It was a normal day in the Ponyville Library for Spike. As usual, Twilight was out doing things while Spike was stuck inside the tree house doing his chores. He didn’t mind though. He WAS her assistant after all, the best assistant in the world, as she would often point out. Right now, Spike was just finishing his sweeping. He brushed the last bit of dust into the dustpan. Once all the dirty dust was in the pan, he walked over to the trashcan, and poured it in. Spike put away his cleaning materials, and observed the room. It was spotless, well except for the large pile of books on the floor that Twilight had made during last nights study session.
“Perfect,” said Spike with satisfaction. “Now to get to work on those books.” Spike walked over to the pile, and began organizing the books, by title, and by genre. About halfway through his task, his attention was brought to the front door as it opened. Spike turned to face the pony entering, and was glad to see it was the familiar Alicorn returning from her outing.
“Hey Twilight!” greeted Spike with a wave.
“Hi Spike!” said Twilight with an unusual amount of enthusiasm. “Take a break from those chores, I’ve got some great news!” Now intrigued, Spike put the book in his hand onto the shelf and turned to face his caretaker.
“What is it Twilight?” asked Spike.
“Guess!” replied Twilight.
“Uh, OK. Um, did you invent a new spell?”
“No,” replied Twilight, sporting an insanely large smile that would put Pinkie Pie to shame.
“Um, did you win an award for your experiments in-“ Spike was interrupted by Twilight pushing her hoof to his mouth.
“Spike, shush! That’s supposed to be a secret. Hush hush, remember?”
“Oh, right,” replied Spike. “Alright, I give up. What is the surprise?”
“Alright…Me and Flash…”
“WHAT, you and Flash what!” cried Spike.
“We’re…”
“Sweet Celestia, get on with it, I’m dying with suspense over here!”
“We’re having a foal!” Spikes eyes widened in surprise.
“Whoa,” said Spike as he stumbled back with a hand to his head. After a few seconds to recover from this most unsuspected news, Spike looked up to Twilight, who was looking quite happy over the news. “Wait, but you two didn’t’ get married did you?”
“Oh, Spike! We live in a new day and age, where ponies don’t need to get married in order to have a child.” Me and Flash will tie the knot when we’re ready.”
“Well, that’s great news Twilight! Do you know if it’s going to be a filly or a colt yet?”
“Not yet, that will take at least 16 weeks for us to know.”
“That’s great Twi! I’ll help you in any way I can!” said an excited Spike.
“I know you will, that’s why you’re my number one assistant!”
Spikes Journal, May 4, 1004 A.N.M
Dear diary Dear Manly journal,
Today, Twilight told me some great news! She’s having a baby! This is great; it will be like having a little brother or sister! Somepony to play with, somepony I can teach things too, and to play pranks with! I mean, I know Twilight isn’t my mom, but in a way, she kind of is. I mean, she is the one hatched me, and she is the one who basically raised me. I mean, she had Princess Celestia, and her parents to help, but she is the one I looked up to for guidance and love. I don’t know if she feels the same way though. Well, I’ll be there for her no matter what.
Spikes Journal, May 6, 1004 A.N.M
Dear journal,
Today, me and Twilight Twilight and I went out to lunch with Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Rarity, Fluttershy and Applejack. We had a great time. It was really great, well except I could tell Twilight missed Flash. He got stationed at some outpost for who knows long. Luckily Twilight was able to send a message to him telling him about the baby. We’ll find out his response soon.
But anyway, back to the celebration. We had a great lunch. The others all kind of freaked out when they found out. Applejack offered Apple Bloom's old baby stuff, Rarity insisted on designing clothes for the little guy, or girl. Fluttershy offered to foalsit, and Pinkie Pie insisted in throwing a party. Rainbow Dash was concerned with whether or not the foal is going to have wings or not. But, what’re you going to do?
Well, it’s been a long day. I’m going to hit the sack. Goodnight journal.
Spikes Journal, June 14, 1004 A.N.M
Well, Flash is still stationed away. Twilight sent a message to her family telling them of her pregnancy. Cadence was really excited. Twi’s parents found it funny that Twilight was having a child before Shining and Cadence. Shining promised that he would use his connections to try and get Flash home in time for the birthing, but the Royal Guard is kind of spread thin. It might take some time though. The family, I mean Twilights family plan on coming into town in time for the birthing.
Well, that’s all for know. I’ll write again as soon as something happens.
Spikes Journal, September 19, 1004 A.N.M
Dear Journal,
Today was…well I’m not really sure. There’s some good news, and some bad news. No, not bad news, terrible news! We got a message from the Royal Guard. Flash…well, Flash won’t be coming home. It’s terrible. His unit went to go and investigate this disturbance, and it turned out to be a camping group of Changelings in Equestrian territory. The Changelings attacked. There were causalities on both sides. Unfortunately, Flash was one of them.
