Thanks everyone for sticking with that last mishap of a chapter, and I am proud to say that it is now back up with a few things fixed. I have decided to do a bit of trivia-type stuff for the bonus chapter, as it doesn't take long and can be quite entertaining. For those of you that don't want to read useless trivia, good day to you, and thanks for reading.
1: This story actually stemmed from a small idea I had about how to make Equestria seem less... well... perfect. Sure you've got the Everfree Forest filled with terrifying monsters, but the gentlest pony in all of Ponyville can take them down with almost no trouble. I decided that to make it less perfect, I would try to find a reason for the lack of males, or at the very least, a reason for it to be significant that there aren't many. I wrote the first chapter in about two hours, figuring I'd get flamed, swallow my sadness, and go about my merry way. However, while I was writing, I noticed something. I was actually happy to be writing. I wanted Twilight and Macintosh to have a happy ending. The overwhelming response certainly helped, so I decided that if I could write a chapter and have fun with it, two chapters could be just as fun. The next few days were a total storm of inspiration for me, during which I put out chapter after chapter of the story, slowly beginning to notice that people actually liked it. I am used to writing in the total dark or total comedy style, so writing in a romantic style was a huge challenge for me, especially since I find it very hard to stay on subject, such as right now, I began talking about how the story began, now suddenly I'm talking about how different it was.
2: I actually do love to read criticism from people, as it lets me know that people aren't just reading it, saying "eh, okay." and leaving, it tells me that there are people out there who want to help out any way they can, and want this story to succeed.
3: Speaking of succeeding, 16,000 views............ wut? The idea that this story could get so popular is shocking to me, especially since I don't think it's my best work. But the people have spoken, and who am I to question the wisdom of the brony community.
4: Before writing Rarity's chapter, she was my least favorite pony, and I honestly hated her. After writing it, well, I put my canon with the show's canon and... well, I like her a lot more now. For those of you wondering, here's my pony hierarchy:
-Fluttershy
-Pinkie Pie
-Twilight Sparkle
-Rarity
-Applejack
-Rainbow Dash
I realize that I just alienated about half the community, but I for one don't like Rainbow Dash quite as much as everypony else. No real reason, just my opinion.
5: (The final one before I go to bed to prepare my brain for writing the next chapter.) The whole reason for that last chapter having the picture for people to translate was so that I could see if people would do it. Honestly, I didn't think anypony would, simply because translating it isn't the easiest. Writing in Standard Galactic Script is so much different on the computer than on paper, which is why the first one was basically awful. For those of you who haven't seen it yet here is the picture. I personally love the way the text looks, and I have started using it all over, causing my teachers in school much confusion, hopefully.
See you all next chapter, I hope you like it! It contains an...
eeyup, I reckon i'll have ta wait. ah well, take yer time
(Chapter seven time. yay)
What is this? A thickening plot? Backstory and character development? Since when does a good stroy contain any of these? (Okay, sarcasm time is over) You good sir have mad this story transcend my preconceptions, with the first few chapters i figured you must be trying to do this http://i.qkme.me/5gou.jpg but now I have to reexamine the whole story. good show!
Now this chapter told a lot of information in a short time, you handled that well by making the information told very plainly, BUT adding some length for the sake of depth to the backstory would not be a bad move.
The emotions between Twilight and Luna that i would have expected were not a strong as i would have pictured. Twilight just seemed to go "WTF? Okay lol." and that could be fixed up a little.
The Twilight and Big Mac banter was pretty great, and I want to see more personalities bouncing off one another.
GIVE TIMEPIECE SOME ACTUALLY CHARACTER TIME ALREADY!!!
You have me really wanting Rover to become a pony again.
Lyra is Twilight's mom, but isn't actually, but gave birth to her, but Luna actually gave birth to her, but Lyra wasn't actually Lyra at the time but it was actually Luna who was on the moon but wasn't... WHAT?!?!?!?! I DON'T GET!!!
Overall the early parts of this chapter up until they got to Luna felt great. They flowed well and had some good character interaction. The Luna part felt rushed though. all in all this just more of what i've come to expect from you, a strong chapter.
P.S. I'm still wondering how Scootaloo's backstory has any part in all of this.
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well crap, i write my review only to post it on a non-existant chapter... oh well, i await the revised version.
I was cool with this but okay
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Hey bro, you shouldn't feel anything like bad for releasing this chapter. It wasn't that bad at all.
Actually, this was one of the best things i've read nowadays. Do you know why?
It was fast, it was chaotic, sometimes even unbelievable, but it really suited the happenings in the story quite good.
Yes, it was a little too much all at once, and it wasn't the most understandable story in the world, but it had the motion it needed to be good. And this was the thing i needed to get super-excited about the next chapter. So i hope it'll remain fast enough to not slow the story down
The only thing i didn't really like was that Luna was strange. She was out of character, something more like a mother figure than the real Luna. It was way more than just "showing us a new side of her which we didn't see earlier". It was more like a completely new character. And in the earlier chapters she felt a lot "younger", while here she was just too parent-like if you know what i mean.
I didn't feel the need to remove the chapter until you improve it a little, but of course it's your call :)
Oh and by the way: figuring out the galactic text was quite fun, and publishing it wrong for the first time just added a bit more challange to it, so brohoof for that one.
