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Another good chapter but it felt a bit off. A bit below par. I think that you laid it on too thick with the snarkiness and "playful" antagonism. It just went on and on and on and on.
John usually knows when to stop after a short while, so it felt a little OOC with how long he kept teasing Midnight. Hurling a crankshaft at her also felt like a step too far.
I loved this chapter. I'm also sorry if my previous comments contributed to the blow up in the comment section. Although I'd like to see another sex scene it won't kill me if it doesn't happen. This is a great story and I can't wait for it to continue.
Damn. If you keep this byplay up between John and Midnite, I'll bever sleep again!
And I do not care what a previous commenter said about this chapter. It was great and funny, which has always been the theme in this story. It should be interesting to see with Starla now with John and Midnite how that will go and what new shenanigans will ensue!
God, the shenanigans are so fun. At first I thought John was being a little too much but Midnight's responses to his bullshit were so good, and I could quickly tell she didn't really mind it. Sometimes writers stray too deep into "character being a playful jackass" scenes without actually highlighting the warmth and playfulness. They'd focus too much on the high jinks and not making sure the readers knows that the character being annoyed isn't actually annoyed, but you did a perfect job showing that. It's just their dynamic! It's great!
Can't wait for the sleepover also. Midnight might have to recruit Starla in tempering John's tomfoolery, the poor mare alone is overwhelmed when John gets funny
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If Midnight can get a day where she's off the rails and unhinged in her tomfoolery, I think John can to! It's just that she's way more subdued than him when she's being annoying.
The crankshaft felt a little crazy, yea, that's about it though. John's done some stupid stuff before though and he's a risky thinker, and it was definitely highlighted here that throwing the crankshaft at her may have been a little more than stupid, just like a fifth of the things he does. Luckily for him Midnight didn't mind it terribly. I think her not getting angry at that was his greenlight to annoy her more
How sweet! John wanted to mark Middie as his queen.
Continue to love their dynamic. Looking forward to seeing Starla over for awhile.
Midnight, the one true Queen! Anointed and set apart to rule the pones!
🎶 it's the circle of life, and it moves us all through despair and hope, through faith and love. 'Till we find out place on the path unwinding in the circle, the circle of life! 🎶
John better be careful, that line from being endearing-annoying and being annoying-annoying is really close!
Should have John either quote or sing Masochism Tango to Middy... just to get a reaction. ;)
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That would be amazing
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Or worse, give her ideas...
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Thinking that Starla might be able to show more social friend things. Like the cooking thing, since they're both self-admittedly novices at food preparation. Will be interesting what things she'll accidentally toss on the table. 😎
You must take your place in the circle of... Stuff
I love the adorable banter between Middie and John.
I agree that the "playful antagonism" went just a skosh too far, but I still enjoyed the chapter.
I cackled at that one. 🤣
Loved this story!!!
Thanks for the chapter!
"Simbaaa..." I call once again in a thick accent.
this made me spit out my drink the humor has either stepped up or im up a chromosome