Twilights taking it pretty hard. She’s freaking out, about how she can’t raise her child without Flash. I mean, I know how the pressures of having a baby can take their toile on her. But, she seems to be forgetting that she does have some experience in childcare; I mean she raised me without a father, and I turned out all right, didn’t I?
As for Flash, well, we never really got that close. I mean he was a cool guy and all, and I regret his passing, but you know, we just never really hit it off. Still, it’s a terrible thing that he’s gone.
All this talk about sad stuff, I completely forgot about the good news. We found out the gender of the baby! It’s a boy! And what’s cooler, he’s going to be an Alicorn, just like Twilight! It’s great; it’s going to be like having a little brother! I’ll teach him guy stuff, like hoofball, and um…well…huh; I guess I need to find more guy activities. Geez, I need more guy friends.
Well, that's all for now
Spikes Journal, February 14, 1005 A.N.M
TWILIGHT JUST WENT INTO LABOR! The girls and I were all gathered around in the library! I was bringing them some drinks, because I’m the best assistant ever, and Twilight just went into labor! Oh boy, this is it! I’m waiting in the waiting room. Oh Celestia, I’m so nervous. Why am I nervous, it’s not my kid? I guess I’m just nervous for Twilight. I really hope the kid is healthy. Well, it’s about 12 o’clock at night right now. I guess I should get some rest. I’ll write back in this journal when the baby is born. Goodnight journal!
First of, please continue with this story, because I'm a huge Spike fanatic Now, this is a very good prologue/first chapter to this story, but also sad to know that Flash won't be in the colt's life Also, I can see something heartbreaking happening on the horizon for Spike. I can sense that Twilight might/will spend most of her time with the new baby, and since he has wings, and is a pony she might even brag about him more than Spike, causing Spike to become jealous
Please continue with this, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I say the story ain't too shabby, there is room for improvement here and there but I like it so yeah...
(Please note saying this before reading it)
All children believe this when they get new baby siblings...
But the parents only look like that's happening because the baby's need more attention because they can't do anything for themselves yet.
Hm... It's a personal pet peeve of mine, that Twilight gets more family and Spike is not included. More commonly it's actually that she adopts a filly rather than having a baby, and the actual blood relation is going to make the story different from one where Twilight treats one adoptee as family and the other as an employee...
But I'm interested in seeing where this is going. Twilight has good reasons to pay a lot of attention to her new child rather than Spike, but her behavior toward Spike before and after it (and the fact that the child is probably going to be her family's family) means that his feelings aren't going to entirely be unjustified.
I... think the bad spelling and formatting on Spike's journal is intentional and a nice touch, given that they are much more common than errors in the story proper... but making sure the rest doesn't have mistakes could hammer that home a bit more strongly.
5261550 Yes. I did that bad spelling on purpose...and I completely noticed it while I was writing it. But let's pretend that I didn't do it on purpose. What exactly would those errors, that i did on purpose, be?
I give you a thumbs up not because I like the story, but because you killed Flash.
EDIT: I like the story idea... An alicorn baby has dramatic potential.
5262156 Uh, thanks?
5260862 Thank you for your support, I will do my best to update
5262162 We became bitter rivals after Rarity implied that she liked his hairstyle more than mine. Something something blue mane in vogue.
5262180 alright, well I'm glad my murdering flash appealed to you
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The spelling errors with Spike's journal are horribly OOC. You do remember he's been writing Twilight's letters to Celestia since before S1. And the can't spell gag of E2S1 went right out the window along with Big Mac having more than a two word vernacular 99% of the time? He wouldn't have so many errors in his journal. Not when he's used to doing all of Twilight's dictations/notes. In a masters level grammatic structure.
Which while I don't write, nor expect to see. It wouldn't be as bad as you've shown. Also good job killing the scenery with legs. Just like the movies he died as he lived utterly unimportant other than a limited, throw away, plot device. Whose job could've been done by anypony else. That actually matters to the fic /movie.
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Don't know why you got so many downvotes. Flash Sentry is scenery with legs. A cardboard McGuffin.
A.N.M.?
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I meant... make sure your regular writing is free of mistakes, if you're going to stylistically make mistakes later. Example:
Spike needs to be capitalized as a somewhat obvious error. Though needs a comma before it as a less obvious one.
