[Clopfic] [Necrophilia/Necromancy] [Mind Control] [Cum Inflation] There's many reasons the crystal ponies feared King Sombra. His journals detail just a few of them.
This fiction is just.... Literally one of my favorites... I love character interaction more than almost anything else in literature and the emotions, internal debate, loopholes if logic, forcing of personality alteration... Nnnnnnggggg~
2949558 Another entry in the "confused, but aroused" category. That category is my favorite
2960377 I intentionally idealized everything by removing blood and gore (and I toned down that one spot). Given the number of people who found it sexy despite themselves, I think it was the correct move.
2997186 Uhm, I read the wikipedia article. That was about it. Does wikipedia even count as "research" any more? Probably not.
As I said in the author's notes, I'm not a necrophiliac, so I was mostly extrapolating based off of more mundane experiences. My cat falls asleep on me a lot, and she's such a sound sleeper that she has that very limp, easily jostled/jiggled quality. There's something like that for every part of the story. Not terribly exciting, I'm afraid
I haven't read any other necroclop, but I guess having the best one is an accomplishment? Either way, glad you enjoyed it
I wish I could say J'me tire (I'm out), but strangely enough I just keep reading. This is so fucking wrong, but so hot. I'm a disgusting human being, but hey, aren't we all?
These mind games are SO cruel and messed up without any gore... I can't help but like it! Corruption at depravity their finest. Go on and make more. Please?
Hum... from a quick glance of the story, it seems to use a rare topic, but likely in a generic way. (just guessing considering it has Sombra as the main character. And going by the name.) But did want to ask in either case: Does it contain anything innovative? Or is it the same old usual stuff of some guy using their dick to fuck things, while overall being a douchebag? While generally any females are made off cardboard. (and excuse me if I sound a little "meh" to it, but last like... 7 fics I've read has been trainwrecks. And one was even worse than that due to the author being a liar about the content to get more views. So, just a little on expectation, so sorry if that comes off as a bit rude. But it's hard to keep hopeful after a constant downpour of "blah" results.)
(So yeah, a overall quick resume would be really neat if you could.)
3323293 While Sombra is definitely a douchebag, and his main pastime is using his dick to fuck things, there are some variations on the formula in this fic. One of the main characters in chapter 2 and 3 puts up a lot of resistance, and there are a pair of (short) fight scenes involving her. Sombra toys with his victims a lot before the sex shows up. Chapter 1 and 2 also contain first person segments from two different ponies (one from Sombra and the other from one of his conquests).
Overall, however, this is not a plot-heavy piece; I intentionally went light on the plot, and I intentionally included sex in every chapter. I do try to avoid "cardboard females" since having them resist turns me on
I like to think this fic is halfway between generic and unorthodox, but obviously I might be biased. I'm not entirely sure what you consider "generic", however, so the best way to tell would probably be to read it yourself. If you do read it and don't enjoy it, then I always welcome constructive criticism
3323934 Hum... sounds like you potentially made the "proper" version of all the generic clopfics out there. Aka: used an actual male instead of like "I'm Chrysalis/whomever! I will rape you now, femdom style... by growing a dick and acting fully like a male character! Hurr..." we see around... everywhere heh. But that said, going with the description, it does sound potentially quite bland, even if it manages to have some decent "story" and potentially good writing. Since it just solely seems to be about a male satisfying his needs by using a female. (which is like... the most generic porn concept ever. Rivaled by the "female that does all she can to satisfy a male with no regard for her own pleasure. Often while mentioning how incredibly horny she is, yet never does anything about it"
But neat to hear that you avoided cardboard females. Personally always derp at them in about any media. Best I've seen so far has been "passive aggressive". Like, she doesn't want to be there, yet she doesn't do anything against it. But doesn't go with it either. (like most does)
And hum... halfway is better than plain flat. Depending how much halfway. The half-assed kind is rather "blah" for me xP (like the "add equine anatomy to males, have human/porn for the females, because mismatching.") And can say thanks for to what I can tell, being honest. Always nice with that. But I do think I'll have to pass. Not in enough mood to read a solely one sided story about a douchebag that only wins. (least that's how it comes off) Mainly since it just gives me a tad bit much "mary sue" feel to a character. (since you know, they just so happen to always succeed) That, and I am not a fan of one sided stuff. But that'd due to overexposure. Since you know, it can be fine to see it every now and then. But after like, the 8136'th time in a row, it gets a bit monotone.
