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One's childhood never escapes you when magic and a certain motherly princess enters the picture.
Written for kicks and Momlestia/Sweet Celestia practice. But mainly for kicks.
WARNING: Written on late-night crazy sauce.
Rated T for swearing, dark implications involving drug usage and childhood trauma.
(And on a personal note: Don't use drugs to escape your problems.)
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I'm really liking your approach to Momlestia.
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Thanks for commenting. I'm relieved to hear that you like it. If I could pick your brain, where do think the story should go?
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Hmm, I shall hold my opinion until the plot becomes something I can understand. Tis good at the moment though, very good.
It's not often a story has me intrigued, consider it favorited for as long as you update it
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Glad that you are interested. If you had any suggestions as to where I should take the story, I'd be open to hear it.
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I've yet to understand the plot, keep updating and I'll advise if I think it's needed
I think I can see where the story is headed, at least somewhat. What I can definitely tell though, is that Equestria's time stream moves slower than Earth's by a factor of ten years. That is all I managed to pick up at the end of the chapter.
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That's great. Tell me your ideas. I'm honestly winging it at the moment and I don't want to mess up.
Yes. That's important. Think of it this way, wouldn't a seemingly unaged child from a missing/proclaimed dead child from a twenty year case make headlines? Especially if you considered all of his crazy talk about ponies talking and magic and adventures.
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Wait a sec.... The cave..... It's an entrance to Equestria, but for it to collapse like that, something would've had to have happened on either side... Something like, I dunno, a feud between to very powerful magic wielders. That comment by Mark in the early years seems to support the fact that he was there to witness Celestia banishing Nightmare Moon/Princess Luna...
The thing that bugs me though, is that the cave-in happened forty years after her banishment..... It was probably either wards that somehow got cast and took effect on Earth when they were meant to deter Celestia from entering the area that Luna was in, or something else happened there that we don't know of yet.
Then there's Mark's dreams... This, I can easily cut down the mystery. A child comes from someplace else, and starts talking nonsense (to that society, anyway) about talking ponies, magic, and other stuff like that. Of course he's going to repress it if everyone around him tells him constantly that it isn't normal. Children of that age are still impressionable, which is why therapy tactics like (pfffft) hypnotism, shock, or other sometimes unorthodox practices work. They reinforce society's view on things, and eventually those things that you constantly spouted were silenced as complete and utter nonsense and have you believe that it all never happened.
I'm not saying that those were the kinds of therapies used, they were merely used as examples.
This right here, is a huge implication of guilt towards something. Right now, I'm going to imagine that Mark thinks Celestia killed Luna instead of banishing her to the moon, or that banishing her to the moon is what killed her. I don't exactly know how Mark fits into that yet, though...
Sooooo, a dream within a dream, then? It's happened to me a couple times, not fun.
THEN WHO WAS PHONE!?
Sorry, I just had to make that joke. Bad 4chan jokes aside, if Nightmare Moon's currently inhabiting her namesake, then what the blueberry hell was that in Mark's dream?
The more I think about the finer details of your story, the more of a sadistic ass you seem to be. I only joke, of course. But in all seriousness, methinks The Nightmare has found a new host, and our dear protagonist isn't liking it so much...
I'm liking this setup, and the unreliable viewpoint. Assuming that the "Celestia is a coping mechanism" thing isn't true, then his state of mind implies that something terrible happened between the two.
You have me hooked , this has piqued my interests and looking to see how it plays out.
This is an unusual take on Momlestia. Color me intrigued.
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6370548 I forgot to type the 'un'. Fixed.
This is pretty interesting.
I like the interaction between the two. Keep it up.
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That's a great idea but I had no intentions of putting Nightmare Moon/Luna in this fic. But I might now.
A big theme of this story is the repression of childhood. Mark does feel guilty but he rather carry that guilt then know why. It's easier on his shoulders.
I am a sadistic ass and this was written on late crazy-sauce. I'm just going to be nuts going forward. And this is me holding back. Do you want me see me putting some real effort into this story? Nobody needs to see that!
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Something terrible did happen. In the second dream, notice how the little boy was gradually opening up to her? Something bad had already happened to him. He had the scars on his hands and the cut on his face before meeting her. Imagine what would have happened if she got interrupted raising him? It wouldn't take much to destroy the progress she'd made.
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I hope you will continue to like it. I got inspired from a thread on how to write a motherly Celestia.
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Nice quote-fu, my friend.
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This is going to be weird but I'm going to ask you to describe that interaction. Do you mean between the little boy (there's a special reason why I'm referring to him separately) and Celestia or Mark and Dr. Ward? Or the implied but yet not defined thing between Mark and Celestia.
