Twilight Sparkle rules the world. After consideration, she implements a new law: all offenders must be given a chance at redemption, before executions can be carried out. Shortly afterwards, Twilight shuts down Tartarus, claiming it a waste of her resources and having played host to too many breakouts. Now the prisoners within are offered a chance to redeem themselves by attending the Friendship School.
In this Academy, they are given the chance to start over, the task is simple: Learn the values of friendship and graduate. But that is easier said than done. Honesty lessons with Applejack, where mistaking a variety of Apple could be the last thing you do. Fluttershy's care of creatures, where every week a new beast will be tended to in order to show Kindness, though instructions on their care should be carried out to the letter, lest you end up on their menu. In Rarity's class, one best hope Rarity is in a generous mood should you miss a stitch. Rainbow Dash will teach you loyalty through...questionable means. And Pinkie Pie well she'll do anything for a laugh, best hope you are not the joke though.
Chrysalis enrolls in the academy, and is desperate to start over. Will Rarity ever forgive her? will Starlight ever accept her? will she make new friends? or will she be just another casualty of the maximum security friendship school?
Wow.... Just wow😶. Really hoping this backfires on Twilight though 😂🤣
Ok, you have my full attention, this twisted version of Twilight is interesting and I want to know how Chrysalis will develop as a protagonist......will she surrender to Twilight and her indoctrination or will she reveal the secrets of this AU (like "Danganronpa" but without the murders....or maybe yes). This story seems a little similar to this one to me, but with a darker touch:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/317929/reform-school
I have a good feeling that the canon Mane Six will feel slightly disgusted by their dark versions and their hypocrisy to forced their "enemies" to change, or else freaking die.
So Rarity and Twilight is in a relationship?
.... How, when, and why? Also Changelings drinks BLOOD!? I THOUGHT THEY ATE LOVE!
Wow, this story gets darker and darker doesn't it?
Y'know, when I read the first part of this chapter and description, I thought you were gonna make Twilight into some kind of Tyrant, but apparently not only was I wrong, but the amount of mercy Twilight is showing Chrysalis after what she did is ASTONISHING to say the least.
So Twilight is in fact a Tyrant (kinda?) and killed her mentor and best friend who were the previous rulers of Equestria.
Yay....
Yeah I'm gonna be honest, if I had a libary for the darkest stories I read on this site, this story would be top 5.
I have a lot of questions about this AU, mostly about Twilight. What is Twilight's goal? To kill the sisters, take over Equestria, and then be a kind but strict ruler? Because that makes no sense to me. If this was real life, Chrysalis and Tyrek would litterly be sentenced to death and Cozy Glow would be sentenced to life in prison, the fact that they are even given a choice for redemption is astonishing.
Do all enemies of Equestria get a choice between Death or redemption or only the villains while everyday criminals are just put behind bars? Because I don't see anything wrong with that, Chrysalis litterly killed hundreds it sounds like, maybe even thousands.
Also, shutting down Tartarus has got to be the smartest thing Twilight has ever done, I'm surprised Celestia never considered it considering the amount of villains breakout of there and just start plotting another scheme to take over Equestria.
Well, I can't wait to read more, so far my biggest question is; is Twilight a Tyrant or not? Because "Tyrant" is described as "a cruel and oppressive ruler" and that doesn't describe what Twilight is in this story at all, so far the only bad thing Twilight has done was kill Celestia and Luna and that was before she became Queen.
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You took the time to write so much, it makes me happy how much you thought about it...so I'll respond, doing my best to avoid spoilers:
"So Rarity and Twilight is in a relationship?"
Yes, but so are the others. Not all that romantic, though Twilight is very "friendly" to get what she desires. You will see this tactic applied to other friends of hers as well. Twilight does however, love all her friends very much.
"Well, I can't wait to read more, so far my biggest question is; is Twilight a Tyrant or not?"
No. More like an iron-hoofed Matriarch. She is willing to give every creature a fair chance to better themselves. Since there are no cells, the prisoners either agree to the terms or well, why would she keep a waste of space around? Keep in mind, this is a dystopian world: neither evil nor good but tipping towards a darker grittier than canon version. Her ability to wield friendship as a weapon is unmatched, and she does so to a devastating effect to those who don't adhere to her laws. And Celestia and Luna were far from innocent.
"Do all enemies of Equestria get a choice between Death or redemption or only the villains while everyday criminals are just put behind bars?"
All offenders must be provided a chance at redemption before a judgement is passed. Depending on the crime that might mean paying the owed amount on something stolen as well as writing an apology, or re-training to be allowed in society at the friendship school. All crimes are considered in context not category. This is a revision of Celestia and Luna's own law...but more on that later.
"Wow, this story gets darker and darker doesn't it?"
yes ^^ hope you have a torch prepared. We're going in.
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You basically described a better justice system than any justice system on Earth.
This one line just made Twilight less evil.
Love the joke, though I'm afraid it's gotten so dark I'm gonna need a very bright torch.
This is my top 10 favorite version of Twilight I have ever came across on this site. Now that I know Twilight isn't as evil as the first chapter make her out to be, I'm very excited for the next chapter.
(Btw, i love your profile picture, I love robots especially robotic Alicorn's)
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It's a good dystopian AU, totally interesting. Personally, I am interested in knowing which parts of the series are canon in this story and which are not (as long as they are not spoilers).