Partially why I am very keen about IC. Since well, apart from the fact; if you like a character, why would you want to not have them act like they should? (personally never get why so many want cardboard characters instead of IC) But yeah, my main view on "generic" is something that feels a bit "churned out" or "one of the thousand". You know, like "x meets y, x shows/spontaneously gets a dick, y offers to slobber all over it wanting nothing in return, as they lack a dick themselves, thus have no reason to want pleasure" kind of fling. That, or people just always using the same theme or roles for their characters. Or only got ex: one gender on the short end.
I mean heck, even my long ass female rapist fic had more variation than around 10 generic ones combined xD ... then again, it is a bit sad that I can just swap the roles of a generic theme and suddenly have a ton more innovative and unique fic... though some people just seem really dense/thick in that context... like, saw one draw random gore stuff, and they mentioned they wanted some new ideas to do, and it wasn't until I pointed out that they literally had a ton of new ideas they hadn't used with male characters as the victim. I literally hadn't occurred to them that that was a possibility. Like, they had a stallion fuck a mare as she got fed to a woodchipper, I pointed out he could easily draw a counterpart with a mare riding a stallion being feed into one, using the rigor mortise for example.
Trailing off here, but if I did give critique, it'd be like, a bit longer than this, and a little less rambly xD Anyhow, I could however offer to discuss parts of it, ball ideas or overall evaluate things you might want to look through. I'm quite good at that I've been told. Hope I managed to not sound overly offensive or anything.
3328185 It's alright, I definitely know the feeling; one can only read so many variations on the exact same thing before it gets really old.
I had an idea for a CheeriMac somnophilia fic--think after talking to you I may change it around and have Big Mac be the sleeping one instead of Cheerilee like I originally planned.
3353287 Yeah. Main blandness for me is the 1: Amount of female inexplicably getting penises, for some reason immediately being okay with it, along with instantly thinking like a male. And the 2: (often mixed with 1) the cardboard characters of x: only cares to pleasure their dick. y: only cares about the pleasure of that dick. xP
But yeah, it's rather sad how monotone a lot of things are. Like, clop art has almost ruined male equine anatomy for me with all the glorifying, over-proportion and mismatching with the female genital. Like they say: Sure, something really neat is neat the first couple times, but having to have it 350 days a year just gets boring... heck, even find the incredibly rare "male human anatomy on pony" to come of as a ton more innovative and interesting xD Still yet to see male human, female equine in the genital designs though.
And trailing off here. Anyhow, would say that could potentially be an idea. Depends what you want to do. I've actually written a somophilla fic, it was my first actually xP (clop that is) I took the unique route (to what I know) of having the one sleeping being the one getting serviced. I supposedly apparently were the first one to write such a fic, along with inventing the theme "gentle rape" xD So anyhow, would say that depends what you want content wise. If you'd want to go one sided, selfish, having mac sleep would be the most innovative. If it'd be one sided, generous, having cheerilee sleep would be the most innovative. And if dual, either would work I think, cherille would prolly still be more unique due to well, norm rule. But that aside, do go for what you feel would be the most interesting and fun to write. And like said: In case you'd want help, please feel free to ask.
3363581 I at most consider myself decent or "above average" as I actually try in areas others do not, and instead just shove in stereotypes or norms. But I still get proofreaders for that I think needs it, as it can really improve the quality :P
And allright, I'll potentially give it a look If not, I could still be up for discussing parts of it you would like to hear more feedback on.
I really don't know what drove me to read this, I don't know why I enjoyed any of this, I'm also surprised I read this many chapters in, I don't like it, but my boner approves. I will leave a like, then depart and forget porn tagged dark exists in this fandom, I commend you for your skill, fairly entertaining porn, and originality, but this story contains death sex, so thanks for the nightmares.
6857129 I intentionally made this story as idealized as possible. It may center around necrophilia, but there is only one mention of blood and all the bodies are freshly dead. I wanted to see if I could present something inherently disgusting as arousing. Given the large number of readers who experienced self-loathing, confusion, and/or arousal, I think I succeeded
Fucking spectacular!!!!!!!
:![:yay:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/yay.png)
![:trollestia:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trollestia.png)
This is really messed up.
I like it.
Help me...
2949558
Ok
Your mushroom soup is shit on a hot plate.
Get out of my fucking kitchen
Neat.
This fiction is just.... Literally one of my favorites... I love character interaction more than almost anything else in literature and the emotions, internal debate, loopholes if logic, forcing of personality alteration... Nnnnnnggggg~
2944001 2962060 2962720![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
thanks
2949558 Another entry in the "confused, but aroused" category. That category is my favorite![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
2960377 I intentionally idealized everything by removing blood and gore (and I toned down that one spot). Given the number of people who found it sexy despite themselves, I think it was the correct move.
