• Published 27th Jun 2015
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A Lost Sunset - KingJoltik



Sunset Shimmer has betrayed Celestia and entered the mirror to another world. However, the first day in this new world would change everything when an accident causes Sunset Shimmer to lose her memories.

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The Final Note of Nothingness

Alone.

That was what Sunset was right now. She was sitting in a small booth in Sugarcube Corner, her body slumped over as she fiddled with her half filled drink. The straw spun around and around as she sat there, air blowing out of her nostrils.

“Tch...looks like its gonna be a long boring day today.” Sunset said to herself as she laid back, staring at the ceiling. “Oh well. Guess that's what happens when all your friends are busy.”

It had been a week since the incident with the Sirens. Despite the craziness of the event and though she should have probably been traumatized by it...she wasn't. If she was honest, she just felt tired after the kidnapping. She didn't know why she felt this way. Maybe it was because she was a pony and she may have experienced some crazy things in the past and was used to it. Or maybe she liked the thrills from the crazy kidnapping. Or maybe...she felt like she just really didn't care.

“Ugh...” Sunset grunted as she slumped over and put her head on the table. Just what am I doing here? she thought, After all that...nothing. I return to school and nothing happens. Even Twilight couldn't help me. The only thing she could tell me was that Princess Celestia had some old notes from some Starswirl guy about those girls...

Sunset's face completely pressed into the table as another groan expelled out of her mouth. And all my friends are busy. Every single one. she thought as she remembered earlier today.

“Sorry darling. I have to meet Sassy Saddles today. She helped Coco and has some new ideas for me.” Rarity said earlier with a twirl of her hair.

“Later Sunset! Me, Pinkie and Scootaloo are going to see the big game at the Canterlot Stadium!” Rainbow said as she scratched the back of her head with a sheepish smile. “Sorry, but I could only get three tickets.”

“Sorry sugarcube. Fluttershy and me are taking our pets to the vet today. Winona hasn't been feeling well lately.” Applejack said earlier with a sad smile. "I gotta help her there before Apple Bloom throws a tantrum."

“Sorry Sunset.” Fluttershy continued with a bow. "We'll hang out tomorrow, okay?

“They all had stuff to do.” Sunset moaned as she continued to slump over on the table. “Why are they all busy?!?!”

Even her friends at the Music Club were busy. Vinyl and Octavia were on a double date with Lyra and Bon-Bon. Trixie was too ticked off to hang out with. Apparently she was, 'too focused on killing Screwball since she messed up her morning.' Sunset still remembered when she asked what happened to Trixie earlier today.


This Morning...

Trixie was done. After forty minutes of constant hair brushing and ironing of her clothes, she was finally ready to seize the day. As she put on her usual purple colored hat, complete with sparkling stars all over it, she grabbed her backpack and equipped a small smile. “Trixie is ready for the day!” she announced to herself as she opened her front door. “Look out world, Trixie is going to-”

However, her announcement was interrupted by the most unusual sight. Well, it would have been unusual if it hadn't been Screwball sitting in the middle of Trixie's yard. Beside the prankster was a shovel and what looked like a small, dark hole.

“What the...” Trixie mumbled before walking up to the trickster, her face already beaming with rage. “What is this prankster?! What is that?!”

“It's a shovel.” Screwball said as she pointed at the tool.

“Not that. That.” Trixie replied, pointing at the hole.

“Oh that. That's a mine shaft.”

“And what is it doing in Trixie's front yard?!”

“I used it to dig the mine shaft.”

“Not the shovel you moron! What is the mine shaft doing in Trixie's yard?!”

“Well I can't dig up a mine shaft in my front yard. That would be tacky.” Screwball replied with a cheeky grin.

“Tacky?! That's your excuse?!”

“It's not an excuse. I'm doing this to strike it rich.”

“Strike it rich? With a mine shaft in Trixie's yard?! Are you insane?!”

“Not really.” Screwball said as she shook her head. “After all, I could strike iron ore.”

The statement didn't exactly reach Trixie's ears as she replied. “Iron or what?”

“Iron ore.”

“Yes, iron or what?!”

“Iron or gold?”

Trixie let out a huff as she grabbed Screwball's neck, her fingers tightening. “Listen here prankster. You either fill up this hole in Trixie's yard or Trixie swears she's gonna kill you. And Trixie means it.” Trixie's face leaned into Screwball's, their noses almost touching. If looks could kill, Screwball would have died several times alone from Trixie's angry glares. “If you don't fill it up now, you're gonna die. And then you'll be dead and you're going to stay dead because Trixie killed you!!!”

