I like where this is going. So I assume the next chapter will be the ambush, I hope no friendlies die. And lastly, why you no give Doctor big role!?! I want to see the TARDIS make a full appearance by the end of the story. Other than that, I liked everything. -Richard
The tension in this chapter is so high you could snap it with a flick. *flick!* *Twang!* OSHIT! ALL HELL BROKE LOOSE! AHH FUCK! WHY DID YOU BREAK THE TENSION!? Couldn't wait.
455896I called via something even my parent arent allowed to know bout and told her you are staying for the day while she comes all the way from bufu fucking egypt to mexico to find you
can't wait for the next chapter to see if everything goes to plan or not. and turning some men into solders in two weeks seems highly unlikely, but it's just a story so whatever
456152 i wouldn't call them hard core soldiers probably militia but being told that you are a soldier by the one who has been busting your balls for two weeks would be a huge moral boost they still have devoted their life to being a soldier ... some might just die being a soldier SPOILER!!
Wow, that was... amazing, really. The way you described the girls' dresses was astounding- it was almost as though there was actually a picture right in front of me. (Kind of like this one.) img806.imageshack.us/img806/3504/manesixgala.jpg Although it's not the one you used for inspiration, I'm pretty sure the designs are more or less the same, just a different style used to put the images on canvas-- er, pixels. Also, might I add that you have a flawless sense when it comes to music? The songs you picked for this chapter fit perfectly- between your descriptiveness and choice of song, I could visualize the party with such great detail, it was like watching a movie. Believe me when I say that I'm practically on the edge of my seat waiting for more of this story to come along!
five hundred round burst onto a target with amazing accuracy at two hundred yards.
No. A) you will never find a 500 round magazine, box or not. B) you would never "burst" that much. A burst is holding down for a short period of time then releasing. To fire 500, you would have to hold down for about 40 seconds.
im sorry i cant read this right now but im so tired that that i feel like encrypted-tbn2.google.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcTyinSKmN0psjpgnjJmwxwKfVA1kMXb4faPZ9V1xWd4y6pz5szMAQ first
I like where this is going.
So I assume the next chapter will be the ambush, I hope no friendlies die.
And lastly, why you no give Doctor big role!?!
I want to see the TARDIS make a full appearance by the end of the story.
Other than that, I liked everything.
-Richard
454313 shut up and drink some coffee
454373 lulz
like i said before
i will allude to what the Doctor really is
but never outright say it
The tension in this chapter is so high you could snap it with a flick.
*flick!* *Twang!* OSHIT! ALL HELL BROKE LOOSE!
AHH FUCK! WHY DID YOU BREAK THE TENSION!?
Couldn't wait.
Awesome job.
Also,
I found this online.img.ponibooru.org/_images/19e53bf07a9379ae6bd7a674a323473b/1655%20-%20applejack%20artist%3Aempty-10%20dress%20fluttershy%20human%20humanized%20pinkie_pie%20rainbow_dash%20rarity%20Suited_For_Success%20twilight_sparkle.png
like... much like..
glad i worked late shift...
i also see that your... Ahem "Reaserch" didnt pan out either...
hooray for innocence
This made my morning! Epic!
Also, Carrot is BAWS.
Cheers!
I do not belive that Dano could be a competent millitary comander. I've heard of "reader's suspension of belief", but this is plain stupid. I can't for one second belive that Dano is capable of turning his men into soilders. And for that reason, I won't continue reading.
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Awesome chapter. No other words may be given. Only moustaches.
Let me quess that there will be post battle sex
WELCOME TO MEXICO MAN!!
I hope you like tacos!
and quesadillas!
and pozole
because thats all I got here!
454521go look at his blog and tell me you are late
454514 why you break my tension
454521 that is the exact picture i used to describe the dresses
here, take all of my internets
454612 its on its way friend
454900 carrot is cool, but you should stay tuned
shit is gonna go down
455016
well, i can't please everyone
thanks for reading this far
455371 i shall store those moustaches in my moustache case
and cherish them forever
455399 something like that, but you will have to wait
455888 i need to get back home
luna will begin to worry
455896I called via something even my parent arent allowed to know bout
and told her you are staying for the day
while she comes all the way from bufu fucking egypt
to mexico to find you
455902 lulz
she thought i was in egypt?
god damn twilight still trying to get revenge for the party cannon
455906yeah she also said that teleporting she can only go about
1000 miles each time so
she should be here in about 2 hours
455918 sounds good
....
im bored
455923here have some good old comedy gold
this is the comedy gold I told you about 13 seconds ago
fluttershy likes hating the haters
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455940 this is hilarious
both your pic and the link
455954I know mon
hey , I was wondering,
can you speak fluid mexican spanish?
455963 nope
i tried to take french in high school
didn't like it
so im gonna keep on speaking american
455966...
...
...
...
vete a la madre, wey
455973
455974ok ok im sorry brah
sorry
455016 Ok, your loss.
Love the new chapter mate! Keep it up!
456043 more inbound
dont you worry your cute little flutterdash avatar
can't wait for the next chapter to see if everything goes to plan or not.
and turning some men into solders in two weeks seems highly unlikely, but it's just a story so whatever
you should give dano a mustash
456152 i wouldn't call them hard core soldiers
probably militia
but being told that you are a soldier by the one who has been busting your balls for two weeks would be a huge moral boost
they still have devoted their life to being a soldier
...
some might just die being a soldier
SPOILER!!
455893
Don't ask me. Ask my other personality, Hype.
I couldn't wait for the next chapter.
457214
i am disappoint
I'm sorry for his behavior
I'm not. *mental punch* OW! What was-
For being impatient and an ass. Now apologize.
...Fine. Sorry Gaius Invictus
457242
better
i still love you both
457276
YES! GOOD VIBES STILL REMAIN IN THIS WORLD!
Thanks, likewise, no homo.
457287 of course no homo
457296
Haha.
Brohoof?
457331 brohoof.
456193 You said spoiler too late.
457372 damn
i can never get those right
457377
457400 lol
if you must know
it is a toby turner thing
cuz whenever he talks about a name brand product he goes SPONSOR
i just do it with spoilers
455973
Fuck yeah America !!!!!!!!!!!
*looks at word count*
huh
*starts reading*
my god... personally two weeks it a bit little, but eh.. whatever works. Still good job
also...
DANO.... Y U NO KISS FLUTTERSHY GOOD BYE
MY JIMMIES ARE RUSTLED THAT THERE WAS NONE. CAPS LOCK RAGE MODE
THE JIMMIES HAVE BEEN RUSTLED
but not mine good sir WRITE ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
458920 OH SHIT!
I RUSTLED HIS JIMMIES!
GET TO THE CHOPPA!
459272 thank you kindly
Wow, that was... amazing, really. The way you described the girls' dresses was astounding- it was almost as though there was actually a picture right in front of me. (Kind of like this one.) img806.imageshack.us/img806/3504/manesixgala.jpg Although it's not the one you used for inspiration, I'm pretty sure the designs are more or less the same, just a different style used to put the images on canvas-- er, pixels. Also, might I add that you have a flawless sense when it comes to music? The songs you picked for this chapter fit perfectly- between your descriptiveness and choice of song, I could visualize the party with such great detail, it was like watching a movie. Believe me when I say that I'm practically on the edge of my seat waiting for more of this story to come along!
I kept listening to the other songs on the 2nd one because I saw the string version of coheed&Cambria. Nice choice bro.
metal+classical=fantastical
No.
A) you will never find a 500 round magazine, box or not.
B) you would never "burst" that much. A burst is holding down for a short period of time then releasing. To fire 500, you would have to hold down for about 40 seconds.