Twilight Sparkle, powerful mage unicorn and bounty hunter, has finally tracked down the wanted criminal Starlight Glimmer. But will her plans and preparations be enough to take down the evil mastermind?
Written for the Thousand Word Contest II, under the Comedy category!
Huge thanks to ScarredVirtue for pre-reading once again!
Huh, way better than I anticipated, great job!
Needs an AU tag
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Based on the ending, it was just the two of them playing a game, so it fits entirely within canon of them doing something on the weekends or their free time
Truly a battle of dimwits.
I was going to point out that this needs the AU tag. But since it was nothing but a game, don't think you need one.
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Same.
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But we love them anyway .
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Eeyup.
Ya'll all playing checkers while I've been Chess Boxing this whole time!
Is it just me, or does the cover art just scream "now kiss",
and the whole story just scream "now sex"?
Omg I LOVED THIS
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Glad you did!
I was so into this lol, some part of me wishes it was real and this is how they were for fun before Starlight was reformed
Loved it!
Aw, you’re learning from Trixie.
I was not expecting them to be playing a game, great ending
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It does .
ehehe
oh love this, Twilight and Starlight just constantly revealing that they were standing behind the other one the whole time
pfft
so she had access to the real ingredients from the beginning, so she didn’t need to actually buy them? that is amazing, love it
just kiss already!
delightful work of oneupsmareship, thank you for writing!
Now this was a fun little twist. Only caught it right before it occurred and got a good chuckle. Two unicorns that skipped a bit on childhood games escalating in a series of nuh-uhs and uh-huhs at a high magical level? Very fun.
And this is why you need to have some rules in place, so players can’t just “nuh uh” each other ad infinitum. Entertaining little exchange, especially since it was all in good fun. Thank you for it and congrats on the judge prize.
Truly they are playing the most intense game of mental chess ever known to ponykind.
Hello! I read all the stories from this contest that won recognition, so have a review. The snag here was that I knew what was going on pretty much from the start. Didn't make the fic boring, but did make it predictable in terms of where it was going. Still quite fun, though.
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Thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it! I did actually find your review shortly after you posted it from a friend, and that was also the reason that portion of the long description has since been removed.
Originally, I added that a few hours after publish as I had gotten a few comments on here and elsewhere about needing an AU tag, and got a flood of downvotes from what I assumed was that issue (it had 6 downvotes within two hours of publish) so I panicked and added it in, and forgot to remove it after the initial viewing period.
I wish I had removed it far earlier, like when results were published, but hopefully now that twist can remain unspoiled for future readers ^^
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Thanks for the insight! Normally after reviewing a fic I try to post the courtesy note here within a few days, but Covid threw off my schedule this time. Apologies for that, and thanks for the story.
I love how you portrayed Starlight and Twilight's friendship in such a goofy way that fits so well. This read like a well placed, yet consistent uno reverse card sequence.
Dear Celestia, that was a fun story of them just trying to one up each other with magic.
"You fell victim to one of the classic blunders. The most famous is 'Never get involved in a land war in Asia,' but only slightly less well known is this: 'Never go in against a Sicilian when death is on the line.” ― William Goldman, The Princess Bride
Quite a fun quip of a story you got there Six . Was well enjoyed, Thank you