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I think I've noticed a recurring trend within your work, which isn't a bad thing, let me clarify. But, there really is an uncomfortable use of dialogue within some of your chapters. Truthfully, it's a lot more fun to have dialogue driven chapters then merely descriptive ones, but the story itself is taken away when it's simply characters talking back and forth. Descriptions need to be made, not only of how the characters are feeling, but just of what's going on. I feel a wide and overarching universe being built around this tale, but it's very difficult to follow when most of it is characters keep things moving at a lightening pace I can't keep up with. Know what I mean?