“Okay. Will you let me go so I can start filling up the hole?”

“Yes.” Trixie's grip released, only to then see nothing but a puff of smoke. She blinked at the sight, realizing Screwball had already beat a hasty retreat. Her lungs suddenly filled themselves up with air as she began to scream. “SCREWBALL!!!!!!”


Can't blame Trixie for that one. Just goes to show how far Screwball will go to annoy someone. Sunset thought as she stayed slumped over. Oh well, guess I'm stuck waiting now...for nothing. That or the day to end.

But the waiting didn't stop. In fact, it kept lingering there. Sunset kept herself in a slumped over position, her head rubbing the table as a loud groan went out of her mouth. “I can't stand it...I just can't stand it...”

Nothing has changed. Sunset thought as she kept sighing. I've been stuck here for what, four months now?! And even now...even after getting kidnapped by a bunch of hypnotizing girls from another world...nothing has changed! I'm still stuck here, unchanged. I still don't know who or what I am or what I'm supposed to do with my life. WHY?! She slammed her fists into the table, a small thud sounding out as she tried to bend over even more into the table.

She just couldn't stand it. She knew that her life situation was ridiculous. She knew that everything that had happened to her had never truly been horrible. Granted, being kidnapped was one thing, but if she was honest? She didn't care. All Sunset wanted was one single thing.

Purpose. she thought. Why am I here? What am I supposed to be doing? She lifted her head slightly as she stared deeply into the table. Am I supposed to live here in this world, not caring or anything? Just go through school and figure out the rest later? Even after four months and still no memories, am I supposed to just sit here and not know anything?!

“Hey, are you okay?” said a voice, snapping Sunset back into reality. She looked up, only to see a golden haired girl with a very peculiar set of eyes. Sunset had to blink several times as she looked at the sight in front of her. It was only after a few seconds that it dawned on her that she was staring at the girl.

“Uh...sorry.” Sunset said as she looked down again, trying to hide her rudeness.

“You didn't answer my question. Are you okay?” the girl said as she leaned over. Sunset felt like she about shrink into the seat as that question entered her ears. “You looked awfully sad there, do you need some help?”

“No. I'm uh...I'm okay.” Sunset said as she looked away from the girl. “Sorry but...could you leave me alone?” She already felt bad for saying that, especially since the reason she was sitting there was because all of her friends were doing something else. I must look like a total jerk.

However, Sunset's ears soon picked up the one thing she wasn't expecting. Despite what she asked, the girl sat down on the other side of the booth anyways. Sunset looked up as the girl just sat there, a big goofy grin on her face. Sunset could only blink at the sight as the girl began eating a muffin.

"Uh..." Sunset muttered, still confused.

"Sorry." the girl said with a gulp as she wolfed down the muffin. "I'm a bit addicted to muffins. Gotta have one whenever I can."

Sunset wanted to reply, but no words came out of her mouth. All she could do was stare at this stranger and her odd eyes. Who is she? She looks familiar. Have I seen her at the school somewhere? Sunset thought as she stared at her some more. She looks...off. Why do her eyes look like that?

After a few seconds, she fully lifted her head up and stood up straight. As she did, the girl shined a bright smile. Then she presented her hand. "So, name's Derpy. What's yours?"

"Er...Sunset Shimmer." she said as she shook Derpy's hand.

"Hiya Sunset Shimmer!" Derpy said as she shook back. "Nice to meet you!" Sunset still couldn't reply, even after the handshake. Though if she was honest, she didn't really have anything to say. Derpy on the hand, kept smiling as she said, "So...why did you look so sad earlier?"

"Huh?"

"I said, why did you look so sad?" Derpy asked with concern slowly appearing on her face. "You looked like you were really down in the dumps."

"Well...yeah." Sunset replied as she scratched the back of her head. "I'm uh, not in the best mood right now."

"That's okay!" Derpy cheered as she pulled out another muffin.

"It is?" Sunset said, confusion covering her face.

"Sure it is! After all, you can't always be in a good mood all the time." Derpy replied as she threw the muffin into the air, only for it too disappear as it landed in her mouth. Sunset could only watch as crumbs flew out of Derpy's lips. It was if the muffin had been thrown into a lawnmower of teeth. After a quickly muffin filled finish, Derpy continued, "So, why are you in a bad mood?"

