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What would occur if a baby dragon met a certain pegasus before they're supposed to? Nothing good, that's for sure.
Follow the tale of a dragon and pegasus as they make friends, enemies and wreck havoc around the capital city of Equestria.
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An interesting idea. Following this story. Take your time with chapter 2. This is already an interesting idea.
So far this is adorable! I can't wait for more. I wonder when (If) Spike will meet Twi!
Not that dumb!
Okay, I'll bite and see where this goes next.
Update?
The cuteness, look away
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Soon. Just gotta finish some stuff before releasing.
Oh yeah, destined to be friends for life, those two.
Cute
Wait...with the bracelet on, will Spike convert to a one-year-old?
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Nope. All the bracelet does is retard the effects of growth by a certain margin. If Spike wears it, he grows at a 'normal' rate, if anyone else does...
They would take a really long time to get old.
Also, the bracelet doesn't 'revert' chances whatsoever.
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So...is Spike going to have the mind and body of a 12-year old until his acutal 13th birthday then?
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No, he's gonna grow up just like a normal 12 year old would.
The bracelet isn't trying to 'fix' Spike's age, it's just stopping the accelerated growth rate.
Does that explain it?
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It dose, thank you.
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Glad to hear it.
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Or at least different bullies from the usual three that ended up hurt.
Anyway, apologies for the delay in commenting, but apparently I never got the notification that the story updated, so I didn't know it had until noticing it had when going through my favorites looking for another fic.
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Fimfiction doing the same as youtube now?
Anyway, thanks for checking it! It really helps my motivation seeing people liking this story so far. Not to mention the interactions on the comments, you and the others are awesome.
Also, if you feel confused or curious about anything, feel free to ask away. I'll answer to the best of my ability without spoiling the story... Too much.
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There is actually a known glitch in FimFiction's handling of notifications that's existed for some time where, if a chapter is published and allowed to go live but then taken down again for whatever reason (usually because it was published on accident), it will not send out a new notification when that chapter is uploaded again. I assume similar circumstances transpired here.
Best solution is to avoid any circumstance where a chapter has to be taken down then uploaded again like that, but failing that, a courtesy notification from its author via a blog post tagged with the relevant story is a good work around for getting word out often times.
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Hm, Thanks for the heads up. I'll keep that in mind for the future.
You called Derpy "Durpy" quite a few times.
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Opps? Didn't even notice that.
Fixed! Thanks for telling me that.
Well what do we have here? An interesting take, if the timing of the Rainboom and Twilight's entrance exam was just off slightly? Sign me up
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Having read the whole story up until now I definetly like both the concept and the execution. Spike as Celectia's son makes much sense and the chemistry between him and Rainbow is good (prank duo here we go
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One potential issue I have to point out though, is that Celectia apperently did not do anything after Twilight ran away. She definitely knew of her given her statement in chapter one:
But did she just not bother looking for Twilight after she ran away? She was of course distracted with her new charge, but it seems kind of neglegtful to not at least ask what happened to her almost personal student. That is something that maybe should be addressed in the future.
One final minor gripe I have is that the past tense of "fly" is "flew" not "flied". As you use that word often it get quite noticable.
All in all I really like your story and hope you will continue working on it further
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Thank you for the kind words and I'm glad you are enjoying the story so far.
That's a interesting way of visualizing the story's premise. I felt like my boy Spike always got the short end of the stick, and I thought: "What if Spike was the main character instead of Twilight?" and used that chain of events to 'explain' how that ends up happening on the story.
Also english is not my native language so those type of errors tend to occur in my chapters, but I do look to fix them all whenever I can! Though, it might take till I post the next chapter before I fix the grammar on the other chapters.
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! And he really often got the short end of the stick (I won't start citing examples here, that could take a while).
I can totally see your motivation. I often times felt really bad for Spike, as he was treated more like a servant than a little brother. Even though they eventually acknowledged this fact, it still took until season 9
Finally I can totally understand struggling with English, not being a native speaker myself. What I can recommend is using some software to check for spelling and grammar mistakes. Write the chapter in said software and then copy the finished text, that makes life a bit easier. Just usual document software like Microsoft Word or if you prefer freeware something like LibreOffice already helps tremendously.
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S9 made it even worse, in my eyes, since Sparkle's Seven retconned Lauren Faust's backstory for him so, instead of being raised in the castle, he was raised in the Sparkle house with Velvet and Night Light treating him even worse than Twilight did. In pure MLP fashion, this is somehow treated as heartwarming and never brought up again and, like every part of Spike's story, it was left as an afterthought with a ton of uncomfortable questions. If I live to be 80 I still won't understand the vendetta the crew had against Spike.
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I am so glad I’m not the only one who sees the way Spike’s been treated as problematic. If a kid is forced to do all the chores, no matter how the aging differs because he’s a dragon, he’s still a kid, then it’s bound to raise some questions. Twilight is not seen on screen doing many chores compared to Spike. And he often gets left behind to do said chores when they go out on adventures or something as simple as a picnic. I just wish the dude was cut more slack.
