The Twilight Enigma
by iisaw
Sequel to The Celestia Code and The Luna Cypher
Chapter One
Not According to Plan
In which Princess Twilight Sparkle laments
that the universe is rarely arranged to her liking.
May 3rd, 1014, Late Morning
In the Temple of Rushwa the Hyena God,
Nagala, Marezambique, Zebrica
"Rarity!" I screamed, staggering with the effort of resisting the temple's magical deathtraps. "There are more armed zebras coming up the stairs! Can you buy us some time?"
Rarity turned from the wall she was hacking at and spared a second for a glance up at where Applejack, Pinkie Pie, and Rainbow Dash were hauling away at the crowbar wedged under the gigantic emerald set into the huge idol's forehead. She dropped her pickaxe, levitated five slim blades out of the scabbards on her back, stepped over the unconscious bodies of the temple's guards, and peered down at the onrushing foes.
"Those are the Sultan's elite bodyguards, dear. I might have to be less careful than usual."
"Do... uhnn..." I staggered under the assault of a new disintegration beam that spewed from the fanged mouth of the hyena god statue. "Do your... best," I gasped out.
"AHAH!" Rarity cried out, leaping to the head of the stairs. She spun her blades around herself so fast that they hissed through the air. "Who is so eager for death that they dare face the needles of Silver Mask?"
Corny, right? But it worked. Several of the guards balked and one lost his footing, tumbling off the narrow stairs to land with an unpleasant thud in the courtyard below. Their hesitation was partly because of Rarity's unexpected bravado and partly because her nom de guerre had gained a certain notoriety along the coast of the Eastern Sea.
But they were Sultan Zatar's elite guards, after all, and after a moment the remaining ones gathered themselves up and resumed their advance.
Rarity's blades flashed out, cutting the air inches in front of the zebras' noses, clashing against the short, heavy swords they held in their mouths. The guards each used a different parry or bind, no doubt hoping to overwhelm Rarity's ability to wield her multiple blades all at once. Fortunately for us, what Rarity lacked in raw magical power she more than made up for in precise and lightning-fast control.
She held them off until they realized that, for some unknown reason, she wasn't trying to harm them. The guards surged forward with murderous intent.
"Oh, I am so sorry about this," Rarity muttered and whipped the point of one of her blades along the face of the leading guard, just under his left eye.
The zebra hissed in pain and reared up, toppling into one of his fellows, effectively taking them both out of the fight for several precious seconds. That only left five of the guards, one for each of Rarity's blades. With a swooping moulinet, each blade drove at the hearts of the remaining guards. The move was showy and relatively slow; not very effective in a fight with a well-trained opponent. A quick back-step coupled with a block could easily counter that sort of attack.
Unfortunately for the guards, a short leap backwards worked much, much better on a training ground than it did on a narrow, steep staircase. All but one of the leading zebras vanished with a whinny of surprise as gravity betrayed them in time-honored fashion. The zebra that hadn't managed to throw himself off the stairs watched in horror as all five blades arced back to converge on him.
Rarity smiled.
In his haste to retreat, the guard stumbled into the other two who were just recovering themselves, and they all half-fled, half-tumbled down the stairs. Rarity cocked her head to one side, watching them withdraw. "Twilight, dear," she said quietly, "the guards are retreating, but there are more coming through the plaza gate to join them, and they have bows."
I cursed the mages that had been so paranoid about their temple that they had loaded it down with enough magical traps to fry a regiment of thieves. Ordinarily, resisting the death curses while putting up a shield against arrows would have been easy for me. But after nearly a quarter of an hour of battling against a flood of murderous energy, I was nearing complete physical and magical exhaustion. If we didn't catch a break soon, things would get extremely nasty.
"Anytime now, girls," I hissed desperately between my teeth to my friends prying away at the idol.
"Workin' on it, sugarcube," grunted Applejack.
Rarity held her position at the head of the stairs. She was spinning her blades in a valiant attempt to cut down some of the incoming arrows when there was a loud crack and AJ, Pinkie, and Dash tumbled to the floor as the emerald popped out of its socket.
Rainbow leaped up and caught the gem before it could smash against the tiles and Applejack made a dash for the rear wall where Rarity had been working. She spun into a hard double-hoofed buck at the partially demolished wall and the stone blocks exploded outward, clattering onto the roof of the gallery beyond.
