Why the re-upload?

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Parts of the story were missing

6136243 Well that would explain the difference in word count.

Is it anything I need to look over in the gdoc or not?

Remember to toss me the link for the next one when you get around to it.

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I will. But I'm still wondering how it got messed up in the first place. Random sections were just missing

Love the story.

really needs a sequel.

The sex scenes in here were so hot that I was afraid I would lose a lot of blood. Also when Apple Bloom said that she would love to have Luna as a big sister please let that mean what I think it means in the next chapter. Or in another story, Please.

That Naruto shadow clone reference though...

“It has its uses, but it has its drawbacks,” admitted Luna. “Each time I use it, I am literally cutting my magic and soul in half with each copy. If I make too many both me and my copies will be too weak to do anything. I might even die. That’s why I try never to go about six at once.”

Reminds me of the Multiform technique from DBZ.

“It seems that I’m not alone with my worries as many of the nobles agreed with me and shared their own worries. Right now the only reason the nobility can sleep safely is thanks to my Night Guard, who have to keep in shape in order to fight monsters on a nightly basis. The only pony who isn’t worried is my sister who believes that as long as we have Applejack and her friends we will be safe.”

I dunno, I mean, the Elements of Harmony are great for massive magical threats like Discord or Nightmare Moon, but more more mundane threats like a rogue animal, they're not gonna work, since they're not acting out of malice, just anger, possibly confusion, or pain.

My idea for Celestia in this story comes from the comics. Mainly from the Relections story line and the Celestia/Spike Friends Forever Story. From those, I get the idea that Celestia used to believe that anypony can solve their own problem and thus believed that Luna could get herself out of her darker mindset without her help. When she was proven wrong I think she realized that there comes a time when she has to step in and help like seen when she helped Spike out of the volcanoe.

I really didn't like the comic's portrayal of Celestia's attitude towards her own sister's emotional state; namely just acknowledging it, dismissing it, and then going off on a bunch of dimension hopping adventures without her. It made her seem extremely negligent, self-centered, uncaring and irresponsible. The fact that it probably wasn't intentional just makes it worse.

Seriously, fuck the comics.

I'm glad Applejack decided to stop being embarrassed and let all her goods hang out in her skimpy thong bikini. I just want to feel up her sandy cheeks and tanned ta-tas.😁