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This is the funniest chapter in this entre story. I'm glad that the mystery of AJ and Max was finally solved. Congratulation to the guy/girl who wrote this great guest chapter.
Awesome... just AWESOME!
For a moment I thought I had won the lottery getting these notifications. If we had, I think it would go to the Max and Twilight Honeymoon Fund, that would need to to get away longer.... Wait what?
I solemnly swear that I'm up to no good! Funniest chapter outside of the Sunbutt interludes! Twilight's reaction is fucking priceless!!!!
I feel like most of us would have been a bit more appalled at the younger humans in the barn than Max was, if indeed they looked about 12. I'd likely dry heave a few times, and just leave right then and there.
Poor Applejack. Maybe next time if Twilight doesn't beet her to it.
Best. Interlude chapter. EVER!
Applejack: Guess what day it is!!!!
Max: Ah oh! Ah! Ah! Ah oh!
Applejack: ITS HUMP DAY!!!!!!!
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No, I think most of us would simply block out the younger women, and super-impose on the older, more age appropriate ones.
Max needs to get it through his head and Twilight needs to 'let him off his leash...'
Even Celestia agrees; and I quote her: "Sharing is caring."
or to quote Pinkie Pie from the show: "You gotta share! You gotta care!"
Most definitely a lot of win in this chapter.
This shows quite a bit that they still see Max as property.
A few mechanical issues ('gapped' instead of 'gaped') but all in all, not bad.
Welp, it's canon now. The Mane 6 totally want to bang Max now. No mare, whether is be Princess, Mane 6, or your average run-of-the-mill mare, is safe from his Earthling charm.
>Not wanting cowpony candy vag
What a fag.
But he did: He avoided Mrs. Cake like the plague.
Really hoping this doesn't cout as canon... the idea that Max is fine having children that will be used for slave labor is more than a bit disturbing... especially if the get na IQ boost from his genes,,,
funny guest chapter, he did a good job.
Buwahahahah!!! This chapter is hilarious!! Do make more of "interlude" chapters outside the Sunbutt Interlude.
Oh AJ, this is going to go on for a LOOOOONG time. Oh don't be like that, just wait till Apple-bucking season. I know Max's price was around 1 million bits but damn 15,000 for certain fees.
Hehe. Not surprised about RD being broke, but she can always ask from Fluttershy.
Maybe I missed it, but does Spike understand Hoof Langage now? That was the only issue I had with the chapter.
4574589 Yeah, I was thinking that too. Unless I missed him picking it up, that's a major inconsistency for the story.
funny chapter but I'm with max not touching a female human there odds are the offspring would be smarter then the average human at the very least more clever then most plus that hole slavery thing (because applejack would want to use them even if she let me be a parent to them) now taping AJ on the other hand well let me at the hard cider first then who knows (going to need a lot of cider )
4574589 I don't remember it being mentioned either.
There are typos in here. Just a sample:
That should be "latter"
Should be stall.
After those, my brain went "NOPE!" and stopped working.
I feel like Max should be much more resistant to the idea of someone owning him, but he just lets it slide. It's a minor flaw in his character, but if you intended it, then I would guess it's because the month of maltreatment made him simply used to his freedoms being restricted.
Y'know, even if Max didn't bring it up, I'd have thought Twilight or Celestia would mention how bad an idea paying for Max's "services" would be. He's sapient even if very few know it. If he's willing then it's prostitution. If he's unwilling and he's forced then it's slavery.
The letter of the law might not be on his side, but Celestia and Twilight should refuse out of hand in the spirit of such laws.
(Assuming prostitution is illegal.)
(Of course then this chapter wouldn't be as funny without some serious reworking.)
Pinkie wants her creamy, creamy goodness cheap if free, then Shy has so much which could lad to her having to train her freinds in correct breeding treatment.
Wonder if Celestia kept details so she could pay correctly.
If Max were to breed, his offspring would be intelligent, then his offspring would diffuse their genes into the gene pool. Eventually their would be a lot of intelligent humans, and knowing human nature, there would be revolts. Then eventually humans would rise to the top and pony civilization would fall.
4575978 I have a feeling that they could mix, but it could lower the intelligence a bit. I mean, the breeding between Homo Sapiens Neanderthalis and Homo Sapiens [whatever the previous name is] happened already.
4575749 I was like "IMPOSSIBLE" until I remembered Pinkie is silly, not stupid.
4575978 They're not stupid (or cruel) enough to keep the intelligent humans in captivity.
I think that there should be some talk about genetic ramifications of Terran human conceiving a baby with Equestrian female. Would it be intelligent like him, or maybe like a kid with Down syndrome? How long would it live? Would it be immune to the spores? And first one that should be asked, is it even possible for him to have a kid there?
4573582 i dont get the referense
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I agree that it's unlikely Max will be able to have children with Equestrian humans. There's not just intelligence, but also body temperature, lifespan...It's just too different.