For the second dream sequence, I wanted it to feel like a memory brought on by the rain. It was to establish two things. One, the little boy was already traumatized by the time he met Celestia. And two, he was only opening up to her.
6372414 okay, not weird at all.
I meant the little boy and Celestia. I'd like to see more of that, a lot more of that. For a few reasons.
1) Writing kids is hard. I'm not good at it, and I think you hit on something valuable when writing his perspective. The inner thoughts of him recognizing her as a horse, but also as something different. The fact that he's slowly opening up to her, but thinks she's weird.
2) Her way of dealing with him. Not being princessy, but just motherly.
I'm curious as to where their relationship will go. What Celestia intends to do with him.
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Gawd this might turn into a Pony "Pan's Labyrinth"...
Does this story have clop in it?
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Nope.
What a dark and intriguing story. I'm a little confused: So the protagonist was found 20 years after he disappeared, aged only 2 years? I would think everyone thinks he was abducted by aliens, and the government would probably be tracking him to study things like his health and aging.
Well, that's dark.
Even darker...
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6376846 ... Please no.
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~Out of Story Notes (Because I'll probably never get to explain it in-story)~
When Mark was on the phone he used a different identity, Patrick Santera. It was my way to imply he changed his identity to escape his reputation. And of course, his psychiatrists and the Shade of Celestia would know about that since he talks to them about things while getting his medicine.
The only reason why Mark isn't being aggressively monitored by certain interested parties because of the Shade of Celestia either making him into a raging, uncooperative berserker or driving the respective team-leaders into insanity. And in his twenties, Mark walks a fine line with drug addiction and will happily curse anyone out if they try to ask him anything Equestria before closing in on himself. He's a dead-end clam but they, just like the Shade, are willing to wait until all things he's repressed comes bubbling out.
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Awesome!
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Super awesome!
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Don't tell me you think the government is going to swoop in and save Mark from the big old bad alicorn? Eh, don't worry about him. This is the darkest the story will get for now. Prepare yourself for the incoming Momlestia feels.
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6377471 I am really enjoying this fic, you don't find very many momlestia fics like this so it is very refreshing to see.
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I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Can I pick your brain on your thoughts on the latest chapter? What did you think about the Shade of Celestia and her relationship with Mark? I wanted their interactions to be somewhat ironic and contrast to the little boy and Celestia in the dream.
6377531 I thoroughly enjoy the interaction, you have a being that wanted to use him as a tool to destroy another but over time grew to enjoy having this tool around. And now that it is fond of him, it will still do it's plan but want to keep him afterwords. It has a twisted version sense of love/heart that shows a depth to it than it just being a normal parasite. Going to love to see how this will contrast to how Celestia feels about mark and if she truly claimed him as her own son/colt when she declared herself his mother in his dreams all those years ago.
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That's great! Thanks for the feedback.
I'm actually tempted that after finishing Utter, writing a fic where Nightmare Moon 'raises' Mark uninterrupted by chemicals. Written from the perspective of a magically-sensitive caseworker or something? The human version of Celestia who comes across him? Dark themes are fun to play with and it's just an idea.
6377583 You welcome ^-^, now back to slaving over a typewriter! Fulfill our needs mwhahaha!
Imma watching this, just wondering how deep this rabbit hole goes.
1: Just how long has mark been from Equestria? I am curious to see how much of Mark's memories of Celestia are legitimate memories of his time in Equestria and how much is of the Shade messing with him.
2: Sorry to be a grammar pedant, but I think the word you are looking for is "altar". "Alter" is a verb that means "To Change", as in clothing.
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That's great.
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This will probably be answered in the next chapter.
You're the first to bring this up. You get a cookie.
Nah, feel free to tell me. I got writer vision and I can miss the little errors while slaving over a sentence for hours. Point them out any time.
6379930 Yay, internet cookies!
On top of that, if Nightmare was partially a manifestation of Luna's jealousy, is this shade a manifestation of Celestia's regret for letting Mark go?
Niiiice, dark and slightly morbid, i approve!!
is the story dead or?
Hey, if this story isn't updating, you should really consider marking it as on hiatus or cancelled.
This reminds me of that old Mad TV sketch about the families of children who yonder of to Narnia or fairyland or wherever.
absolutely love this story, it is such a great story, i love how you set the seen and make the charters go through there own unique struggles. id love to read more about mark especially. i cant wait for you to put out the next chapter!
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I am assuming this is dead then o3o since it has been over 2 years? this sucks as it was really good too
I love this and I really just want more of it, if you could it would be great to see you make more of this story soon :)
I love this already