December 7th, 1941
UES (United Equestrian Ship) West Mareginia (BB-48)
Pony Harbor, Oahu, Haywaii
0700 hours
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“This is the life”, said Second Class Petty Officer Muzzle Flash as he relaxed in the warm sun that the princess bestowed onto the harbor.
Muzzle Flash was an above-average sized stallion, but he needed to be for his special talent. His coat was a shiny Brass color, while his mane was dark, smokey grey. His cutie mark also reflected his name even further, it was a 5"/51 caliber Naval Cannon, the main weapon for the Mareginia. His special talent was firing it, of course. It was his toy to play with (when he was allowed), and he loved it.
He had joined the Navy to see the world, and indeed he had. The Mareginia had just got back from the Pacific, around The Japonyse mainland. Although tensions were tight between the countries, he still admired them. He had always admired their beautiful culture, their general respect for others, and their value of life in general.
A loud rumbling snapped him out of his stupor. “DRAGON!” he yelled, before falling out of his chair, and landing on his face in a way most would find hilarious. He stood up, brushed himself off, and looked down at his stomach, realizing it was in fact the thing making the noise, not a dragon. “Man, I’m hungry.” he thought to himself. “I’ve been having a craving for pie lately, and with how cheap the Navy is, I doubt they have any in the galley” he also thought.
He decided to get a liberty pass to go to the mainland to see if there were any bakeries there.
Little did he know, that simple craving for pie would save his life.
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Somewhere in the Pacific
December 7th, 1941, Unkown time
Japonyse aircraft carrier Akagi
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There was a soft knock on the door.
“Enter” Came the voice from inside the room.
The sailor that entered rendered a salute to the figure in the room, he dropped it when his superior officer returned it.
???: State your business
???: “Admiral Yamaoato, our planes are refueled and rearmed, and are ready to depart, we are awaiting your command, sir.”
Yamaoato: “Alright, gather the stallions outside, I would like to say a few words to them before we launch the planes”
???: “It will be done, sir.”
15 minutes later, on the deck
Just as Yamaoato had ordered, all the Naval aviators on the ship were grouped together on deck, holding their Dress and Cover.
“Gentleponies, today, you will embark on a great journey!” He Began.
“This mission you are executing will not only guarantee our Victory in Manechuria and beyond, Increase our mighty Japonyse industrial might, But it will also show the Equestrians that we are a force to be reckoned with!” He continued.
Now go forward and fight! Fight for your families! Fight for your homeland! Fight for your Emperor! Fight without fail! Fight with vigor in your hearts, and make your country proud!” Exclaimed Yamaoato.
There were no words spoken in response, only thunderous applause and hooves being shook in the air.
“Shōri! (Victory!)” Yamaoato exclaimed
“Shōri!” The Naval Aviators responded
He stood watching as those brave Japonyse naval aviators would carried out their mission of such great importance.
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December 7th, 1941
Pony Harbor, Oahu, Haywaii
0730 hours
Muzzle Flash was taking a stroll down mane street, the most active part of the base, taking in the sights, while in search of a bakery to soothe his pie craving.
“This place looks interesting” He said. He was looking at a building that was identical to the ones around it in size and shape, but that’s where the similarities ended. The building was bright neon pink for one, and it had a sign on the front of a big piece of pie that read “Sugarcube Corner.”
Taking the obvious hint that it was a bakery by the sign on the front, he walked in. He was greeted by an obnoxiously pink mare with an almost equally pink mane (so poofy I might add, that it resembled cotton candy) bouncing in front of him.
???: “Hi’ya sailor! I’m Pinkie pie! what’s your name? I’ve never seen you here before! *GASP* If I’ve never seen you before, than that means you don’t know anyone here, because I know everyone here! And I don’t know you! That might mean your lonely! *GASP* I know! Want to be friends?! Oh by the way, welcome to sugarcube corner, can I get you anything? Wait? Did I already say that? oh, who cares? So what will it be sailor?”
Muzzle Flash just stood there, bewildered at the pink mare, thinking that she was lucky she had those gasps, otherwise she would have most likely passed out from the lack of oxygen.
Flash: “Uhh, hello? I was wondering if I could get a slice of Coconut Cream pie please?”
Pinkie: “No problem sailor! Since you’re new here, this one’s on the house!”
And soon enough, she returned with probably the most delicious looking piece of pie he ever laid eyes on.
As he was scarfing the pie down like he hadn’t eaten in days, the pink mare returned to him, pulled up a chair beside him, obviously wanting conversation.
Pinkie: “So, what’s your name there mister?”
