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After Chrysalis gets defeated and Shining Armor and Cadance return to normal, Celestia tells Twilight that she has real wedding to put together. But after all they did to her earlier makes this chance to lose her temper and snap at them.

(This is going through one final set of changes to make it better, because I suddenly realized that Celestia did defend her subjects, so she has no need to be arrested.)

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After a bad experience with a pony, Applejack becomes angry and hostile to all ponies with the same colored coat. Will she ever change her views? Can there be a certain pony that can touch her angered heart?

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Tom an Average Joe, saves a girl from an attempted rape. But he is fatalily injured and blacks out, only to wake up in a strange place in a body of a horse. A horse known to the locals as Nightmare moon.

Edited by Izanagi

Cover Art done by SwedishRoyalGuard http://www.deviantart.com/art/Nightmare-Moon-372321197

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On a routine shopping trip a young man and his younger sister were attacked on the street by the local gang. The young man managed to fight off the ruffians and defend his sister but, soon after died in the hospital from a stab wound. Now the angel of death has granted him a test. If he can accomplish enough good deeds to repent his life's sins he will be granted new life. It was supposed to be easy... when has it ever been? (A story with strong implications of the Multiverse theory and the branching paths theory. Every choice creates a world, every dream creates a universe.)I know some of you are tired of HiE fics and frankly I really don't care. I've always found it rather interesting to see how people believed that people would react to the magical lands contained in the show/stories/etc. I'm a brony and that's a fact. The story will accurately relate my feelings on the subject of being tossed into Equestria and subsequently the many stories that have been written about it. Aww Cammy you need to cheer up! Let's get started already! Rated teen for language and such that you would find on the Teen rated video game boxes. There will references to multiple stories both on this site and others so if you see a reference to your story be honored that I would actually want to delve into the universe you've portrayed. Ah yes before I forget this story will be tied to my blog so check that often to see what's up next.*Important Notice!* There will be many references to nearly endless games and franchises over the coarse of this story so if you see one let me know if I did it right. Important! The random tag is to make sure people know that any of the tags not clearly labeled will randomly swap out. With that said Enjoy!

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This story has been riffed in Doctor and Ditzy's science theatre by Rixizu. You can find it on his user page here

Spike has been missing for three years. Why he disappeared is a mystery to everypony. What caused him to leave in the first place, and why is he suddenly back now? He's acting cold towards his old friends and won't reveal why. He's lost his love for Rarity and is treating everypony he comes across the same way Gilda did.

Opening theme for this story is: Constellations - Sound of the Aviators

Rated: Teen for language and potential sexual outcomes.

Warning: Self-harm is described in this story. If you are prone to self-harm or know someone who is and feel uncomfortable reading about the subject, then I don't recommend reading the story.

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It was supposed to be just another night watch, but fate had other plans for our favorite princess of the night. A new foe arises from the depths of Tartarus and threatens to lead Luna back to her Nightmare ways. Who is this mysterious beast and what are his treacherous plans for Equestria?

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Author's notes: While I have your attention here I would just like to give a shout out to one of my friends on this site: JLBDreamer. She is the amazing artist that did that fantastic cover art for this fanfic. Aside from that she is also a great author, an amazing person and also a great support overall. She also helped me out a lot while I was writing this fanfic so i thank her from the bottom of my heart. JLB you rock!:rainbowdetermined2:

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Electro Spark introduces her immediate family and starts talking about her first years of school of which weren't so good.
She also talks about Dirty McDirtson, her best childhood friend. She was bullied all the time but Dirty was always there for her. Despite one day aquiring his cutie mark before Electro had hers, he continued to stay her friend. Her Grandma, however, was getting a vision of the future. Something terrible was going to happen to Electro, but she didn't know what.

At eight years old, Dirty finally blew his top and was completely jealous of Electro. Due to his young age, he couldn't cope with it and tried to kill Electro in a power plant using electricity but only ended up knocking both of them unconscious. That was when Electro got her cutie mark - a Tesla coil.

After the incident with Dirty, Electro didn't want to stay in Canterlot anymore in order to avoid run-ins with Dirty so instead she moved to Ponyville where she began to make new friends like Shadow Flash, Hunter, and Golden Rod. She also met Kuroi Shiroi and Fire Sparkle along with Hunter's daughter Sheila, and a friend of Hunter's, Slash.

She continues to meet more characters like Light Spark, Sonic Blitz, and Bess who were helping Sheila recover from a sickness. Some ponies named Sparx, Pluto, and Fireblaze were bullying her at the hospital but another pony was trying to help called Snow Eyes. A pony named Tail Sword only made things worse. She found out that Hunter had ponio and it could kill him. Later, she met Mattias Nilsson who also tried to kill her and her friends, along with Derpy Hooves and Pinkie Pie. Her brother Thunder Shock came to visit as well. She also met Jette Black and Plasma bolt who were dating.

After a while of not seeing Shadow Flash, Electro reconnects with him. A pony named Carson was trying to cure Hunter's ponio. She got split into two ponies after she drank a potion that Kuroi made me. She got cider from the first time from Applejack and met Twilight Sparkle. She met Shadow Flame and Fire Heart who were siblings along with Star Swirl who had just opened a new store of which she bought many things using Thunder Shock's money. Another friend of her's, named Titanium Trance opened up a store called Ty's Tunes.

Soon, someone was in Ponyville. It was Dirty McDirtson. After talkign to him a while, she allowed him to apologize and they became friends once more. There were spirits called Aka and Ao who were possesing different ponies but she ran before they could posses her. During hearts and hooves day, there was a lot of commotion with a love potion.

She fought a Hydra with the help of Rai, Free Kick, Blue Thrush, and Sky Dasha, along with Hunter. It turned out fine until she found out that Hunter wasn't actually Sheila's father, he was her brother! They were being mean to each other so she tried electrocuting him, but instead fell off a cliff, fell unconscious, and then fall into a coma.

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Princess Cadance drops in on Twilight Sparkle in a surprise visit. The two old friends, now sisters-in-law, spend a day together in the town of Ponyville, reflecting on memories of their pasts. Along the way, some new revelations work to forge a stronger bond between them.

Featured at The Round Stable on May 10, 2012.
Featured at Canterlot's Finest on December 1, 2013.

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Princess Celestia: Goddess of the Sun, ruler of Equestria, beloved Princess of ponies. She is loved by all, and loves all in return. A calm and wise ruler, she sits on the throne in Canterlot, maintaining peace and harmony throughout the land.

What most don't know is that her past is much darker: She was once a commander of legions, a warrior and scientist of unmatched skill. Thousands of monsters and abominations fell to her forces, slain in the name of an old leader, one entombed within his own throne. Free of her old form, free of the powers of Chaos, she was cast into a new realm, in a new form, with a new lease on life.

She is the God Emperor, Eternal Ruler of Equestria and Lord of the Imperium of Man.

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Alone one night in her castle, Twilight wakes up with an overwhelming feeling like she is being watched. She looks out and spots a shadowy figure looking right back at her. He vanishes into the night, almost faster than Rainbow Dash can fly. She tells her friends and they tell her that she's seeing things, however, Twilight knows that she saw some pony that night. So she decided to venture in to the Everfree Forest and find this pony. What she discovers throws her entire reality for a spin...


Meta- This is a story staring my OC (My avatar) this same OC has an origin story that will be told in time, but for now I want to get him established.

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