"Time to go, y'all!" she shouted.
Everypony backed rapidly through the opening in the wall. I followed last, sweating and unsteady with fatigue. Arrows rained into the temple, bouncing off the walls and floor, but only a few ricocheted through the hole we'd made, and all of those missed us.
I dropped my suppressing spells and the temple room containing the idol turned into an inferno of deadly magic, which temporarily separated us from the guards on the stairs.
"What now, Twilight?" Rarity asked.
The plan was in shambles. I had intended for us to go in near midnight and make the grab quickly and quietly, but a bit of gossip gathering in the town revealed that Sultan Zatar intended to use the forbidden spells locked into the Eye of Rushwa to spread a magical plague across his brother's kingdom in a ceremony at moonrise that evening. We were forced into a hurried improvisation that hadn't gone smoothly at all.
I flung back my head and cast a red burst of light high into the sky. "We hope Fluttershy is watching and can get Nebula here quickly. Rainbow, you take the Eye and head for the rendezvous point at the oasis."
"No way, Twi!" Dash protested. "I'm not leaving you guys behind!"
"We can't let the Sultan get it back! Thousands of innocent ponies will die!"
"So we smash it right now!" Dash lifted the gem over her head.
"NO!" I was surprised I had enough energy left to shout as loudly as I did. "That will release all the dark magic inside at once, and probably kill everypony in this city."
Rainbow Dash, wide-eyed, lowered the emerald very slowly and very carefully. "Whoa, Twi! You coulda said something about that earlier."
"Well, now you know. So go!"
"Nope." Dash shook her head. "Not until there's no other choice. You can fly it out of here if you want."
I shook my head and shrugged my wings under the disguising robe. "I'm too exhausted to glide, let alone fly carrying a gigantic rock. You're the only one who can do it."
"Hey, guys," came a bubbly, completely inappropriately cheerful voice for the circumstances. "What's big and floaty and rhymes with 'friendship?'"
"Airship?" I gasped, turning to see a wonderful sight: Nebula rising over the minarets of the city. Her crew had given up all pretense of being a simple merchant vessel, dropped the fighting nets, and flown no less than three pennants displaying the skull and crossbones. My joy was quickly tempered by the three fast-attack zebra ships coming up quickly behind her.
"Why can't anything go smoothly?" I groaned.
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Nice to see this up! Looking forward to Twilight's adventures!
Couldn't resist it, could you?
So, once this no doubt glorious ride is finally completed, I should keep watching for the eventual eventual, I dunno, Cadance Condundrum...?
(Actually that would be all kinds of cool...)
OH YEAH :D
Yes! Yes, yes yes! Thank you!
I can't wait to see the rest.
...So you said something about dropping right into the action, I recall? :)
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I wasn't kidding!
Awwwww snap!! Awwww snizity snayps!!
I've been waiting for this!! I'm excited!!!!
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Huh. Fooled me. I kept waiting for everypony to die and then Twilight wakes up.
I saw the post and dropped everything!
"Not According to Plan"
Alicorn command ship Nebula holdng low flight pattern above temple.
Oh, this is gonna be awesome. And I'm glad to see that the title I correctly guessed way back when is the one you went with .
6468401 I wonder if you just called the title for the hypothetical part 4 .
6468772 It's either that or "conspiracy" but we've already had a ton of conspiracy.
If you dont mind me asking how heavily this is going to lean on the luna cipher first?
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A considerable amount. You might be able to follow it without having read TLC first... maybe.
6469076 oh well, thank you for the warning. And may this go very well then.
Oohhh,,another sequel. Instant favorite. Don't need to read any of it to know..its on my favorites.
Rule 1: Never according to plan.
It's sooooo boring.
One of these days things are going to go to plan. Maybe.
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Thank youuu!
There's starting on a high note, and then there's crashing screaming in through the ceiling. Or out through the wall, as it happens.
Airship battles from the get-go?
Hoboy.
A sequel?
YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!
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In TLC, a certain pair of pony princesses partook in a relationship.
Is that relationship still going on? Or to ask more directly... Can I has TwiLuna?
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I think you will be pleased with Chapter Two.
