I think I did my best to limit the concept of Infinity plausibly.
yeah, limiting infinitely is a bit of an oxymoron, but intrigued nonetheless about the conclusion. I liked the part about the soul. Certainly an interesting beginning, though I think this chapter would have been preferred that the previous, since this sets up the story, while the first was a bit of a confusing beginning.
11910223 Yeah, I had trouble getting through the moderation. Not enough “named canon characters,” in this chapter. Possibly, I could have moved this as a flashback later? I have some planned later and am wary of diluting the tool. What can you do.
And here I come in dirty boots to your comment section, do not be swayed too much by my words I want to mean well.
**Government agency, Unknown Location** **Incursion Day, current year**
Why and how would any goverment in the world care about or notice a dumb shack falling apart in the middle of nowhere? Do you really need them to notice anything? If that has any purpose for plot reasons even if I don't like where it might be hinting please ignore that comment.
The 'Others'
What about just the eight group? Their indetification method could be asking who are five and eight. Ponies do not know what "V" or "Ocho" is, the members only know. Speaking of 8 I wonder how will you handle as much as 8 OC's.
11910382 No, it’s cool. I’m pretty sure I’ll make mistakes. This type of thing can be quite helpful. 👍
"Affirmative. Kahn's team confirmed the seismographs. These here are satellite images of the site. It's quite isolated."
I would like to think a large enough tremor would warrant some kind of response even if it is a small one and in the middle of nowhere. An explosion to register on a seismograph isn’t small. Three didn’t take any half measures on that self-destruct device which might have brought more attention than less… I am still developing the investigation, so it might be a little while before it comes back up.
I shouldn’t give details on how they’ll show up… but they will show up in some manner. Thank you for reading!!
"The math does not work without it. If we send 99.99% of someone but the most essential component of one's being is left behind, then there won'd be much at the Incursion point but a pile of useless elements which would likely present as 'goo.' Smelly goo."
*won’t
"Ah, Mo. Is the update?" the Director asks.
I believe something should come after “the update” like here or ready, but I’m not sure if I’m wrong or not.
I just wanna say I actually really liked this chapter, despite it being a bit hard to follow along with at some points. Very interesting concept, though “The Math” definitely carried lol.
Caught a grammar error.
Thanks for the chapter.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
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I’ll get them one of these days.
Those sneaky sneakers keep surprising me with how they sneak by me.
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yeah, limiting infinitely is a bit of an oxymoron, but intrigued nonetheless about the conclusion. I liked the part about the soul. Certainly an interesting beginning, though I think this chapter would have been preferred that the previous, since this sets up the story, while the first was a bit of a confusing beginning.
11910223
Possibly, I could have moved this as a flashback later? I have some planned later and am wary of diluting the tool. What can you do.
Yeah, I had trouble getting through the moderation. Not enough “named canon characters,” in this chapter.
I think I maybe did a C+ with the sci-fi.![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
Thank you for reading and commenting!!![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
And here I come in dirty boots to your comment section, do not be swayed too much by my words I want to mean well.
Why and how would any goverment in the world care about or notice a dumb shack falling apart in the middle of nowhere? Do you really need them to notice anything? If that has any purpose for plot reasons even if I don't like where it might be hinting please ignore that comment.
What about just the eight group? Their indetification method could be asking who are five and eight. Ponies do not know what "V" or "Ocho" is, the members only know. Speaking of 8 I wonder how will you handle as much as 8 OC's.
11910382
No, it’s cool. I’m pretty sure I’ll make mistakes. This type of thing can be quite helpful. 👍
I would like to think a large enough tremor would warrant some kind of response even if it is a small one and in the middle of nowhere. An explosion to register on a seismograph isn’t small. Three didn’t take any half measures on that self-destruct device which might have brought more attention than less… I am still developing the investigation, so it might be a little while before it comes back up.
I shouldn’t give details on how they’ll show up… but they will show up in some manner.
Thank you for reading!!
*won’t
I believe something should come after “the update” like here or ready, but I’m not sure if I’m wrong or not.
I just wanna say I actually really liked this chapter, despite it being a bit hard to follow along with at some points. Very interesting concept, though “The Math” definitely carried lol.