2997186 Uhm, I read the wikipedia article. That was about it.
Does wikipedia even count as "research" any more? Probably not.
As I said in the author's notes, I'm not a necrophiliac, so I was mostly extrapolating based off of more mundane experiences. My cat falls asleep on me a lot, and she's such a sound sleeper that she has that very limp, easily jostled/jiggled quality. There's something like that for every part of the story. Not terribly exciting, I'm afraid![:applejackunsure:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applejackunsure.png)
I haven't read any other necroclop, but I guess having the best one is an accomplishment?![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
![:rainbowderp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowderp.png)
Either way, glad you enjoyed it ![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
I wish I could say J'me tire (I'm out), but strangely enough I just keep reading. This is so fucking wrong, but so hot. I'm a disgusting human being, but hey, aren't we all?
3001129 At least you aren't the one writing it![:applejackunsure:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applejackunsure.png)
This is one of the best Sombra clopfics ever!
3078267 Thanks. Either there's not a lot of those or I'm quasi-competent.![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
3083860 That profile pic and name
Thanks ![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
3085017
A little of both. I enjoy your stories and Sombra is woefully underrepresented.
These mind games are SO cruel and messed up without any gore... I can't help but like it!![:raritystarry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritystarry.png)
Corruption at depravity their finest. Go on and make more. Please?
2997186 I...I'm a little scared to check if there's a group for that on here, really.
*poke with stick*![:rainbowderp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowderp.png)
![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
Is it alive? Will there be any more? Preferably soon?
3228132 Eventually; I've got the next chapter drafted but I have too many projects![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
3275779 Yes. It was actually kind of annoying to do since Word's autocorrect kept trying to change them back![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Hum... from a quick glance of the story, it seems to use a rare topic, but likely in a generic way. (just guessing considering it has Sombra as the main character. And going by the name.) But did want to ask in either case: Does it contain anything innovative? Or is it the same old usual stuff of some guy using their dick to fuck things, while overall being a douchebag? While generally any females are made off cardboard. (and excuse me if I sound a little "meh" to it, but last like... 7 fics I've read has been trainwrecks. And one was even worse than that due to the author being a liar about the content to get more views. So, just a little on expectation, so sorry if that comes off as a bit rude. But it's hard to keep hopeful after a constant downpour of "blah" results.)
(So yeah, a overall quick resume would be really neat if you could.)
3323293 While Sombra is definitely a douchebag, and his main pastime is using his dick to fuck things, there are some variations on the formula in this fic. One of the main characters in chapter 2 and 3 puts up a lot of resistance, and there are a pair of (short) fight scenes involving her. Sombra toys with his victims a lot before the sex shows up. Chapter 1 and 2 also contain first person segments from two different ponies (one from Sombra and the other from one of his conquests).
Overall, however, this is not a plot-heavy piece; I intentionally went light on the plot, and I intentionally included sex in every chapter. I do try to avoid "cardboard females" since having them resist turns me on![:trixieshiftright:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftright.png)
I like to think this fic is halfway between generic and unorthodox, but obviously I might be biased. I'm not entirely sure what you consider "generic", however, so the best way to tell would probably be to read it yourself. If you do read it and don't enjoy it, then I always welcome constructive criticism![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
3323934 Hum... sounds like you potentially made the "proper" version of all the generic clopfics out there. Aka: used an actual male instead of like "I'm Chrysalis/whomever! I will rape you now, femdom style... by growing a dick and acting fully like a male character! Hurr..." we see around... everywhere heh. But that said, going with the description, it does sound potentially quite bland, even if it manages to have some decent "story" and potentially good writing. Since it just solely seems to be about a male satisfying his needs by using a female. (which is like... the most generic porn concept ever. Rivaled by the "female that does all she can to satisfy a male with no regard for her own pleasure. Often while mentioning how incredibly horny she is, yet never does anything about it"
But neat to hear that you avoided cardboard females. Personally always derp at them in about any media. Best I've seen so far has been "passive aggressive". Like, she doesn't want to be there, yet she doesn't do anything against it. But doesn't go with it either. (like most does)
And hum... halfway is better than plain flat. Depending how much halfway. The half-assed kind is rather "blah" for me xP (like the "add equine anatomy to males, have human/porn for the females, because mismatching.") And can say thanks for to what I can tell, being honest. Always nice with that. But I do think I'll have to pass. Not in enough mood to read a solely one sided story about a douchebag that only wins. (least that's how it comes off) Mainly since it just gives me a tad bit much "mary sue" feel to a character. (since you know, they just so happen to always succeed) That, and I am not a fan of one sided stuff. But that'd due to overexposure. Since you know, it can be fine to see it every now and then. But after like, the 8136'th time in a row, it gets a bit monotone.
