Judgment hall, The Underground
"Papyrus, do you want anything?"
Sans looked up at the shadowy figure of his fallen brother. The ghostly figure smiled and seemed to hold out a hand, as if welcoming him. He gripped Papyrus' scarf and held it to his broken rib cage. 'well bro, looks like I'll be joining you soon. too bad I couldn't delay them longer.' The skeleton grinned. 'on the bright side, I gave them their fair sets of resets. must have at least been thirty, maybe more.’ He looked down at his hand, rapidly falling to dust. Already his fingers were stinging, and he couldn’t move them anymore. 'I just hope that alphys is able to get the rest of the monsters to safety...' His smile faded slightly. 'well, at least what's LEFT of them.' His thoughts then turned to Asgore, the poor king would never stand a chance against this human. Despite his apparent toughness he never really had wanted to kill anyone, he was far too loving or, as Papyrus put it, "A big, fluffy, pushover!"
"Hng!" The pain of turning to dust was overwhelmingly intense, he looked up towards the ceiling of the judgment hall, the dusk like light quickly fading both from his view and his eyes. As he fell to his knees and everything was turning to black, he could only muster up a single thought: 'I love you, bro.' Oblivion was reaching to him, and he was ready to answer it. Oblivion rushed toward him.
A hand rushed toward him.
The hand reached him first, pulling him by his jacket into nothingness.
Canterlot Castle, Equestria
Celestia sighed. Another day, another session of listening to nobles whining and complaining about how "too much money was going to creating roads between cities" or that "somepony took my seat at my favorite cafe." She was bored out of her mind, wishing for a distraction.
And then, she got one. She winced as she felt a sudden burst of energy, blasting through her skull with an amazing power, far stronger than she could ever hope to muster. She looked up, and flared her horn in an attempt to locate the direction of blast of power. Her eyes narrowed as it seemed to come from the garden. She stood up from her throne, interrupting the noble below her. "And THAT is why I would like to sue Golden Hooves for stealing my servant from m-" The noble was cut off by the Diarch of Equestria raising a golden slipper clad hoof, much to her annoyance.
"I am sorry, my little pony, but I have a piece of business that I must attend to," the Princess spoke, hoping the noble wouldn’t make trouble.
The noble spluttered, "W-w-what? What do you MEAN important business?!? I AM HILLTOP CLIFTON, I CLEARLY HAVE THE MOST IMPORTANT PROBLEM HERE!" Celestia sighed, of course she was making trouble.
"No, Mrs. Clifton, you do not,” Celestia said firmly. “I would suggest that you stop complaining and hire a new servant. Guards! Please escort Mrs. Clifton out of the throne room." She quickly turned and trotted up to the lieutenant in charge, "Tell the rest of the nobles that day court will be canceled for the rest of the day, I have felt something that requires my attention." With a salute and an “it will be done, Your Grace,” the lieutenant left to inform the nobles. Celestia watched him go, then trotted out to a side room of the throne room and quickly teleported to the Lunar Suite. 'I hope to Faust it isn't an enemy we need to fight,' she thought as she teleported.
*Knock knock knock*
"LUNA!" A blue Alicorn winced quietly, flipping over and pushing her head further into the warm embrace that was her pillow. Another knocking fit sounded, accompanied by a "LUNA YOU NEED TO WAKE UP!" ringing through the door.
The alicorn moaned and flopped the pillow over her head, and groaned quietly, "Hnnngggg, five more minutes, please, Tia... I have a headache." Another knock sounded out in the room this time more furious.
"Luna, if you don't get up I'm coming in and waking you up!" Celestia insisted.
Luna groaned again. "I don't want to, Sister!" she pleaded. The sound of teleportation flew in the room, the lunar Alicorn pulling her pillow over her head tighter in response. The sound of metal scraping on metal could be heard. Luna began to pull the pillow off her head in curiosity, when she was suddenly assaulted by a bucket of ice cold water. "PSHHSHSH," the dark blue Alicorn sprung out of her bed, spitting water out of her mouth and shaking water from her mane and coat. "CELESTIA! WHAT IN TARTARUS-"
"Luna I need you with me right now, I felt a massive power surge when I was in day court, I think a new enemy may have appeared or an old one may have broken free," Celestia babbled in one stressed sentence.
