How My Best Friend Forever's Parents Became My Parents Too!

by trahzo

Ch.4: 2 More Surprises.

"Princess Twilight Sparkle, say hello to your new brother Spike, as you can see from the forms, we just adopted him!" Nacht & Velvet said with Smiles.

"Isn't that great Twily? Now Spike can look up to you, like how you looked up to me!" Shining said "This is great, I now have a brother to do guy stuff with!"

"Wow, I didn't think you'd love Spike enough to adopt him, but here's the papers proving it actually happened! I love you baby brother!" Said Twilight

"I love you to Big Sister!" replied Spike

"Well, now that all of that is taken care of, I got a surprise of my own!" Cadence said, directing all the attention to her. "Shining Armor, I got a bun in the oven."

"Well take it out then"

"No, I'm expecting."

"Expecting? Well if your expecting a package, then we should head back to the Crystal Empire right now."

"No you idiot! We're going to have a baby! I'm pregnant!"

A big shock came to everypony's faces! Shining Armor hugged his wife.

"We're going to be parents I'm so happy!"

"Cool I'm going to become an aunt!'

"Yay! I'm gonna be uncle."

Everypony D'awwwed at Spike's happy face. So the camera zooms out of the house, out of Canterlot, then out of Equestria, then out of Earth. Well that's the end of this story, except one thing...Pinkamena is standing right behind you & she's gonna make you choose between the Shank or Cleaver.

End of Story.

Comments

[Dragon Blaze-X]

needs work looks like Pinke wrote it

[Wonderstruck]

Ok. So. Please don't be mad at me, but I am going to point out some of your flaws. Overall, I liked the idea, but it couldn't have been executed much better:
1-don't refer to chapters. It makes it sound weak. Instead off saying "it was just like chapter 2" say "the party was just as great as the night before" or something along the lines of that
2-the characters seem to be completely out of character.
3-you need to be careful about your grammar and punctuation. You're missing quite a few full stops, and the verb after a character says something (eg. said) should not be capitalized)
I hope this helps

[Ignaltus]

Aaaawwwwwww...

[Lord Olympius]

I choose anti-Pink , nerlizer, and teleporter gun. Blocks Pinkie with blocker, erase her mind, and teleport her back to ponyvile.