"Um..." Sunset looked back down, not wanting to answer. "Let's just say life hasn't been good to me lately and leave it at that."

"Okay!" Derpy exclaimed as she kept her usual grin, except with crumbs. Sunset looked back up at her, not understanding how she could be so happy after hearing that. That is, till Derpy consumed the last muffin. Then, she spoke, "So...you're sad cuz bad things are happening to you, right?"

"Yeah..."

"Then don't worry about it."

"Huh?"

"I said don't worry about it."

Sunset blinked again as she tried to understand the girl's logic. "I shouldn't worry about bad things happening to me?"

"Uh-huh." Derpy nodded. "So bad things are happening to you, that's life. You can't change that...unless you go back in time and make sure those things never happened." Derpy then put her finger to her chin, trying to show a thinking pose. "But the doctor said you shouldn't do that..."

"What are you talking about?" Sunset asked as she cocked her eyebrow.

"Oh nothing." Derpy replied with a slight blush. "Let's just say, bad things happen and that's okay. They're just bad things, right? It's not like they're the only part of your life. So don't worry about it."

"Well..." Sunset wanted to argue back, but her mouth stopped. She wanted to say she was wrong. She wanted to say that her life was a total mess right now and things weren't going to get any better anytime soon thanks to the amnesia. She wanted to scream out that her life was nothing but some cruel joke where she was stuck in some world she didn't understand.

But she couldn't.

All she could do was sit there. She could only sit there as she realized what Derpy meant. I think I get it. What she's telling me is...I can't stop it and that's fine. I just have to let the bad things happen and keep going, don't I? It felt like time had stopped for Sunset as she kept thinking. I'm here...that's all there is, isn't it? If that's the case...

As that last thought went through her head, Sunset raised up from the table with a determined expression. She presented her hand to Derpy with a small smile. "I get it now. Thank you."

"No problem." Derpy said as she happily shook back. "What are you going to do now?"

"Heh heh....I think I'm going to go figure that out right now."

"Want a muffin for the road?" Derpy said as she presented the tasty treat.

"I'd love to have one. Thank you." Sunset grabbed the muffin and took a big bite out of the fluffy treat. "Mmm...that's good. Thanks." Sunset gave a small wave before leaving Sugarcube Corner. As she left, she looked back at the table, seeing Derpy still sit there as she ate another muffin. Sunset could only chuckle at the sight as she exited the shop, a new skip in her step.

I get it now. I know why I'm here. Sunset thought as she finished the muffin. I'm going to live my life and find out what I really want to do with myself in this crazy world. And when the time comes that the portal opens back up to Equestria...I think I'll go back and see what I really was.

Author's Note:

This chapter...never has a chapter been both so easy and so hard to write. The beginning and middle? Super easy. The end? So hard I thought I was gonna kill myself trying to figure out how her and Derpy's conversation would work. UGH!!! So hard...

Welp, here we go everypony...hopefully this will cure me of my writer's block. Now I just need some time to write. Here's to the future of 'A Lost Sunset'!

Hope you enjoyed the chapter!

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Comments ( 64 )

Sorry but this chapter the ending of the last chapter just didn't do it for me. I'm starting to see why you seem to fond of the siren arc.

wow. Derpy/muffins is really a great friend, no wonder she is seen patting flash on the back.

7751959 Oh yeah, I forgot about Depry for this story and realized this was a great way to put her into the story.

Derpy ex Machina.

Just a liiiiiittle bit too on rails in my opinion. Derpy felt like a mouthpiece for the author to give Sunset a reason to stop moping. It needed to be done sure, but it just came out of left field and felt like the word of the Creator.

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Glad this updated though

7752498 That is true, I'll admit it. But, at least its over with so I can get the story moving again.

7752550 Don't worry, she's still Sunset. Oh yeah, I forgot to credit you, sorry. Hold on here...

7752571 Then she would have to tell her that she's from another world. I don't exactly want that to happen right now.

OHMYGOSH! DERPY!!!! Loved this chapter. Great work. To the future of A Lost Sunset! Here here!

Hey, thanks for the chapters!

I think what you did with the sirens arc was ok, I like the idea of them being around plotting something. I do can see Sunset not wanting to tell Celestia about the kidnaping for many reasons. But, maybe you should have explained those reasons a little better.

The transition chapter with Derpy was cute. :twilightsmile:

Definitely could use some polish for the previous chapter but that can be ironed out later. This chapter is fine though and someone always needs to be the voice of reason. Or cheeriness in this case. Cheers for losing that writers block.