"Who?” Luna responded. “ Is it Discord?"
"No Luna, Discord's power would have been much more chaotic.This seemed to have an energy that was unnatural, like it was not meant to be on this world... or any other world for that matter. It is unlike Discord's, Sombra's or any other that we have faced. Not even Starswirl the Bearded produced that much raw magical energy... I fear for the worst."
"Then why not call for the element bearers?"
"Three problems with that. One: they may be strong, Luna, but they are far more useful against an enemies we know. For all their experience, they are very naive in their thinking. Two: they are like a glass cannon; they are amazingly powerful, but if even one of them is gone or corrupted then the entirety of the elements are useless. Three: the power of Harmony is only effective against true evil, and this may be nothing more than power. Either way, I will not risk them on an unknown. Now, let us go find this disturbance."
Castle garden, Canterlot Equestria
Celestia and Luna both rushed out of the doors of the castle to look for the disturbance. Upon reaching the garden, they were greeted by a strange sight. In the middle of a bed of golden flowers, two skeletons of creatures they had never seen were lying on the ground. One was larger and covered in a long, black coat and was lying face down next to the other skeleton. It was difficult to tell when the coat ended and the skeleton began. The second, smaller skeleton was lying face up and seemed to be bleeding, somehow. A large gash wound was sliced into its chest, cutting through what seemed to be a white t-shirt and a blue jacket. It was tightly gripping a red scarf, so long that was partially lying on the creature’s black shorts. Both Celestia and Luna approached cautiously, their horns glowing prepared to strike at whatever had sent these two poor remains. Celestia approached first. "These poor souls, what do you think could have done this to them?"
"Dark magic?” Luna questioned tentatively. “It seems like the most likely explanation to me."
"That still doesn’t explain their appearance Luna. Why would somepony kill another creature and move it to our garden? It just doesn’t add up."
"Mayhaps the taller skeleton will be able to give us some answers if we can inspect its wounds, if it even has any." Luna trotted up to the skeleton and was about to flip it onto its back when Celestia called out to her.
"WAIT! We just can't go messing with their bodies, they need to be looked at by a professional! We don’t know what did this! If we mess with the bodies that could corrupt the scene."
Luna waved off her sister. "Please, Celestia, we've both seen our fair share of battles, I think we should be able to figure out what happened to these poor creatures. I mean the small one obviously was sliced by a sword in the torso. I just want to see what happened to the tall one." She pushed the tall one onto its back, ignoring her sister’s complaints, and was shocked by what she saw on the skull. Two cracks, leading from either eye socket to the top of the skull and the top of its oddly shaped mouth respectively, decorated his face. She looked back to her sister, "See Tia? I mean, its death is rather obvious, its skull was cracked open while wearing a helmet, most likely from a mace or an Earth pony's hooves."
Celestia walked up to join her sister and glared at her, "I still think we should wait for a full investigation. Experience in combat does not make us professionals in the realm of forensics. I will call one of my detectives to make a full investigation of what happened here."
Neither of the alicorns noticed a dim pair of lights in the eye sockets of the larger skeleton, nor the slight movement of its hand towards the smaller one's body. Luna looked back down at them, planning to examine the cracks closer, and shrieked, jumping back several yards and propelling herself with her wings. Celestia also looked down to see what had scared Luna so much and was surprised to see the larger skeleton weakly reaching to the smaller one. She immediately activated her magic, prepared to destroy the abomination before her, when it spoke, quietly and weakly. "Plea̢se͡,̷ s͢-̵s͘-s̕av͡e m̨y ́s͝o̵n͘.͡ I͘ ha͏v͜e g̸i͞v͠en w͢ha̵t̀ ͏ĺi̷ttl̴e ͟magi̛c I͞ h͢a͜ve ́l-͢lef͞t ̛to ̨prol͘o͝ng his l̵if̡e.͡ I nèed͠ h̕im ͟t̵o li̛ve͠." His voice was difficult to hear, full of static, like he was speaking through an old radio.
Celestia let her horn power down, realizing there was no threat here, and looked at the skeleton. "I will try," she murmured softly.