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Bro..... Twilight literally has Celestia and Luna's severed heads in plain sight and right in the room where the "villains" have to say about their lives, I wouldn't call that a fair fate. Apart from that it is implied at a certain point that Twilight's friends not only respect and obey her... they are also afraid of her for simply disobeying her or "questioning" her decisions.
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Well that is bad, sure.
As for her friends for being afraid of her, I'm pretty sure everyone was afraid of Celestia in the show, always the constant bowing and the praises, in a few stories on this site she actually got really tired of it. Plus I don't think Twilight would do anything to her friends.
They get a chance at redemption, plus there's not really a difference between school and prison so...
Also I may have misunderstood what the Author said earlier. I thought that Everyone would have a chance at redemption at the school of friendship before JUDGEMENT was passed, like thieves would get put behind bars, murderers would get life sentences, and then ones like Chrysalis and Tyrek would get death sentences.
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This discussion is lovely but I think I should clarify something (minus spoilers):
There are no more prisons. A fair chance does not mean a fair choice. Criminals are judged on a context basis...meaning varying levels of redemption may be offered, but there is only one offer. Now criminals of Chrysalis's power level attend the school as do lower level ones....depending entirely on the severity. Otherwise, the offer may be anything from a sincere apology to manual labor. Should said offer be turned down...they no longer have a place in Twilight's world.
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Ya... That's the part I misunderstood.
Some guy just steals someone's purse and then Twilight just pops up in front of them saying "apologize, or die!".
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You'll be seeing many well-known villians...and some lesser-known ones, as well as anti-heroes from mlp. I have plans for a few canon events, spanning various generations of mlp franchises. Don't worry won't spoil any of them. Though no source will be offlimits...except 3.5 because...well, it doesn't exist clearly; so naturally I won't include it. Hope you are looking forward to it ^^
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not quite, but somewhat.
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Twilight: There are two different points of view, mine and the wrong one.
I can see myself in her dystopian school. I may be a villain but harming the innocent will “never” be acceptable. I’d probably be charged with something small like planning a a protest or even a meeting with her. And before anyone says that I’m crazy, I will have myself defenseless so if I’m killed, I’ll prove her wrong. I’d preach how corrupt that they are and insult their ways of teaching.
Psychopathic I know. But I’ll die for my ideas..
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That's cute...but it won't work.
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Oh I know it won’t work. Like I said, I’m psychopathic and willing to die for my beliefs. So if you do add a character into this story, due me a HUGE FAVOR, and make them sympathetic to both sides. So if/ when they die… it’s more gut wrenching for all
Well.....I remember a certain person saying:
"Now that I know Twilight isn't as evil as the first chapter makes her out to be"
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I think you should consider what you said after reading this:
Multiversal Invasion.....just in the second chapter.
Ok...I didn't expect that, I knew that Twilight had big plans but not "so big" as to consider invading to other parallel universes and I suppose conquering them or as she would say: "Showing them the true path of Harmony."
We just have to wait and see how far Twilight has come in her crusade for friendship...and I have a bad feeling about it. I look forward to any updates and seeing how Chrysalis develops as a protagonist.
Postscript: I leave a message to the author of this story, I don't know how this story ends BUT if in the end Twilight ends up winning and Chrysalis gives up......
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*I'm gonna read this, but I'm highly offended by it
And like that, I have many more questions.
What did she do with all of the dangerous monsters that were locked in there?
I know that this is a story starring Chrysalis and everything that that implies, but one would think that under the circumstances presented, Cozy Glow wouldn't need someone to tell her that something 'stinks' and that it is necessary to proceed with caution.
So Twilight is willing to kill anyone who doesn't want to be redeemed but basically turns completely 180 when they do choose to be redeemed. This isn't even a prison anymore, more like a juvenile detention center but for all ages.
Well this proves the fact that Twilight didn't manipulate her friends or force them to do anything they don't want it this is how they react around Twilight when she's more vulnerable.
Caused by Twilight or not? Because if it's caused by Twilight, then I'm rethinking about the whole manipulating her friends bit.
WAIT WHAT!?
Nightmare Rarity? Wait, is there a version of Nightmare Moon or Daybreaker somewhere there?
There it is.
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Ya I don't know what to say to that. Although if she has access to multiple parallel dimensions across the multiverse, couldn't she just turn an empty planet into some kind of jail redemption city? That seems way more easier to do, plus it would mean no killing. And she wouldn't have the excuse that jail cells take up space or whatever.
However, when I read the description of the story before reading the actual story, I actually assumed Twilight would be an evil Tyrant that would kill without mercy. After reading the first and second chapter and getting information from the Author, Twilight is still not as bad as I assumed her to be before reading the story.
I would appreciate it if you could not post entire sections of my chapters in the comments...it spoils it for all new readers especially since neither of you are using spoiler tags.
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"So Twilight is willing to kill anyone who doesn't want to be redeemed but basically turns completely 180 when they do choose to be redeemed. This isn't even a prison anymore, more like a juvenile detention center but for all ages."
Not even close. These three are special.
"Caused by Twilight or not? Because if it's caused by Twilight, then I'm rethinking about the whole manipulating her friends bit."
yes, it was. Just not the one you think.
"Nightmare Rarity? Wait, is there a version of Nightmare Moon or Daybreaker somewhere there?"
Very Peceptive.
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Twilight didn't start the invasion.
Well an interesting start. So many questions about what lead Twi to this point.