Chapter 2: A Ticket of Chance
You waked up again because of your alarm clock this time you set it at 5am since Vice president Luna said that your class will always start at 7am. " Im so Tired " you said but you have no choice and your excited to go to school since your motivated and inspired.
You tried to take a bath but the water is to cold you went down stair's to heat up some water and what do you know your parents are still here. " oh hi honey your already awake " you told your mother the reason why your up early and she said that she is proud of you since your able to adjust your time. And your father secretly approach you and he startled you.
" Dad what the heck " your father and mother laughed to your reaction and they invinted you to eat with them although they said they have to leave after the breakfast you said its okay you can take care of yourself. But before you eat , you heat up some water first and then you eat. Your enjoying your breakfast and even its a little time you and your parents are still able to tell stories and bond while you were eating.
But ofcourse they had to leave early you washed up the dishes and you took the hot water and you took a bath immediatly you taked your time on choosing your clothes because ofcourse you want to look good. After you put on some clothes you rushed downstairs you get the keys and locked your door and you put your key's under the pot. As usual you walked to the bus stop and Zack was there eating some chips.
"Hey Zack!" you greeted, "It looks like you decided to wake up early too,"
"Well I don't wanna write anymore essays," said Zack as he then turns to look at you, his face turning into a smile, "Also you're looking good today,"
"You really think so?" You asked
Zack proceeded to pat your back, and simply replied, "Yes,"
After a short while the bus has arrived and the two of you entered the bus and sat at the same sit. While the bus you were in is on the way to canterlot high you noticed Zack chuckling right beside you and asked him what is he chuckling about.
" oh nothing i was just watching on my phone " you take a glance on what he's watching and you saw one of your mother's favorite show that is some kind of highschool musical play or something and you remembered how much Rainbow Dash loved music.
So you asked Zack if he can play an instrument " umm yeah i can only play a piano though why? " you told him you had an idea to try to impress her. " oh i see well do you have any idea what song you wanna play "
You told him not yet but you said you'll figure out and after discussing a few more details the bus arrived infront of canterlot high. You both went off and proceed walking towards it and in to your classroom.
And there she is Rainbow Dash she really does sit right beside you " hey good morning " you said and she also said the same. You sitted on your seat and Zack sitted right behind you cause thats where he sits and your hoping that Zack doesnt say anything .
Its 8am almost recess while your teacher was discussing you noticed Dash was sleeping but you know , you have to wake her up you tried flicking her ear but it didnt work you leaned on your chair and suddenly you felt something painful on your back and screamed a little bit everyone looked out you including the teacher.
" Are you okay Mr. Rush " your teacher asked.
" Im okay mam i just felt something really painful " you said and you noticed Dash is awake.
The teacher came over on where your sitting and saw a nail pointing out of your chair. You looked at Zack's fingers and there is a red out line did he bent the nail pointing out wards. The teacher said that she will get someone to fix up your chair then the bell rings its recess time.
You invited Yuzu to eat with you and he agreed you said thx for helping you out but he's confused.
" what are you talking about " he said
" umm nevermind " you said and you thinked he might be just playing dumb but your greatful for it despite getting impaled by a nail.
" hey did you purposely did that to wake me up you know the nail thing " you didnt noticed that Dash was infront of you and your startled a little bit.
" ahhhh yeah " you didnt be able to answer properly you said yeah by accident then Zack catched your awkwardness.
" well yeah he did since you two are classmate's he thought that he might help you out cause mmm- "he covered his mouth since he might accidently told her that you liked her.
" Thats pretty much it right Zack " you said to also catched him.
" oooookay you two are weird but thx man i dont know why you did that but i appreciate it well im going to the cafeteria cya " she talked to you did that really just happend. After that you two went to the cafeteria and took some food at the counter and sitted near where Dash and her friends was sitting you cant help it but to overheard there conversation.
" hey come on pinkie not fair thats my cupcake " said by Dash
" its mine now ill give it back if you can give an interesting story " said by pinkie Rainbow Dash sigh and she said yes i have an interesting story her friends was really curious on whats Rainbow Dashes story and you cant helped it but to listen.
" well its really not that interesting there is this some weird guy who purposely hurt himself for me to wake up " you spitted your drink when you heard what she said that but there isnt any spit what just happend. There isnt any traced that you spitted so you asked Zack.
" No you didnt you must be imagining things " your kinda weird out but you thinked you really just imagining things then Zack pat you in the pack and told you that its okay you still have a lot of chance and hes right you cant give up just yet.