(On the other hand, I've heard that even very different breeds of dogs can produce viable offspring...could someone confirm this?)
*sigh* and here i was expecting a max and applejack 'tussle'.
4575566 Actually, if he was willing then it wouldn't just be prostitution. Because Twilight is the one getting money and not Max, Twilight would be Max's pimp.
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It should be possible!e, besides, the average lifespan in the midevil times was 40, and cavemen lived to no older than 20.
I must not have a sense of humor... I mean, the Big Mac bit was funny, and the "runnin' about town in a scandalous getup" part gave me a chuckle, but all in all, I just feel it weakened the story a bit. I have never been one for the explicit stuff in any book I have read, and horses tend to just be bit too awkward for me, so I was unnerved when the chapter started. While it is a relief to find no actual applebucking, the fact that characters seemed hellbent on it occurring was jarring. Applejack acted way out of character (and not in the expanding-the-depth-of-the-character out of character) and seemed to disregard Max's sentience at a level that was almost appalling. I mean, yeah, the being in heat bit sort of explained it, but hell, even Twilight seemed rather uncaring initially. Applejack knows he is a creature of equal intelligence that has on multiple occasions expressed his distaste for being used, both by ponies and their breeding humans, and yet she still lures him into a position with the intent to breed him. Ah, and Max went along with it! It even sort of weakens a later event in the story.
< Potential Spoiler Alert >
In a later chapter, Applejack and Max have a heartfelt conversation that solidifies their relationship, and there is just a slight niggle in the back of my brain saying that this chapter's events would have soured that conversation.
< Potential Spoiler Alert Ending >
The age section was also an unnerving portion. I was under the impression that humans aged faster here, like domestic dogs. In that way, a three year old like Brutus would both appear -and be- fully grown, however this implies a disturbing opposite. Very disturbing.
I don't know, maybe its me. Maybe I'm just a humorless prude, but I didn't like this chapter much. The ending made it better, and all in all the story as a whole has been positive, but....I don't know. Still, I am looking forward to more main chapters. I still enjoy the world, and want to see how events play out. I just might try to forget this chapter.
Kind of sad to watch AJ go from the loveable kind of hillbilly to the Deliverance kind of hillbilly.
I also feel like this puts Max back in that 'too forgiving to be a believable character' territory.
Hath you no integrity?
Also am I the only one annoyed at how the Mane 6 don't even take into consideration Max's feelings towards this. The random mares are understandable, they don't know he's intelligent, but the Mane 6 have no excuses, particularly Twilight, for even giving the notion of using Max as a man whore actual thought and possibility.
bwahahaha, poor max
Ugh so bad...glad this is an interlude because it does not fit with the characters at all. This contradicts things said in past and future chapters. Applejack is so OOC I didn't enjoy it. IMO I would just take this chapter down. I know it's a guest chapter, but I can't believe you published it. As I've said before I love this story and your writing, but not this chapter.
Oh god my sides, you just killed them! XD
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takes time to realize a species that you thought wasnt sapient is sapient. also to them its just sex, so their is that as well. hell alot of males would be like "HOW MUCH AM I WORTH!? why am i not doing this all the time!?"
So far, I have roundly disliked all the guest chapters. Egh. This almost made me switch my vote.
4588239 I think it should be mentioned that during that heartfelt conversation you described, the incident that occurred in this chapter was( very briefly) brought up.
The posting of this chapter was likely meant to give some depth to that. Although, I think Portal went overboard with this. As for how the Mane 6 were talking about the whole affair, I'm pretty sure they were just saying it to screw with Twi.(I have a few friends that would do that to me As for the letter, I simply log that under,"Trollestia strikes again!"
I'm on chapter twenty nine right now. Haven't stopped reading.
They're treating Max as if he's still property and can be used as such. Much like a pimp and a prostitute.
Don't really know how to feel about that.
4579505 Yes, it all depends on if the animals are in similar species, if animals are not in similar species then the offspring is sterile, apparently dogs are a single species (Canis Lupus Familiaris) therefore dogs can breed and produce fertile offspring. But by the vastly different physical attributes, we can mostly liked predict Max and Equestrian humans are Definetly not of similar species and therefor unable to reproduce. This is also effected by the chromosomes as if the chromosomes are equal they could reproduce but if they are not they can cause issues and will be sterile. So Earthily humans (Max) will have 46 chromosomes, 23 pair, the equestrian humans must have the same amount or will cause severe genetic issues in the offspring.
A good example is the horse-donkey hybrid, a mule is a breed of two species (doneky male and female horse) but is sterile and unable to reproduce.
I wonder if other Earth humans are being treated the same...
I imagine the Equestrian humans like the ones from I'm Legend but with more darker color. And the regular humans better looking, but since they are being neglected since their introduction, they begin to loose their humanity.