EEEEEeeeeeeeeeeee!!!
It's here, it's here, it's HERE! YES!
*cough*
So, on sober and considered deliberation of the chapter presented...
THIS IS AWESOME. Where's the rest?!
(InstaFave, as if there were any doubt.)
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Thank you so much! The rest is on the way! (I'm just starting in on writing Chapter Eight, so there's lots of horse-words already in the pipeline!)
Tracking...
So I'm guessing this will end with the Element Bearers becoming the elements we see in The Quest or possible continuing after.
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Hey what's that lying on the ground ? Let me just pick it up, look inside and- My ! Here they were ! Here, have all of my yes.
Oh sure! Everyone's on board when it's Twilight's idea to fix the world!
But when I want to exterminate all those inferior to me, I'm the crazy one!
Favoritism, pure and simple!
Oomgomgomg yessss. This is gonna be awesome!!!!
Why would the zebra be fighting for the Saddla Arabians?
I mean, the Saddle Arabians were the primary zebra slave traders for hundreds of years! They only stopped slavery officially less than 50 years ago in some Saddle Arabian terrirtories!
That's totally idiotic! No one would be stupid enough to enlist with the same side who...
*looks at Africa coverting to Islam*
Ok... amending my previous statement. Kill em all Twilight.
Woo! Strong start. :)
I've been waiting for this since I finished The Luna Cypher! So happy you're writing this.
I've been waiting FOREVER for this!
The wait was very much worth it, and in this one short chapter, you have displayed once again a mastery of the wordsmithing arts.
Trying to fix the world will only create more destructive scenarios. Kinda the issue i had with that other story you did, which i pray this is not the prequel too. Her actions will onmly fuel further conflict. No one is powerful enough to conquer the world. That is why the evil villains always lost before.
I have been waiting too long for this. I've gotten online every day to check, to see if iisaw's next masterpiece is published! And now! IT FINALLY IS!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And it's amazing!!!
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I would take it as a great kindness if you wouldn't post ideological comments here. Particularly when they don't have much, if anything to do with the text of the chapter you're commenting on. This is a straight adventure story and it really isn't the place for such things.
Is Twilight WRONG!?! Maybe... but so what? Perfect characters make for boring fiction.
If you dislike the story so much, just downvote and stop reading. You are entitled to your opinions, but when you try to start a philosophical debate with a fictional character, you drag the audience away from the primary purpose of the story, which is just to have fun. Not to mention that such an exercise is completely futile.
Anyway... I hope you take this reply in the spirit it was given. If you have critiques about my story structure or grammar or suchlike, I'm perfectly happy to hear them. And, who knows... maybe a word or two about something you liked about the story?
6471765 The issue is whether or not how wrong she is, is taken itno account. Because she is wrong enough for this all ti just fall apart on her. It would be interesting to see how her aspirations fail, have her lose touch to what harmony is only to come back from it. That would be quite a tale.
But then again, you made a story where she somehow succeeded in this, and somehow sustains it.
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I would ask that you not try to dictate to me what I should write, but your comment above pretty much shows that you have no intention of respecting my wishes.
I read that as the Twilight Enema at first. Glad to see that isn't it.
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No, it's two guys in the back prying the gem from the idol and four guys up front laying about them with all manner of deadly implements!
Other than that, well, this formula's worked pretty great for first chapters so far and you've got me hooked.
6469479 They did, once. Battle of Bug Hill, TLC?
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OMG! Am I total geek for knowing exactly what you're talking about?
And here we go.
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Welcome to the new story!
Heists, death curses, foreign temples and airships in the first chapter? It's like I'm reading the opening scenes of a movie. You spoil us, iisaw.
Unlike TLC, I think I'll try reading this one as it releases.
'Bout damn time.
I think everyone's been holding their breath on this one.
And the opening is better than expected, even.
It's been... what, a week and a half since I started on The Celestia Code?
You're awesome, and your stories are super actiony and tense and TwiLuna with a twisted spin and world-building and stuff and I love it.
Dunno why it took me this long to find these, but at least that means that now...er... the last week has been extremely fun and entertaining.
I can't wait to see more of The Element Bearers and the Quest for World Peace (via adventure on/in the high-seas/skies)!