You waited till lunch time to do your plan showing off your singing and guitar skills since also you have no choice you dragged Zack into your plan and you signup for a friendly battle of the bands.
" did we seriously just joined the battle of the bands what did you even put as are band name " you told him the band name was the shining galaxy and he looks like he's not impressed.
" that sounds really lame i like it okay lets go for it " WHAT!? he said it was lame and he liked it man he really is something and he asked you what are you two going to be playing you told him its a duet song.
You two started playing and its good really good a lot of students came to the gym cause they heard you singing everyone enjoyed your song till the end and there she is Rainbow Dash jamming in your song you felt really happy. After that the other students also started practicing you guys are also practicing. When suddenly Rainbow Dash and her friends approached you.
" You guys are really good even just being duo " said by Rainbow Dash and she also told you if your going to join the battle of the bands you two should give it your all and there looking forward on battling with you after your conversation with her they left and went to there private practicing area.
" well that was something " you looked at Zack with a very red and sweaty face and Zack said you looked like someone got over heated on a sona. You relaxed and proceed to practicing later on you asked Zack if you can go home together again but he said no cause he's needed at the garden there making a pond so you went home alone but your more happy than yesterday cause you got to talked to her twice and thats an achivement.
" I should go to sugarcube corner that hes talking about " so you went to sugarcube corner and there she is again Rainbow Dash.
" Did he know shes going to be here , did he set me up ,did he knew " that im going to this place. Good thing she has'nt notice you yet so you casually walked to the counter and ordered some drink.
You got nervous again when you noticed Rainbow is going to the counter. When suddenly someone called you its Sweetie Drops
" Hey Rush didnt know your intown " she said and rushed to you and hugged you.
" hey how are you " you told her that your fine and you asked her on which school she is studying and you got shocked she's also at canterlot high.
" Oh really im studying there to how come we didnt bumped to each other " her reaction was the same and suddenly Rainbow said something.
" umm hello i cant get to my drink " oh so thats why shes approaching her drink your totally not assuming that shes coming to you so you step aside and gave her, her drink she said thx. A couple more days have pass and its all almost the same everyday and the worst thing.
You cant find the chance to get to know her more how are you going to win her heart if you cant even talk to her. Its monday again your kinda excited to get to school. You went to your locker and open it when suddenly a letter falls off you picked up the letter there wasn't really that much details in it , it just said go to the theme park after lunch and it also have 2 premium tickets that you can ride any rides at the theme park for free.
" maybe this is from Zack i guess since its half day he wants to hangout " you went back to your classroom and Zack wasnt there no one is there. So you went to the gym and also none execpt principal Celestia and Vice principal Luna you asked them where everyone is and they said.
That they sent everyone home and you should go home too but instead of going home you stayed outdoors and you explore around since your new to the place. And a little bit later on you went on to the theme park at exact 12:00 pm and you waited for 10min and Zack is still not coming so you waited longer but instead of Zack Rainbow Dash is the one who showed up.
" hey Zack said you had two premium tickets to this totally awsome theme park " you said yes nervously and you said why did she asked and she said.
" he told me to take his place since he has to change some plans " you asked her about her friends.
" They had things to do " she said but you have a feeling that Zack might be has planned this or something.
So you went to the theme park with Rainbow Dash and you saw a lot of incredible and scary rides but Rainbow looks so excited and happy and then she dragged you in a hunted house escape room but she looks scared.
" Are you okay " you asked.
" Im not scared " she gave her self away since you didnt asked if shes scared or not.
But ofcourse she still went in she cant help it but to cling on you wrapping her hands on your arm. She looks really scared but you cant focus on the attractions cause you can hear her heavy breathing and you can feel her heart beat and also her breast against your arm. Your sweating a lot and blushing its like you two are couple but your not so you hurried so she doesnt think you purposely slowing down.
" th..that was fun " you can tell shes lying she obviously looks terrified so you asked her if there something else she wants to try and you cant believe on what she said the roller coster of doom and it has tons of loops and turns. Your scared and you tried to sneak away but she dragged you towards it she looks excited so you agreed since she seemed happy you ride it to.
You thinked Your gonna die cause of how much loops there are. And now the time has come its your turn the safety belts are on. Then the ride starts climbing at the first ark this is a mistake you shouldnt agreed then there you go rushing down to the loop de loops then twist and turns over and over and over.
You said in your mind finally its over you looked at the employee and its obviosly Sweety drops with a mustache and some glasses.
" Screw you " you said in your mind and you looked at Rainbow shes clinging again when did she cling on you and her legs are shaking. So you told her if she wants to take a break.
