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YEEEEEEESSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well, at least it didn't put her in a question mark.
Will there be Master Chiefs who kick ass? Please have Master Chiefs.
You now have my attention. Please continue.
Ah, Twilight isn't an elite darn
This is getting more and more interesting. Good Job.
Confusions everywhere. Was the timid human supposed to be Fluttershy?
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No spoilers!
I don't mind the length. Hey, do you think you could look at my story as well? It's called When will it end. Please?
Simply glorious. Now...
i3.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/000/574/moar-cat.jpg
Or I shall unleash my cat army of doom.
I'm reading your story, and i have a few, if needed, tips. I'm a writer myself. 1st, don't keep making cliffhangers. More often than nought you can just keep writing. Don't keep making chapters that end in c.iffhangers. 2nd, figure out the length. Don't make a really huge chapter, than a small one after. It's just kind of confusing.
3rd, ask for help if you need it. The bronies of this world can help you, if you want. That's just about all I need to say. Great chapter! 
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Thanks for the advice and I know that stuff (personally I love cliffhangers because it allows the reader to try and predict what's going to happen) and in terms of chapter length, it's more of a I get a few key ideas out. Some of it is small and others a little more lengthy. If you want to see how I could have actually writen this story then I suggest reading "Battlefield Equestria". This is more of laid back writing rather than constantly checking errors and plot holes. But overall thanks for the advice.
2580749 Hope I didn't offend, I'm just not getting much response on my story.
Oh well!
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No, you actually didn't. You actually wrote a good constructive critisism unlike one I delt with in my other story. And because of that I was more than happy to read it.
2580782 Okay!... I wonder what's a good fight music?
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Personally I don't like it when an author adds a link to a piece of music in their stories (and I actually strongly advice not doing so).
2581277 You see, I don't add a link, I put the actual video in, so there are no new tabs. It's part of the story.
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I still highly advise against it. I've read stories that had a really good mood ruined by a random video in the story. Just don't add music, trust me.
2582183 Too late, I'm already 8 chapters in, and I add music to set the mood, not after. Sort of as a slight cliffhanger.
2730798 Because I DO like halo crossovers, (I just avoided this one because of the description error) and the few I've read that got it right was very enjoyable. I came here to at the very least point out the spelling error I'm sure you missed.
Also, 'troll'? All I did was point out a description error, (Which you still haven't fixed, goodness, quit spraying reader repellant, that companys known to rip off it's consumer base) then make an easily ignorable comment based on my lack of readership. You did the rest.
Ok, obviously, for you, this has gotten out of hand. While this has been enjoyable for me, trolling was never my intention. I apologize for any insults you may have taken to yourself, and give you my unjudging consent to delete this stream of, probably unpleasant to you, comments.
Ooor we can go route 2 and continue this, in which case let me grab my popcorn real quickly, and actually start trying, what with me being the 'stupid troll'.
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Now that you have explained yourself, I'm sorry too. The way your correction was written gave off the sense that you were there to just hate. And the description error was never there. I went to the edit and checked both descriptions and comma was and still is spelled with two "m"s. Had you actually said something along the lines of "Hey, I noticed an error in your description and you may want to fix it." I would have been a lot less hostile. And sorry for calling you a troll, I have a short fuse for them as you have seen.
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Comma: A puncuation mark, meant to be treated as a pause in the sentence.
Coma: State of unconciousness where the subject does not respond to outside stimuli.
The description I'm referring to goes: "An advanced teleportation spell puts Twilight in a comma after her spell back fired, only sending her mind into a different being in a alternate universe, but leaves her body in Equestria."
You're telling me, in this story, that spell sends Twilight into this?! ( , )
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That sounds painful.
Now don't be a grammar Nazi! That's my job! See the hat?