Chirp, a fiddle playing, farming changeling, has started falling for a pony, but what consequences does even caring for a pony bring a changeling? Is such a relationship even possible? Chirp wants to find out, but has to overcome her own fears to do so.
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Idea is nothing new, but chapters less than 1,5k words is just ... nope
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I know its not really new, but I figured I'd start with this kind of story because it's a personal preference for me. As for lack of words...thank you. I'm still relatively new to writing fanfics and length isn't one of my strong points. Add that to not owning a computer/laptop and you get relatively less content. I'll be trying to improve on this and may extend the first chapter some. To me, 90% or so of criticism is good criticism, so dont't be afraid to tell me anything and everything you see wrong.
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If you're having trouble with the length of your chapters, you can write several chapters normally and then combine them... It helps.
Looks promising. Not an original idea, but it can be pulled off well. I'm going to track this story to see where it goes.
Try to increase the chapter length. Also, try to show more instead of telling; right now, nothing has really happened. What you have is fine for an introduction, but it needs some more actual plot from now on.
Figured I would post a lovely comment to help my friend and boost his moral!
Goooo kid. 
Okay, I'm liking what I see so far. We have a premiss already set up, and provided to the readers in a way that feels natural. Continue.
And just like that, you lost me. This quickly went from interesting, to an info dump in third-person from the very first paragraph.