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That one has to be my favorite.
This chapter just... travels, doesn't it? After the last scene from the last chapter, I was kind of hoping for the plot to kick in, but this just seems a tad fluffy unless I'm not reading into the scenes enough. Like, is the Englishman one of the badguys? Is the soiree being held by the Big Bad?
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It is a bit fluffy I admit. I wanted to establish Jack's character a little more solidly, and do a little more world building before I dove into the main course. My stories start off pretty slow and then escalate--I'm kind of a sucker for longer fics, haha.
And to answer your question regarding the soiree, yeah. It's going to play a role up ahead.
Thanks for the comment!
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It's a bridging chapter. The story is still in its infancy, so character and relationship development is still nifty. Plus, as Merc already said, it's going to be a long one, so the build up is allowed to be a little slower. Think Fantasy novel, that's the best way to treat Merc's style.
Well I like this.
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I was hoping you'd turn around, haha.
That was an awesome read, Merc! A nice little bit of world building here, some characterization there, slow and steady build up. Magnificent. There were a few instances of mistyped letters or similar words that were incorrect, like I think in the second chapter you meant Taut instead of Taunt, I don't remember what it was, but I remember thinking Taunt wasn't the right word.
Still, gonna be watching this one! I'll probably read your other one on the weekend when I can keep reading the whole thing in one sitting.
I didn't realize this was on Fimfiction, which is my preferred place to read MLP-fics. I'm faving it on here, but if you're wondering I'm the crazy person who decided I was going to review every single chapter of this on Fanfiction.net because it was awesomely written but lacking in popularity. I'm glad to see you've got far more comments and likes here. Keep up the good work, continue writing and I look forward to more.
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I--I think I love you.
Seriously though, thanks for the support on .Net. I honestly appreciate it, haha.
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You're very welcome! I'll probably comment on here when it updates, but any real long comments or actual critique will be on fanfiction.net.
Loved that scene with Gummy and the one with Rarity. Finally someone has a reasonable reaction to a pet alligator.
And so the seed of friendship has been planted!
Character development shall be had! And how delectable it shall be indeed!
Though with the masterminds' plan, there might be danger stealthily attacking the six.
I shall read on!
That's fucked up, yo.
I lol'd nonetheless.
I think "Merc the Jerk" has become "Merc the Rather Talented Storyteller". Enjoying it immensely thus far.
Hey Mac, where'd ya get all this ham from, anyway?
Ya see Marseille out in the front yard when ya came in?
... no?
This is so worth the read!
Oh god, a part of me feels bad for laughing at that.
Wait. Why is Rarity eating salad at 6:00 in the morning?
But... Hans just dropped Pinkie off at school