" yes " you both went to a cafe and sit down then you ordered some food and drinks and Rainbow suddenly calls you.
" hey...dont tell anyone about what happened back there go....got it " she looks really embarrased in a cute way and shes pouting you smiled.
" ofcourse " you said then your order came and you both ate.
" Hey did you know there's a brand new attraction here at the theme park " she said and she looks really interested about it.
" Oh really do you wanna try it out " she looks really happy that you said that.
" Although it only opens everynight " she said you looked at her with a smile.
" Then lets stay till its night " she jumps on top of the table and hugged you.
" oh thank you , thank you , thank you " you didnt expect that Dash would jump out like that.
" I....a yeah your welcome " she realizes what she did and went to her seat and sitted while she's blushing.
" So what do you umm... wanna do till then " she said and you suggested that you can do what ever she wants.
" Really " she said with a big smile and she looked at a water ride an extreme water ride.
You both went onto different parts and ride's and other attractions in the park execpt the one that is only available at night.
The night has come and there are only a few people left in the theme park.
" Hey lets go to that attraction that im talking about " she said so you went to the attraction with Dash.
" Salle de l'amore ? " you said and Dash immediatly went in.
" Hey are you coming or what " you went after her and your both greeted with a dark room.
" uhhh why is it " Dash did'nt be able to finish when suddenly the lights went on and both of you were stund by its beauty.
There was an ark with the lights and leaves all the way in the end of the hall and on both sides were trees that is also filled with colorful light's. You walked ride beside Dash and she looked at you.
" hey what do you think does Salle de l'amore means? " she said you looked at her and her eyes were shinning cause of the lights and she was also blushing.
" Hey look a giant a tree " she said , she held your hand and dragged you towards it.
" It has some carvings on it , its said Quel que soit le couple qui regarde cela vrai, il aura un avenir radieux en tant que mari et femme what does that even mean? " she said.
" well what ever it is, it's sound like motivational " you said and you noticed she pulled off her phone and captured it. After that you both went to the exit.
" well that was a blast " she said and then she yawns.
" well you looked tired " you said.
" Yeah all this attraction's and wondering around got me tired well i better go and hit the hay cya on monday " she said and you also said your fairwell you went home happily and you wondered what does those words mean.
" psst hey " you noticed someone's calling you and you looked at the direction on where its coming from.
" Zack? " you said he was standing by the bus stop.
" So did you two love birds had fun " he said.
" Geez stop it she's not my girlfriend yet " you waited for the next bus then you remembered something you forgot to ask.
" What are you doing in the middle of the night? " you looked at him and he was smiling.
" What do you think i was doing? " then the bus arrived but the bus driver said that only one of you can fit in Zack immidiatly hopped in.
" Youll figure it out also here " he gave you a folded note then bus drived off you unfolded the note.
" I was following you two all day on mascot and i put up some sighns about the new attractions here are the translations
Salle de l' amore - Hall of Love and the carvings on tree means Whichever couple looked at this tree to be they will have a bright future as husband and wife " you immidiatly looked at the moving bus and he was waving from the window.
" Zack im gonna kill you by monday " you shouted and you went home after you got home you did usual you went up staires and took a rest. And your dreaming about her and about those french words that you just red and on that dream the both of you were having and got married it was truly a wonderful dream.
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You misspelled "don't" with "dont". you also misspelled "write" with "right", and also put a comma immediately after the word "essays". The word "your" should be replaced with "you're". Either remove "on" or "A little bit", put a comma after that and replace "The bus was here" with "the bus arrived".
should be, "and the two of you entered the bus, and sat on the same seat."
Now the dialogue in this paragraph shouldn't be stated through narration, but rather in dialogue, like this:
Now if you didn't notice, the dialogue I used to start this conversation came from the previous paragraph. The other paragraphs also have the same amount of grammar problems. Now I could just edit this entire chapter, but I don't have the right to do that. So the least I could do is show you where the mistakes are, so that you'd learn from them.
I hope I was helpful with this.
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Woah I had a lot of errors I didn't notice sorry ill try my best to do things right I greatly appreciated your comment ill edit this out by the morning thank you so much for taking your time just to write this thank you >w< and I will totally give you credit in the author's note
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You're welcome.
10651005
i did what you said and i also change some things here and there and i could really use some your opinion and expertise again.
10651858
What do you need help with? Also, I wouldn't call myself an expert.
If it wasn’t him then who was it?
Is it equestrian magic?
This doesn’t seem good.
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Ill leave it to you 😏