Flash: “Hello, name’f Mufflle Flaf” He said with his mouth full. He swallowed and then repeated his name.
Pinkie: Hello Muzzle Flash! My names Pinkie Pie and I own and run this establishment!
Flash: Really? All by yourself? How do you keep up with everything?
Pinkie: Well, several people wonder how I can do so much by myself, this random unicorn came in a while back, what was her name? Twilight Farkle? Tried to find out as well, she ran some tests on me, and finally, she diagnosed me with this weird sounding disorder, called ADHD, but I think it’s just the sugar that makes me work so super-duper hard!
Flash: Wow, that must be something, working off of a sugar high 24/7.
Pinkie: Oh it’s not just the sugar silly! I also drink coffee too!
Flash: I’m guessing it isn’t decaf?
Pinkie: Well DUH! How could decaffeinated coffee keep me running this place all by myself at my super-duper speed and efficiency?
Flash: Well, I-
Muzzle Flash didn’t get to finish his sentence, as a loud explosion rocked the ground they both stood on. The intercom system screeched some feedback that would make anypony wince, before somepony’s voice came on, and said:
“AIR RAID ON PONY HARBOR! AIR RAID ON PONY HARBOR! THIS IS NOT A DRILL! I REPEAT, THIS IS NOT A DRILL! ALL PONIES OF THE EQUESTRIAN ARMED FORCES REPORT TO YOUR BATTLESTATIONS AT ONCE!”
By that time, Flash was already out the door, scrambling to get to the Mareginia.
There was training on these situations.
He knew that shit like this only happened in case somepony attacked.
And he came to the conclusion that shit had in fact got real.
Pony Harbor, Oahu, Haywaii, was under attack.
funny thing is I was just watching a segment of pearl harbor! Odd
I know you probably put a good bit of work or something into this, but something like Pearl Harbor is not something to use for Fanfic Material. It just isn't right.
You waited until this day, December 7, to post this? Nice. Will read
*clicks to track story*
good...
*reads chapter and forgets i tracked*
this is good! i should track this...
*scrolls back up and finds that i already tracked*
*facehoof*
It's actually pretty decent. I like some of the puns (Japonyse was the best; I literally laughed out loud when I read that). I find it very respectable that you took the time to honor the lives lost in the Pearl Harbor attack with this.
There's one inaccuracy, though; the initial attacks from the waves of bombers started at 7:53 am. I'm not sure if you were going for that amount of detail, so I'm not going to tell you you HAVE to change it, just a heads-up.
Hm, I like the concept, but things like the conversations seem jagged and a bit out of place sometimes, and having the name of who is speaking sprinkled throughout the story seems strange, you'll have it like that one time then switch to not naming who is talking in the next paragraph. Also, the part with Pinkie just seemed off to me. I might just be being a little nit-picky however, I want to see where this heads and am going to track it. Cant wait for part two.
Sugarcube Corner is a chain resturaunt? Le gasp!
Those bastards are going to sink the Mareizona!
Well if you've got Pearl Harbour, I've got dibs on the atomic bombings of Shireroshima and Neighgasaki.
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Thanks
Truth be told, this made me want to get part 1 of my story started and finished lol, anyways, I sounded really negative before, but I do like this fic, I was just trying to point out some flaws imo, and it came out rather bluntly
derelle, good one. help tell people freedom is not free
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agreed, by writing something like we are remembering the lives of those who lost theirs on that day. The only thing I can really think of that would ever be an insult to the people who lost their lives there, both American and Japanese, would be either telling jokes about it (sorta like if you told jokes about the people who lost their lives on 9/11, just isn't right), or the movie Pearl Harbor. I mean hell, that movie was so fucking bad (excuse my language, but I really like to learn things about World War 2, and when I was forced to watch it in school, I felt like the whole damn movie was just gigantic insult to the lives lost there, as it's like a 2 and a half hour movie, but the actual event is in it for like 15 minutes, and they don't really talk about why the Japanese did or other things like that) that it made the movie "Tora Tora Tora!" (that was actually not all that good) look like it was unbelievably realistic.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that just because you write something about a certain event or a certain someone that was a tragedy, doesn't make it an insult unless you're purposely trying to take jabs at them.
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I made REALLY bad puns, does that count?
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I agree. Phoenixes would have made for better Japanese.
Admiral Philomena anyone?
*shot*
December 7th, porps
I noticed something, it really took me out of the story, There doesn't need to br a colon ":" after each Character, before they speak.
whowouldlikebedoingthewar between the atomic bomes and Pearl Harbor
Ironically i'm writing a paper on pearl harbor