A whole year has passed since the day I found Twilight. Twilight has been getting smarter and started reading more and more books every day. She’s already using full clear sentences. Over the past year, I have taken up home schooling so that I could spend more time with Twilight. My family took some time to adjust to the idea of a purple unicorn being my daughter, but in time they accepted it. Soon Twilight even started to pick up spells. Nothing major; just simple magic, like levitation. Even though it was only levitation… it was still impressive for a Filly her age learning it, and learning it without an actual spell book!
A week later I kept thinking to myself… She’s never had a birthday party yet… I didn’t know her exact birthday, so I just went with the day I first found little Twilight. I asked mom to go do some shopping for me while I watched Twilight at home. Then after a while, Twilight and I went to the park to play while my family was getting the surprise party ready for Twilight. I made sure to keep Twilight safe, not letting her get hurt again. I was so excited for her party. I just know she’s going to love it. It was getting late so we started to head home. And when we came through the door at home… “SURPRISE!!!” the family shouted as they jumped from their hiding spots. Twilight shrieked and then laughed as soon as she realized what was going on. “Happy birthday Twilight.” I said hugging her. “You did all this for me…?” she asked. “Of course it was all for you!” I said still hugging her. Twilight started to cry… but… she was happy. “You’re the best, dad… I love you.” She said to me. At that moment, I was so full of joy when she said that… not calling me dad… but saying those 3 words… “I love you…” “I love you too, Twilight…” I say smiling with tears rolling down my face. The party lasted for about 3 hours, and to be honest I danced like Pinkie Pie at one point. Pinkie Pie and her parties… hopefully I won’t end up like that. Twilight got some new toys as presents and some new clothes. She was happy with all of them.
When the party was over, my brother left since he’s already married and it wouldn’t make sense if he still lived with his mother. I haven’t seen my oldest brother in over a year… he’s been too busy with his job. My oldest brother has 2 kids… a 10 year old girl and a 5 year old boy. His daughter is… a major MLP FIM fan… so thank god she hasn’t seen Twilight yet… Unfortunately, my oldest brother is coming to visit tomorrow. But I’m not thinking about that right now, I was thinking about my daughter’s birthday. At night we decided to shoot fireworks to celebrate the occasion. But after the fireworks went off in the sky… something unexpected happened… All of a sudden there was an enormous surge of magic energy coming from Twilight just like the time when she was trying to pass the entrance exam for Princess Celestia’s School for the gifted. Except the princess wasn’t here this time to calm her down. I tried walking up to her without getting hit by the surge. I finally got to her and when she saw me, I was able to calm her down. “D-daddy I’m sorry, I don’t know what happened to me…!” She said about to cry. “It’s okay Twilight…” I said holding her tightly. “It’s not your fault… you didn’t have control…” Then when I looked down… I saw it… On Twilight’s Flank was her cutie mark. Twilight was confused, and at the same time scared when she saw it. But I explained what it meant and she got a basic idea of it. In fact, after I told her, she was really excited about it.
The next day, Twilight was determined to learn all she could about magic. So I went online to find spells that were actually from the show. Day and night she would study until she was tired. She wouldn’t quit until she understood everything she could about magic. I even let her test some spells on me from time to time. Like with one of her spells, she changed my hoodie and Jeans into a fancy suit. She also cast a spell that gave me a mustache goatee combo. She was getting really good at her magic... Then… my niece met Twilight…
When the doorbell rang, I already knew it was my older brother and his daughter… I open the door. “Hey guys!” I say to them pretending to care. “What’s up brat?” looking at my niece. “I’m not a brat!” she protests. “Anyways, look!” she holds up a Twilight Sparkle Plush which brought my mind into terror. If Twilight sees that, she’ll know something’s up! “Put that away!!” I screamed at my niece. She got scared and put the plush away. She never saw Twilight in person, so she didn’t know. Then a voice from the other room… “Dad? Why did you yell?” Twilight walked in confused and my niece’s mouth was agape and wide-eyed. She looked like she was about to scream. “C-calm down!” I said to my niece. But then my niece completely lost it… “Oh my gosh Oh my gosh Oh my gosh Oh my gosh!!!!” she said hopping around. Twilight looked at her, creeped out. I took my niece to the other room and explained everything to her. When my niece came back, she was calm. “I’m sorry for the way I acted, Twilight… It’s just that I’ve never seen a unicorn before.” My niece said apologetically. “It’s okay!” Twilight said easily forgiving her. After today, pretty much everyone in the family knew about Twilight, so I saw no reason to hide her anymore. Besides, I want Twilight to live her life the way she wants when she’s older.