TLDR: You're making a good job with this story, so you really should be proud, instead of apologizing.
P.S.: Sorry if i have grammar mistakes, i'm writing from my phone and i'm not english
The following contains ALOT of criticism... not in any particular order that correlates with the story.
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"Oh, Vinyl..." Rarity sighed a bit. She placed a hand on Vinyl's cheek. She placed a hand on Vinyl's cheek. hand. WAHHHH? Really? Ok.. this sentence sums up my thoughts for this story. The Twilight thing was rushed, and even if you come up with a better reason to repopulate the planet, it still just doesn't work. I mean, 2 ponies wouldn't be able to breed fast enough, which is probably why you had Celestia try to make everyone do it.. which is completely unlike her, making her into a complete ass hole, enough so that clouds dale breaks off from the rest of equestria. Then you turn the pegasi into starving NAZIS!?
If you even imply a little that Rainbow Dash is Scootaloo's sister. Actually, you can't. Bethany has a freaking cutie mark with wings on it. The closest you could get to that while still making sense is that scoot is reminded of her sister when she sees Dash.
Now, i have seen people take background characters to crazy heights, ( Bright eyes () being a secret agent ) but making DJ pon3 blind, have the umm... "street" thing, and being a raging lesbian is kinda far fetched. Then (OMG TWIST) she is living a lie and really wants to be a writer/singer. Then you go to say that rarity is ALSO living a lie, and hates being all fussy and petty, blaming it on her parents. That is just to hard to believe.
I understand that you might explain some stuff later in the story... like how the diamond dogs somehow have been alive for the last 1000 years, and what RD was doing crashing into a Canterlot window at random, and why Celestia suddenly has a stick up her ass, and if the brown pegasus that was paired up with Luna really is the doctor, and why would Celestia lock up RD if not to mate, and what Celestia did between the time when she becomes really angry (and why she becomes angry) and Cloudsdale's break-away, and why nopony knows what happened between Celestia and Couldsdale.
I think that's it. Ummm i will read the story when you finish it to see if you tie up the giant loopholes, but really... they are big.
P.S. (insert criticism about lack of detail here, but then say it's alright and that people can't expect you to be perfect when it comes to the English language).
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fuck why!!!!!
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lol i read this in fluttershy's voice when she complainedto rarity
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1.That was a mistake. Sometimes in my writing I forget I'm writing about ponies. Thanks for pointing it out.
2.I have alluded to it in a reply to another comment that possibly she isn't putting them in the dungeon to mate, but has alternate reasons.
3.Scootaloo is NOT Rainbow Dash's sister, it is merely a coincidence that her sister's name was Dash and that she had the same personality. While I usually hate coincidences, I find that the show is riddled with them, and I tried to stick a little bit of show in there.
4.Actually, it's quite common to have Vinyl Scratch have red eyes in fanfics. I just took it a step further by adding in some medical knowledge of albinos to the story. The street thing was mostly because of her occupation as a DJ, and I have not met many DJs that do not talk like that, plus it was fun as hell to write in that style. As for the lesbian thing, well, I just figured it was a possibility, came up with some story for it, and made it so. Simple as that.
5.Yes, much of this will be explained, but this will be a fairly long story, so I don't want to let all the story out immediately, especially when that is what led to the horrors of this past chapter.
Thanks for taking your time to voice your opinions, and I will make changes where necessary. (Hand? Really, me, really? Oi.)
10613 Don't worry, Timepiece is getting a full chapter coming up very soon, as he's the character I've saved some of the best character plot for. And don't worry, Scootaloo's backstory will have some meaning in a later chapter. In fact, it will have quite a large impact on the events. But I'm giving too much away, I hope to see you next chapter.
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I agree with you on all fronts except for the vinyl scratch thing, in almost all the books I've read where she is involved that's exactly what she is.
Great story man, love your work.
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The part were the people in cloudsdale are starving, it sounds like the holucaust
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Saved for him some of the best character "plot" eh?
Yo can always just handwave the lack of males by the fact that horses being a herd animal have low male birth rates (like 1 male for every 10 females) and for most of their history have a group of females all mate with single mate, but a few hundread years ago Griffins and ponies because friends and traded ideals, the result was monogamy (Griffins in myth mate for life) was introduct and slowly took over.
i think you wrote your hierarchy backwards
There will be an OC pony next chapter? And you love us all? Awwww
11125 Not possible, because then Fluttershy would be at the bottom. And Fluttershy is everyone's favourite or second favourite pony.
The first part of Galactic Script-OC pony
Second part-I love you all!
Anyhow, I can't wait to see Twilight turn into an alicorn
Ten more messages in SGA and I'll be reading it off the top of my head XD
And we wuv yu too /)(\ Awesome Fic! <3
The spoiler says "I love you all"
are you gonna be puttin or in story eventually cause cause im really interested in what you'll think of for them
this ISN'T your best writing ?!? id love to see what is cause this is awesome writin!
11149 Actually, 'Shy's my 3rd fave, my first two being RD (always bragging, but sows that she's not as fearless as she seems) and Cherilee (DAT FLANK). but my fave number is three, so... it worked out..?
I have dechipered it! it took a while but it was 100% worth it! ratmage99 this is the best story ever!
... Man, this is a lot to read! I'm not sure how much more I can take before I have to call it quits and go to bed!
eeyup reading