I'm one of the people who knows every song in the show, all the latest news in the fandom, and never misses an episode. Is that weird?
When Rainbow Spectrum has a dream one night about her village being attacked, she thinks it's an ordinary nightmare, but when she keeps having it again and again, she realizes it's anything but ordinary. With nothing but the help of her best friends, an easy going DJ, a sarcastic unicorn, and a bossy book writer, she sets off on a quest to save her village.
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I think you mean vanished.
This fic has been built up for a couple months, and let me assure you...
... it did not disappoint. I like it!
Well, for the route you're taking: introducing the characters as per short chapters, this is a really impressive start. The storyline is begin referenced to, it's short and simple enough for the reader to adapt to the character easily, I love this.
Also, for a first chapter of a first fic, this is unbelievably impressive, and incredibly coherent!
I salute you, Spec! Have a fave!
7476035 Thanks so much! And also yes it was supposed to be vanished, Ill go fix it. Hehe
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My pleasure, Spec! I was glad to read this.
This is a great introduction! Just some minor punctuation errors, such as
There shouldn't be any commas in there. If there is an "And", there shouldn't be any commas before it.
Ex: "This is Fluttershy, Rainbow Spectrum and Twilight Sparkle."
instead of "This is Fluttershy, Rainbow Spectrum, and Twilight Sparkle."
(Sorry I had to be That Person...
)
Great so far, I love how this is going!
It's impressive. And I'm never impressed this easily. who's next though melody or the others
7476126 okay, ill get right on that.
7476138 I'm thinking next will be Eclipse, and then Melody.
7476225 cool I can't wait at least your kind enough not to make me suffer and answered my question
7476232 lol. That happens to me a lot.
7476236
A couple of she's need to be capitalized and I'm sure you meant vanity mirror. Aside from that you have my interest.
7493454 yeah, that is what I meant. And I hope your enjoying!
(I'll be sure to fix it.)
7493472 I am so far.
pretty good. Who's next?
Man, you did so much better with her then I thought! You gave enough about her without making her say much, but through the voices in her head. That is perfect man, pefect (even if the chapter is short as hell, but I'll give you a pass for writing her so well. As long as you update quicker next time or make a longer chapter, :P)
One thing, is she does speak more then I think you think she does.
7504138 phew! That's a huge weight being lifted if my shoulders! I'm so glad I did that right
, but okay, I'll try to make her talk more in the other chapters!
(Also yeah, the chapter is really short, I kinda wish I would of made it longer, but it did cover what it needed to!)
7504093 Melody Scratch is next, sorry if you didn't want your OC to be last, that's just the random order I put them in.
7504206 Eh, I don't mind
Okay.... this gave me legitimate chills. I've had experience with this kind of thing, and you captured it perfectly. Anyways, solid introduction! I'm guessing she's a (if not the) villain in this, with the whole demon thing and all.
Short version: creepy, well-written, dark, and intriguing.
I look forward to the next chapter, Spec.
7504432 Thanks!and I won't give away too much though, seeing as how I haven't quite figured it out myself, but yes, Eclipse will be a big part of this.
7504440
Can Relate.
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I'm a little curious, Typer: what was in that reply you deleted?
If it was spoilers, then thanks!
If it was something else, why did you delete it?
Did I say something to offend?
If so, My apologies: I didn't mean to!
7504695 I don't think you offended typervader, we talked some ideas over, and we seemed happy about it, don't know what was written
7504711
Huh, alright.
7476035 Spoliers were in it.
7504891
Alright, thanks!
Next chapter
7607832 I know, I'm so sorry for being this late. But for the moment, I need u to bear with me, I honestly don't know when the next chapter will be out, but I promise I'll get it done
7609448 will a cookie make u feel better
7609465
sure.
7613096 *gives u a cookie* here u go
7609448 NO! YOU MUST SELL YOUR SOUL TO THIS STORY! YOU CANT HAVE A LIFE!!!!!!
Nah, its fine, stuff happens. http://paradigmpizza.deviantart.com/art/If-You-Give-a-Twilight-a-Cookie-305999428
Finally
awesome i give it a 17 out of 10 cant wait for more
geez humans these days remember spec don't let comments like this get you down use it to empower you and next time we'll make them shove those words down there throat dont worry
7894853 as for you she worked really hard be greatful that shes even writing this book
7894978 I'm not being negative. the finally was out of excitement
Btw's just thought this should be here:
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well say something other than just finally others can take it the wrong way
7894995 ok. finally a new chapter, yay
7894998 know what nvm knowing me ill get pushy cause off reasons but thats way betterdespite the obvious sarcasm
7895010 I'm dead serious. i am happy she got a new chapter out and I can't wait to see what she does with my oc next.
5 months for 500 words xD You need some help? :P
7895484 I do need some help. THERES SOMETHING WRONG WITH MEEEEEE! Not really no, lol, I'm working on the next chapter right now XD it'll be way longer I promise
Wow, took me a while to get to this.
Nice character intro!
Though, I do have one note:
This comes off a little clunky, Spec. Might I suggest something like:
7943829 Took me even longer to get to this! Thanks for the critique! I'll be sure to change that. I'm not a professional in any way. Thanks for being a friend!
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No problem, Spec.