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Great chapter keep it up.
Yay! New chapter!
So is this going to be a Rarijack story? Seeing it has a Romance tag with only the AJ and Rarity character tags....
Lots of good stuff, still keeping the same momentum you've had going. Keep it up.
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Eyup. It's a RariJack.
Very good so far; Humanized pony stories are hard to pull off well, but you've more than managed to. It's a bit early in the game for me to give any in-depth critique, but I do like how you're developing the Rarijac, and I have a feeling the baddie from that one scene is Discord. Keep up the good work!
Well played, Diane.
Hohoho, Pinkie you devil.
Trying not to comment on every single chapter of this so you don't get spammed, but if there are notes I'm going to post them.
Editorial notes:
"it's well-glossed wood lay bare" -unnecessary apostrophe. it's = it is
"AJ trend slowly" -Should be 'tread'.
The scientific cross-over was a very nice touch. I don't think I've ever seem someone look at pony magic from a truly scientific point of view before.
That's funny, I didn't know Pinkie owned and operated a shipping company...
Ba dum tiss.
I noticed that in this chapter, Hans says he just dropped Pinkie off at school, then we go to Sugarcube corner and we find Pinkie Pie working at the moment.... Did she manage to get back quickly or ...?
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Pinkie logic, unless you have the power to see beyond the fourth wall, or in tuned to chaos, don't ask questions... and the whole blood face thing is just a warning done by administrators to limit natural talent, which is when you end up with super mages like trixie , and when self taught then opening roads to them, you end up with even stronger warriors unconstrained by the rigid teachings of boring schools! And that is why twilight is such a horrible mage, she can't handle the chaos of free thinking, viva chaos!
I've spent the past half hour trying to imagine what a merging of the minds and personalities of those two would be like...
(I promise I won't comment on every single chapter; I just keep thinking of things I want to say! )
4964856 I agree with you wholeheartedly! On the Sagan/Hawking comment
Diane, you sneaky devil!
Who?
Rarity is hungry for...something.