A/N I will be making the next chapter tomorrow so don't worry everypony.
This is rather interesting. I am interested to see where this goes.
Good Job!
Sieg Heil!
Not bad, but I do recommend that you separate the dialogue from the text from the three chapters and forward.
Doing that, this is acceptable, even though it is not original.
It's a very nice story so far, but I have a few suggestions:
I know it's supposed to be like My Little Dashie, but it's getting too close to it, so try and divert a little if you can.
You're rushing, the time is going by too quickly, slow down the story and add more details if you can.
These are just suggestions, so only if you want to.
Still an awesome story!
Make more......or I will kill you....I only have two complaints. The first is how you put it all into a big slur, instead of separating things, like when another character talks. The second? The chapters are too short...…
Niece: "It's Twilight from MLP: FiM!"
Twilight: "What?"
Nice: Explains everything.
Twilight:
Yeah, sorry. This IS my first FanFic so... I'll get better at it in time.
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both of you shut up before il orbital strike you both
Please no fighting
607275 don't worry, I will add another chapter tomorrow
no make it now
607314 but i made 2 chapters today... plus I need time for ideas to flow.
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607332 They are kidding take as much time as you want I like it I hope you get better, and if you can I would like you to go back and separate the dialog more. It is just a suggestion so you don't have to.
607232 Please stop we are BRONIES not animals we hail from different countries so if one person says something don't just go rage at them. Love and Tolerate thee shit out of them instead.
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FIRE THE CANNON!
607483 woot go Sweden, im not Swedish but my close friend is
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Will both of you Stop arguing PLEASE!?
607060 And you too! I don't want to see those comments here!
610756 STOP POSTING THOSE COMMENTS ON MY STORY!! SWEET CELESTIA, KEEP THAT TO YOURSELF, OR ARGUE SOMEWHERE ELSE!!
Okay fine... I'm now gonna extend the time for the next upload.
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IF YOU DON'T STOP THIS ARGUING, IM DELETING THIS WHOLE STORY!!!!!!!!
610206no problem
610345 i agree with the owner of this writing, plz stop fighting you guys/girls (if you are) it would be best for him to know that he isnt being spammed notifications, that ppl are commenting on the vid, when it mostly doesnt have anyhting to do with it. For the sake of Brony kind: STOP QUARRELING. Dont you guys remember hearth's warming eve:
The fire of frinedship lives in our hearts, as long as we live we cannot.. drift apart. though quarrel arise, there numbers are few. laughter and singing will see us through (will see us through). We are a circle of pony friends, a circle of friends we'll be til the very end.
If you guys do remember this, then you should know where im going with this. So seriously stop
613033 thank you!
613614no problem
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Wat ben jij aardig zeg!
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Indeed.
609866 thank you!
Alright... this is my last warning... if I see... one more stupid comment that has NOTHING TO DO with the story!... I'm not even going to continue with it, and I'm deleting it!! And if I have to... I'm sorry for the fans who really appreciated my story...
i love this story. it is realy good. i hope thet you ar going to make it realy long
sorry for bed english
next chapter in development and it is almost done.
Good, but rushed.
I don't know why you decided to make the CMC a main character, because they don't come into this story at all.