7753175 Thanks. I did these chapters so I could finally move on.

7753119 Yeah...I'm probably not going to do that because I hate that chapter and I don't wanna touch it ever again.

over all the 2 chapters where ok but the onl.y thing i dont like is

sunset not telling celestia what happened there was no reason to hide that she should have just told her

Derpy then put her finger to her chin, trying to show a thinking pose. "But the doctor said you shouldn't do that..."
"What are you talking about?" Sunset asked as she cocked her eyebrow.
"Oh nothing."

:rainbowlaugh: Listen to the Doctor, Sunny ...

I think I'll go back and see what I really was.

I think you're gonna be disappointing in yourself, Sunset :fluttershysad:

7754132 While I'm not fond of Sunset hiding her siren-experience from Celestia, I can understand the thought process:
Sunset: "Hey, sorry, I was kidnapped by three crazy girls who tied me to a chair for a few hours, hit me over the head and then untied me and left."
Celestia: "Are you on drugs?"

7754199

really all that was needed was sunset says what happens she dont know why they let her go they get reported to the police but the sirens have run off

then it never needs to be brought back up and it dont have the issue with sunset damaging her relationship with principle celestia which the author clearly will not touch as he just wants to forget the arc ever happened (and i understand why) so this would have given some character development to it all and still had the sirens get sweep under the rug

7754287 See latest blog post to get answers about this.

Finish the story plz

7775216 The story is far from over. If you want this story done now, you'll be waiting a long time.

7854144 There's a lot left to read my friend. But I'm glad you're enjoying it.

If she was honest, she just felt tired after the kidnapping. She didn't know why she felt this way.

That's probably because of the concussion! This is a story that revolves around Sunset getting amnesia after she gets beat up and a locker falls on her (a sign of brain damage), but in the span of two chapters, she gets knocked out twice, in the span of a few hours, once by someone punching her lights out and once by a freakin' baseball bat to the head, and there's no lasting brain damage, or even any compounding of her current brain damage? How does that make sense? It just seems weird that this story about brain damage due to head trauma doesn't take into account brain damage due to head trauma (past that first bit about the amnesia).

The conversation between Sunset and Durpy reminded me of the Orical from the matrix , completas with a food item ending... wait was this intentional?????

PS

*dramaticly*
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! I'm all caught up , why is the next button gone Lol , keep up the good work

7857442 No. I don't know anything about that.

Comment posted by reboot-this-pc deleted May 7th, 2017

7857475 Ah...I see. Thanks for liking my story.

7992720 I love the line 'Dear mother of all that is holy!' I don't know why, but I just do.

Derpy mentioned the Doctor! Don't think I didn't notice that nod...

Hope to see an update sometime soon.^_^

8140758 Yeah....blame writer's block for that.

8150610 This reply is at least two years old. What gives!?

8140914
More please

8238080
Writer's block is still there. Sorry pal. Here's hoping I can get past it.

8238114
here's an idea write something out send it to me I'll read it and tell you what I think I can be your beta reader also read other stories with the same concept that might help you too but if you take any ideas and twist them to serve your purpose remember to reference those stories I sense great potential in your story and I wish to see it grow

Comment posted by KingJoltik deleted Jun 17th, 2017

8238121
I...I don't know. I do have a prereader for this story, and I have maybe half a chapter written? Not sure. I know where I want to go from here in the story, I just don't know how to write it. I mean, if you're willing, I might be up for it.

8238154
I'm up for it just send me one chapter at a time and whatever you do always remember to believe in yourself

Love the story and concept. I can't wait for the next update. I also understand the writer's block problem, especially with long stories. I had the same problem in the closing chapters of Friendship is Forever when I was writing it.

8345506
Thanks. Writer's block is still there...still hindering me.

Comment posted by KingJoltik deleted Aug 4th, 2017

8345533 Like I said, I completely understand writer's block. :twilightsmile:

8345543
Thanks for understanding.

8345545 You're welcome.

8420116
Probably I haven't read either of these stories in a while so it's hard to remember.

8449837 "Australia", huh? I like to think that the universe can't handle multiple copies of Sunset in the same plane of existence.

love the story and concept. I can't wait for the next update


Greetings from Colombia

8759384
I'm glad you like it. As for an update, I don't know when that'll happen. I have zero ideas for this story right now and haven't had any for some time. I honestly don't know what to write for it.

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