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i got a little emotional typing Chapter 9
3230881 How so? I have not read it yet.
3249739 death, well it's not that bad
3253788 That explains it
I think I've noticed a recurring trend within your work, which isn't a bad thing, let me clarify. But, there really is an uncomfortable use of dialogue within some of your chapters. Truthfully, it's a lot more fun to have dialogue driven chapters then merely descriptive ones, but the story itself is taken away when it's simply characters talking back and forth. Descriptions need to be made, not only of how the characters are feeling, but just of what's going on. I feel a wide and overarching universe being built around this tale, but it's very difficult to follow when most of it is characters keep things moving at a lightening pace I can't keep up with. Know what I mean?
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Yes I do. I think that a flaw about it because I write in my view and not in concern of the reader sometimes. I expect them to read my mind................................I don't actually. Ehh that's kind of my style though but I can change it a bit, put in more descriptions about the characters like you said. But sometimes I think I am moving to slow so I don't know what to do about that. Give me time. I'm that much of an experienced writer yet. Thanks for the feedback
3593319 Sometimes a chapter does feel slow, especially when writing a fight scene, but sometimes it just happens. Certain parts can be better than others, no story is perfect.
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Well I guess I shouldn't push myself so hard. As the writer I see every flaw so that's why I might be so edgy.
I feel like reading more when I get the chance. I like it so far.
Chapter 1 gets a rating of
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Thanks