That was hot.

Toys? Toys!? This is going to be very interesting

The fun has Ben doubled first to say it

one boo boo
Spitfire’s pants had a gigantic from the behind
Other than that WOW

1947292 More than one, and aside from the major typos, some more variety in word choice is needed. Ignoring how fast the plot moves, of course, since this is porn for porn's sake. In any case some heavy editing would do this story good.

^ agreed

I have the wierdest wingboner right now...

Spitfire’s pants had a gigantic from the behind,

I believe that the word "Rip" should be in there somewhere.

Why are they both whereing skirts there more jean girls

Rainbow walked over and grabbed Spitfire’s panties and slid them off for her

Several lines later:

Rainbow let out a very soft moan as she grabbed Spitfire’s panties. Smirking, Spitfire herself let go and pulled off her panties as well as her bra.

So, they put Spitfire's panties back on?

she was nearing nothing underneath.

I believe that should be "She was WEARING nothing underneath"

She chuckled and shoved both of her fingers inside her vagina.

This is confusing. It should be "Dash chuckled and shoved both her fingers inside Spitfire's vagina"

Spitfire’s pants had a gigantic from the behind,

I believe that the word "Rip" should be in there somewhere.
I I already pointed this out, several months ago, as did another person. You need to heavily edit this story. This could be a good story, these things just need to be fixed.

2395893 same here

2395893 This might happen to a lot of us.

I prefer my porn with a bit of plot to them, but this is alright.

I prefer my porn with a bit of plot to its name, but this is alright.