Partially why I am very keen about IC. Since well, apart from the fact; if you like a character, why would you want to not have them act like they should? (personally never get why so many want cardboard characters instead of IC) But yeah, my main view on "generic" is something that feels a bit "churned out" or "one of the thousand". You know, like "x meets y, x shows/spontaneously gets a dick, y offers to slobber all over it wanting nothing in return, as they lack a dick themselves, thus have no reason to want pleasure" kind of fling. That, or people just always using the same theme or roles for their characters. Or only got ex: one gender on the short end.
I mean heck, even my long ass female rapist fic had more variation than around 10 generic ones combined xD ... then again, it is a bit sad that I can just swap the roles of a generic theme and suddenly have a ton more innovative and unique fic... though some people just seem really dense/thick in that context... like, saw one draw random gore stuff, and they mentioned they wanted some new ideas to do, and it wasn't until I pointed out that they literally had a ton of new ideas they hadn't used with male characters as the victim. I literally hadn't occurred to them that that was a possibility. Like, they had a stallion fuck a mare as she got fed to a woodchipper, I pointed out he could easily draw a counterpart with a mare riding a stallion being feed into one, using the rigor mortise for example.
Trailing off here, but if I did give critique, it'd be like, a bit longer than this, and a little less rambly xD Anyhow, I could however offer to discuss parts of it, ball ideas or overall evaluate things you might want to look through. I'm quite good at that I've been told. Hope I managed to not sound overly offensive or anything.
3328185 It's alright, I definitely know the feeling; one can only read so many variations on the exact same thing before it gets really old.
I had an idea for a CheeriMac somnophilia fic--think after talking to you I may change it around and have Big Mac be the sleeping one instead of Cheerilee like I originally planned.
3353287 Yeah. Main blandness for me is the 1: Amount of female inexplicably getting penises, for some reason immediately being okay with it, along with instantly thinking like a male. And the 2: (often mixed with 1) the cardboard characters of x: only cares to pleasure their dick. y: only cares about the pleasure of that dick. xP
But yeah, it's rather sad how monotone a lot of things are. Like, clop art has almost ruined male equine anatomy for me with all the glorifying, over-proportion and mismatching with the female genital. Like they say: Sure, something really neat is neat the first couple times, but having to have it 350 days a year just gets boring... heck, even find the incredibly rare "male human anatomy on pony" to come of as a ton more innovative and interesting xD Still yet to see male human, female equine in the genital designs though.
And trailing off here. Anyhow, would say that could potentially be an idea. Depends what you want to do. I've actually written a somophilla fic, it was my first actually xP (clop that is) I took the unique route (to what I know) of having the one sleeping being the one getting serviced. I supposedly apparently were the first one to write such a fic, along with inventing the theme "gentle rape" xD So anyhow, would say that depends what you want content wise. If you'd want to go one sided, selfish, having mac sleep would be the most innovative. If it'd be one sided, generous, having cheerilee sleep would be the most innovative. And if dual, either would work I think, cherille would prolly still be more unique due to well, norm rule. But that aside, do go for what you feel would be the most interesting and fun to write. And like said: In case you'd want help, please feel free to ask.
3360502 Well, I don't usually get prereaders for porn since I'm not a very good writer.
I ended up finishing it today, so you can find it over here if you're interested. Naturally, I'm always open to constructive criticism![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
3363581 I at most consider myself decent or "above average" as I actually try in areas others do not, and instead just shove in stereotypes or norms. But I still get proofreaders for that I think needs it, as it can really improve the quality :P
And allright, I'll potentially give it a look If not, I could still be up for discussing parts of it you would like to hear more feedback on.
3363581 when is the update? and i want to have epilouge where Twi gets this diary thing in a book shipment by accident and is traumatized
when will this be updated?
3557500 given some of the things in your story gallery, I'll take that as a compliment![:unsuresweetie:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/unsuresweetie.png)
![:pinkiecrazy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiecrazy.png)
I really don't know what drove me to read this, I don't know why I enjoyed any of this, I'm also surprised I read this many chapters in, I don't like it, but my boner approves. I will leave a like, then depart and forget porn tagged dark exists in this fandom, I commend you for your skill, fairly entertaining porn, and originality, but this story contains death sex, so thanks for the nightmares.
6857129 I intentionally made this story as idealized as possible. It may center around necrophilia, but there is only one mention of blood and all the bodies are freshly dead. I wanted to see if I could present something inherently disgusting as arousing. Given the large number of readers who experienced self-loathing, confusion, and/or arousal, I think I succeeded![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)