fact that pretty much everything else on my page is futa.

But I gotta be true to myself! And fulfill the requests of commissions, obviously.

8128820 I might give it a read anyways, as I do love jacked, Amazonian women and girly boys.

While the whole thing was overall quite good, a couple details bothered me. One, you used the word Amazonian 4 times in a 6k word work. Especially in the second half. I could tell you wanted to focus on her size and strength but a few peeks at a thesaurus could go a long way to make this fic from good to great.

The other detail is that some of the dialogue was inconsistent. You were pretty close to the mark but some parts just didn't seem to flow quite right. Im sorry Im so vague but its more a feeling than a "this specific part stands out" kind of thing. I know this is clop where consistency isn't always a priority, but I think that would add some more strength to your fix, and increase the hardness of at least one boner. Looking forward to your next work!

Nice. But you are doing ond classical mistake: not explaining and including unnecessary text.
For example: not everyone know what tsundare is, use it and explain it, or use other words.
Unecessary things like telling the audience that fluttershy is gay is a classical "show not tell" bit.
Keep it going and cheers!

8190542 Yes! A sequel's already been commissioned, although it'll take a little while for me to get to it.

8191446 :yay: for me it is hard to find a size difference that dose not end up being a hyper fic witch I just find annoying as I do not like hyper fics now this fic is just perfect that shows you can one part big girl and small partner with out said girl have a dick or tits the size of a school bus and that is what turns me off hyper fics

Oooohh yesssssss you're a miracle worker

Yay, there's more! :pinkiehappy:

*squints at description*
*stares at title*
*checks his Multiversal map*

Ahh... I'm in that corner...

*jetpacks away*

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Thanks! I'm glad to be working on this again.

YES! New chapter! So worth helping commission this!

That last sentence xD

Heheheheheheheheheheeeee


I love this story so much.

Aria is a total tease and will Twilight be a futa to to help punish him or she still female?

Pleeeeeeeeease tell me you will finsh this

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Seriously? Its kinda self-explanatory

Need... fan art of this. Somebody? Anybody?

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I fully intend to! I'm alternating between commissions, trying not to spend too much time on any one story at once.

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I suppose it doesn't hurt to explain it. A femboy is just a guy with a feminine appearance/personality.

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Yeah, I'd love to see some fanart! Haven't seen any yet though...

Sunset laughed. “Don’t worry, princess, I’m not gonna fuck you.

That's disappointing,

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She did tell Twilight to talk to her when she was ready. So maybe something in the future.

Really glad to see this continuing.

“Oh really ,” said Sunset. “It just so happens I don’t mind being watched. And my last boyfriend hated it. Handsome, popular Flash Sentry didn’t seem to want anyone to see him sucking his girlfriend’s cock or getting his ass pounded. I was actually impressed by how much he pushed back - I was a total domineering bitch back then and I only talked him into it a few times.”

Okay, you've mentioned Flash several times during this story, are you building up to something or just trash talking him for the heck of it?

8361149 I don't have anything planned for Flash. I'm just extrapolating what sort of relationship he and Sunset would have had, if she were big and strong and had a dick.

I don't have anything against Flash, by the way. I think it's canon that pre-redemption Sunset was a pretty lousy girlfriend, and that sucks for him. Sunset's anecdotes in this story definitely emphasize the way she dominated Flash, and I guess that has to do with the way I'm trying to characterize Sunset. She knows that the way she treated Flash was wrong, but she still remembers that it felt good to be in control.

Gotta admit. When they said Sonata liked to be included, I was expecting a bit of incest. You know, have Sunset F*ck Aria into Sonata type of deal. With only the three of them, and a very different moral standard, one would think it would come up at some point, given how long they have lived.

“You heard her,” said Aria. “The crowd wants to see a knock-down, drag-out fuck session.” SHe prodded his asshole. “Think you can handle that?”

I think that Aria is supposed to be a Sunset.


Amazing chapter. So awesome! I loved it

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