Upon consideration, TheGreatEater probably has the right idea: Spike probably wouldn't make very many mistakes since it's his explicit job to be a scribe, and I'm sure Twilight wouldn't allow him to send letters to Celestia that have misspelled words. Probably word-use errors instead of spelling errors. Unless somehow he will make many mistakes when he's "off" and not focusing. I suggest using
linethroughsstrikeouts to be where he corrected himself, too.Y'know what? I've never read about any of the mane six having kids before. This'll be cool.
5262611 Oh, you know what, i did have those line cuts in the original document, but I forgot to bring them over. I'll get on that.
Alright everyone, please listen up;
Those grammar issues were originally cut through with a dash, to indicate that Spike recognized his mistake and fixed it. But when I copied the story from microsoft word onto fimfiction, they didn't go through, and I forgot about them. I have edited it, and fixed it. If there are any other errors, let me know.
5262611 Yeah, i did have those line outs, but I copied and pasted the story from microsoft word, unto fimfiction, so the line outs didn't transfer, and I forgot about them. I took care of that thought.
Shame about Flash. Did he die painlessly? To shreds you say.
5263868 YES, Futurama!
5263879 I'm not a monster. A simple impalement or broken neck would suffice for Flash Sentry's demise. As long as no one is aware of my complicity. Wait, did I say that out loud?
5262728 Flash was a pegasus, mom is a unicorn/alicorn. Is it possible the baby could express magic even before it's born? In The Time Traveler's Wife, the unborn baby of the main character time traveled, leading to a miscarriage. I would shudder to think about a unicorn foal powerful enough to teleport while in utero, but it may just as soon cause both mother and baby to teleport due to magical and physical proximity.
I might have to write a story about that soon.
i hope flash died slowly and painfully...don't like him at all...or anything past season two but that's just me
other than my intense dislike of flash i really like the story and writing style so far.
lets see where this path leads cause why not?
5264175 "The adventures of a time traveling fetus". I really hope mommy can come with for this one, or it's gonna be a short trip. Sad face.
5262168 You're very welcome
5264142 don't worry, i don't think you're a monster or anything.
5264545 which Flash are we talking about here, the one Pegasus stallion twilight runs into accidentally with no dialogue between them or the human counterpart through the Looking Glass? I'm asking because I have no context here because I gave up on the movie after 20 minutes in and haven't seen anything more since then.
5265696 eh i assumed that is the one you were talking about...and ya that movie was bad...
Dear, Princess Celestia,
Spike here, I'm running off to Las Pegasus with my mare friend Rarity,
Twilight was knocked up by one of your sentries , Flip , Flush , Fert, Awe what ever.
Rarity said she wouldn't have a foal unless she was properly hitched as AJ puts it.
So you're invited to join us as you have as much right to attend as Twilight.
PS, You can have my comp in chips, I'll be too busy to gamble you know what I mean.
Spike.
Royal ward
Royal messenger
Hero of the Crystal Empire
The Purple Terror of Ponyville
Soon Mr. & Mrs. Thee Dragon
This is interesting so far. Expect to get some flak from FlashLight haters, though.
You just HAD to make Flash DIE!
Unless I missed something.... Please tell me I missed something...
5272113 He's Dead Jim.
5282456 NOOOOOOO!!!! (LOL nice pun XD)
5290990 It's the error message you get when a tab on Chrome crashes. It's some dated pop culture reference that no one gets anymore. I got it just before I read you comment so I just copied it
Somehow I find myself thinking of this song by The Megas:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oWaKqtXFLPc
But for this to fully work, Twilight would have to pull some real dick move when some kind of complication arose with the baby forcing her to remove blood and other things from Spike to save the child.
Potential
I sense it
5306956 when I first saw you're pic I thought it was a heart barfing!
5482726 Yeah...I guess I can kinda see it
Please continue
Thumbs up my good sir!
5545720 Thank you
At first I was like; NAO SHE'S HAVING BRAD'S CHILD?!?!
And then Brad died and I was all; BRAD WHY YOU GO DIE?! You left Twi-Twi all alone now that you went bye-bye!
I like this. Please continue!
5483108 What IS your picture?
Apple Bloom's
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Re-read first chapter. Will be seeing the second one soon.
5564562 omg
I briefly touch on 'Spike being replaced by Twilight's kid' in Limits of the Horizon , though it's done very differently and much darker.
Would have appreciated it more if Twi and Flash were at least engaged or something, rather than making it sound like a casual hookup.
>>PinkieLunaShy
I was going to say something along the lines of that, but you did it for me :) I second your comment
awwww shit, Flash huh?.....
I really hate Flash for different reasons, but some saint in battle armor killed him, I probably can give it a chance.
For one reason I hate that love at first sight stuff most of the time, and he was created to make a horrible first impression without personality and such.
Poor little guy calls em twilights family (which in the show he clearly wasn’t part of it but still :(
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Wait anything past s2?