A Royal guard, banished alongside Nightmare Moon, returns with her. This is his life after being thrust a millennium into the future.
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I feel like Vinyl will be Barrier's connection to Octavia.
5588299 I can neither confirm nor deny; I can only say the next two chapters are already done.
Well I decided to give this story a chance and so far I like what I'm reading so I will be tracking this.
Great chapter, but there's a few really minor things you may want to edit.
First off, that should be "unicorn's". And second, you have two periods instead of one.
And lastly, there should be an apostrophe at the end of "earth-ponies'".
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Did my puns hit too close to home?
Different....the pacing could use some work though, unless you are planning on slowing it down now that hes on his own away from the rest?
5591501 I have been trying to slow down in later chapters [they aren't released yet] but I feel I am having a hard time managing my pacing.
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I would suggest adding some extra detail, maybe include a few more things outside of what your wanting your characters to do, this will help slow things down so it doesn't seem like a series of clips showing highlights/actions, and help lengthen the overall chapter in addition.