The skeleton seemed to smile at this, and began to rapidly turn to dust before her eyes. It made a last attempt to touch its apparent son and whisper to him, "I̷ ͝l̴ơve͡ you, m̛ỳ̨ s̶̸͡o̷͟͟n͞͝.͏̸" before he turned completely to dust. Celestia picked up the smaller skeleton and the black cloak with the dust in her magic and carried it behind her.
"LUNA! Let's go! We must try to save this one's life. We can only hope it is not too late..."
Well you've got my attention, that's for sure!
Boooooo god damn fucking bitch ass 8bit game due undertale die!!!!
7652779 I hope to deliver on future chapters soon!
7652807 Many people believe that the Undertale community is toxic, this may be true, BUT I often times see people that hate it are just as toxic. Did you even read the story or did you just see Undertale and immediately hate on it?
Needs a major editing run. You should never have two characters speaking in the same paragraph, for one thing. There are other issues as well.
7652879 Yah, I'm not the best writer, this will be my first endeavor into the world of writing so I'm bound to make plenty of mistakes. The important part to me is to learn from them and to move on.
You have my attention. This is quite interesting so far.
This has potential. I'd be willing to edit for this. PM me if you're interested.
Attention granted: looks like someone has to finish the job
7653126 i.ytimg.com/vi/tUdkUbX3jKY/maxresdefault.jpg :3
7652858 In my experience, it's usually best to ignore people like that or, barring that, respond professionally like you just did. I had two people like that a while ago for my Evolve crossover, which is a Displaced and a damn good one too. They asked me how in my right mind could I ever produce something like it, and I responded honestly. Never heard from them again.
From authors notes.
NO. NO. NO.
Dear author. Never, and I mean NEVER put yourself down for writing something, anything, that you took the time to put some effort into. If you concede to the notion that your story will not measure up just because it's your first attempt, then you are already setting yourself and your story up for failure. Basically, you've lost the battle before it even began by saying this. I've seen it before. I've DONE it before. So please, dear author, do not sell yourself short just because you are "inexperienced". Who knows, someone might read this and think that it is the best damn thing that they have ever read.
This definitely needs more to it it has a bright future by my standards
Why why do I read depressing stuff when I'm happy . I need more now
It'll be funny to see how sans reacts to two colored ponys standing in front of him?
ahhahhaha
And where's Cobalt Rump?
7712258 lol
Excuse me, I didn't get a permission slip to go on this feels trip.
I'm kind of suprised that you use that too for your first story. I never really liked that, mostly because Faust as the creator is always used as the god and nothing else. I'm just not that kind of guy who likes to totally worship someone that much. I'm not sure if I still remember the reason why I started to dislike it, but I beieve it was because it happened to often.
Nice story.
I like this story, it seems certain types of stories or universes always end up with the same kind of problem, so I'm alway happy to find new authors which hopefully try some other things. Like not having a main char that is blushing because of everything or something like that, it often looks like people would forget there are other personalitys too.
I haven't seen anything bad, at least it wasn't bad enough for me to be able to notice anything that was wrong. To be honest I thought the large skelleton would be Papyrus, but I guess that is not a real problem here.
I don't have enough trust in my grammar to actually say much about it, but like I said I didn't noticed anything wrong beside personal preferences.
7652807 you took lost 18 health points.
Hmm...
I'm interested, but also am worried on how this story handles the Chara and Frisk issue. :P Can you tell me how they're both handled in this story?
"The sound of teleportation flew into the room"
No, It teleported into the room.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA fucken Americans.
was completely unaware of this, it is actually a decent read.
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You finally got around to reading this, huh?
Hmmm... Grammar, check.
Interesting plot, check.
Decent pacing, check.
Captured my interest, check.
Well, so far I think your story's doing pretty good so far. Keep it up!
I’m already starting to like this story; this is the second undertale story I’m reading the first being made by tarbtano, excellent introductions but I wonder what role caster plays as I doubt he’ll be dead just like that.
is it just me or is that noble Hillary Clinton?🤔
Also why do I sense some Sanslestia in the future?
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In her defense, anything that doesn't fall into the categories of Unicorn magic does tend to be evil.
best! LOLZ
The elements ARE like a glass cannon!
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Very eloquent. How long did it take to come up with that comment?
Hello Dr. Gaster