This story is a sequel to Dinky: A Filly That Is Loved
Derpy thought that everything would be better with Glittering Gem in jail and Dinky in her permanent custody. But things are never that simple, as Derpy now has to balance taking care of a foal and finishing school. Lets just hope that thats all she has to worry about.
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I hope shooting star has some problems with ponies at school finding out what she's done. I'm clearly a little evil to ponies who are cruel to others.
It seems that I am missing some back story I will read up on later also is derpy in college?
Yes, you clearly need a proofreader.
Yes, I do volunteer. You're getting better, but with a bit of guidance, this could be great.
As a warning for future chapters, as well as your upcoming revisions on your previous story, I should like to point out that pegasi is a plural of the word pegasus. It refers to more than one of them. You keep using it as a singular. For example:
It should be:
Otherwise, I look forward to the rest.
I go in for mindless catharsis every once and a while, but I'm a sucker for a good redemption story as well. Call me curious as to where this goes with Shooting Star.
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No, this takes place in Derpy's final year of highschool.
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Wait... Really?
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I can see, it just sounds really weird whenever I used it and my brain automatically switched it to sound better to me.
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You and me both.
2911648 Yeah, really. It's just some really quick little things, mostly to do with punctuation. I'm willing to help out.
small error on the 'flashback'
should be anger unless I'm really reading that sentence wrong, also love Derpy and Dinky
I believe you were right to go easy on Shooting Stark, but that may be due to my ability to see good in everyone even those with pure black hearts.
i love it and in this story is it going to show Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter
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if thats a question, then yes.
2959337 yes it is a question and ok
2959337 and i can't wait to read more of chapters when they come out
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Thank you. I'll try to work on another, but I'm going to Bronycon this weekend so I dont know how long it will be until I get the next chapter done... sorry
2959710 Your welcome and ok and please promise me that you will finish this story
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Its all good! I already have a bunch of ideas for how I want it to go and a ending. I just gotta write it all.
2959762 ok
I'm curious... you may have already answered this, but how does Sparkler fit into your headcanon (if at all)? She's usually considered Dinky's older sister due to Sisterhooves Social, but then again, Applejack was going to compete with Sweetie Belle, so it's not like anything's set in stone.
“Uh huh,” Derpy replied as she felt Derpy try to get her attention. Looking down, the pegasus noticed that Dinky had dropped her spoon and couldn't reach it. “She’s one of my teachers in school.”
I caught this while reading through it. Should be :
“Uh huh,” Derpy replied as she felt Dinky try to get her attention. Looking down, the pegasus noticed that Dinky had dropped her spoon and couldn't reach it. “She’s one of my teachers in school.”
Sorry, just had to point it out. @_o... *twitch twitch*
Other than that, love your stories! Fav. and follow!
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She fits, but you won't see her in this story.
i love it and i can't wait to see Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter in this story and sorry for saying this again i hope you can forgive me
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Its all good
3030270 ok and remember to add Derpy to turn 18 years old and to do the stuff to make Dinky her official daughter in this story
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I wouldn't dream of not including that in the story
3030304 ok
Hhmmmmm a little commvo much......
good chapter
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I wish I found this week's ago so I could of met you at Bronycon and got a brohoof from an awesome author, maybe next year.
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I'd like that ^.=.^
Dinky
small spelling mistake, still really enjoy the story
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Thank you and fixed
Great chapter
very good chapter, I needed a happy chapter after I read the The Sweetie Belle chronicle's latest chapter
Good work so far I'll have complaints in the futur I bet but eh hopefully it'll all still be good
Dinky getting all excited in the wagon was probably the most adorable image ever
good chapter this one is
What bothers me is that she needs help asking obvious questions like the one her dad asked.....
i love it and how soon in this story will we get to see Derpy fully adopted Dinky as her daughter not her adoptive daughter and please reply to this comment
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If thats what your waiting for, you got awhile. No spoilers, but its not going to be all sunshine and smiles.
3379827 ok and why will it not be all sunshine and smiles when that happens
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NO SPOILERS!!!!
3379855 ok and sorry
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its ok. You're just curious is all
3379875 ok and i am curious that is true
(Pained speaking)
Somebody..Call a doctor
I'm having......a......cuteness.....overload
Why do I suddenly hear a wheezing and grinding sound in the distance, along with a slight wind that came right out of absolutely nowhere?
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Life never is... trust me...
house
Chocolate
Aren't
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Fixed, thanks
3537602 No problem