Managed to read up on this
Its a interesting premise for sure
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I can definitely see your points. Though I would still think he, like Twilight, was mostly raised at the castle and they only visited their parents occasionally, but maybe that's just me being optimistic. Nevertheless for a small child to be treated like a servant, even if it was only by Twilight is really disturbing even in the most charitable ways of looking at it. But yeah on the whole I agree and was often left wondering what he deserved to be treated this way
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Only a week late commenting on such a good chapter
, well better late than never.
I really like that Spike has taken the initiative to start studying magic, even if he is not sure he'll be able to use some in the future. He really seems to take on some of Twilight's characteristics from the series, as he immerses himself in his studies. Though he unfortunately also seems to neglect his longest friend
, at least he manages to make new ones.
Finally, I find your portrayal of both Cadance and Celestia and their relations with Spike both on point and I like their interactions
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Overall I'm eager to find out more, about how this story is going to continue on
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Ep200 kind of put a monkey wrench into that theroy, though. It appeared that Twi, Shining, and Spike all lived at home. Maybe I missed something, but it seemed to me that the only reason Twilight was treating him like a servant was because her own parents were already doing that. The fact that Velvet and Night Light didn't even question Spike's absence in Once Upon A Zeppelin seems to confirm this.
On that subject, The show had the perfect opportunity to develop their family dynamic there, but made sure to write Spike out of the episode in the first two minutes to avoid having that conversation. Just like with Ep200, that conversation with Twilight raised a whole ton of uncomfortable suspicious on her parent's treatment of Spike, but the writers inexplicably tried to pass it off as heartwarming and never brought it up again.
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I must admit, that I did not recall the episode that detailed, but after checking it out I have to agree with you. I also think that they missed a really good opportunity to integrate Spike in Once Upon A Zeppelin. But it seems our poor scaled friend really can not catch a break during the show
Well, at least I still have my now head-canon of Spike being raised in the castle mostly by Twilight. In that case, I can understand that he seemed more neglected if a literal foal tries her best to raise him. Still not great, but more understandable with both of them experiencing hardships. It's the more classical Twilight is half his sister and half his mother approach.
Read the first 3 chapters. Solid start, let's see if the momentum holds. Overall a promising story, good job! 👍
Celestia, what is wrong with you?!?! Why do all your personal students become obsessed with books? Do you instill in them a vital need to constantly read to what? Either it's on purpose, or her aura of wisdom is so strong that it makes some others want to become as powerful as her.
Hopefully the wait for the next chapter won't be long.
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About the wait tho...
The next two chapters are kinda big and very important so they might take a while and I don't want to start chopping chapters left and right too.
So, yyyyeah. Sorry in advance if I fail to post within a month again.
I was wondering what Rainbow has been up to, while Spike went to study. Apparently having quite the high school dramas is the answer. Though now I'm interested if Shy is already in Ponyville or learning something else still in Cloudsdale.
Also, I just noticed that one of Rainbow's friends is Cloudkicker, not Cloudchaser, as I was wondering where Flitter would be all the time otherwise
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While Rainbow Dash would not agree with this answer I'd say slow and steady wins the race
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Ah, come on. Not gonna tell us how Spikes Exam went?
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Next chapter you'll know the results pretty much, if that's what you mean.
Does make you wonder if Celestia laid spike but couldn’t hatch him until that day.
Great to see another chapter come out, it was certainly worth the wait
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It's nice to see Spike's and Rainbow's stories once more interweave. Though I got to feel for poor Rainbow she really did not get a break since things started to fall apart for her. Now I'm interested in how she'll deal with the cards she is dealt, and how will Spike and maybe even Celestia play into all of that. Will they try to integrate her into life in Canterlot and will she be able to adapt?
One small critique that I have to make, is Fluttershy's absence after the incident. While there could be many reasons for her to not be with Rainbow when she wakes up, like her trying to help out looking for survivors or nursing the injured, none of that is mentioned, so it just strikes me as odd, that at that time Rainbow's closest friend and one of the kindest ponies around would not be there for Rainbow. Even worse she is relying on Spike to break to Rainbow all the bad news. Also, Rainbow asking, if Fluttershy was OK after hearing lots of ponies got hurt is something I am missing.
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Probably a bit nitpicky on my part, but just a small inclusion like Rainbow asking if Flutters is OK and Spike saying she is and saying she is trying to help out after the accident feels more in touch with both characters, though that's just my thoughts on the matter
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- Anyway, enough rambling on my part. Thank you for taking your time to read my story to this level, I appreciate it greatly. 
A Very understandable critique. I actually might rewrite the ending of the chapter to be more precise with the characters, though, I think it might be best if I do the next chapter first before that. Like I mentioned on previous author notes, both this and the next one are quite important for the story and I kinda want to finish the story soon - Not because I don't like it or anything, but because, initially, it wasn't even supposed to be a 'story' per say, just a simple prologue to another story.
Have a great Christmas and a happy New Year!
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. I am looking forward on how you'll develop this "prologue" along further.
I'm just happy to help and am glad that my comments seem resonate with you
And of course Merry Chirstmas
and a Happy New Year to you, too 
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