Back inside Stable 4, I was destined for greatness. Outside, I was nothing more than a filly. At the same time, I also seemed to fit in very well into the horribly violent Equestrian wasteland, more than you would expect from somepony my age.
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Err... What?
How does this connect to anything previously shown? Did you accidentally release a chapter out of order?
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The plans to take over the stable have been on the table for a long while o.o. First mentioned in chapter 23, but it was also mentioned again in chapter 27
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Yeah, and if the last part of Chapter 27 was about preparing to invade to stable that she used to be a member of, then it would not have been a significant issue; But as it is, it just comes out of nowhere, and what little foreshadowing there is is not even close to being enough.
Seriously, if a chapter makes me start scrolling immediately because the sheer lack of context makes me legitimately uncomfortable, then that chapter is bad.
Edit: Actually, lack of context has been a problem for most of the story's timeline, starting with Chapter 11. It really feels like you forget that other people don't necessarily know what you know, and thus write different perspectives without ever directly stating whose it is, leaving us, the readers, to figure it out through context-clues that often only appear several paragraphs in.
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Apologies for that, then.
Main reason I didn't include such a scene was because, to me, it felt superfluous. Adding an entire scene just to say something that's already been stated would have felt like filler.
I suppose I can add a line or two in the previous chapter along the lines of "Well, tomorrow we're starting preparations to get into the stable", but I'm not gonna dedicate an entire scene to it.
Edit: done. added two extra paragraphs to the second-to-last scene. In hindsight, I probably should have done it that way to begin with since the entire point of Iron talking to that person was to prepare for the "invasion".
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Just saw the edit.
That's entirely intentional in the vast majority of cases. I want the audience to have to think about which character is the current narrator. Either so that the reveal feels more special (like in chapter 11), or so that it leaves a mystery (such as with the unknown slave).
In this chapter it was more of the former. Build up and have the reader try to understand why we're suddenly experiencing the story from this PoV, only to then reveal the plan to take over the stable.
Originally, I was going to make the whole stable takeover be unknown to the reader until it happened, but that would have been really difficult without some serious bs.
I'll admit there are some cases where it is/was unneeded, like in this chapter. Which is why I ended up adding context in chapter 27; it's not meant to be a mystery anymore, so I might as well make it obvious. The same could be said about the Lockpick scenes at the end of the occasional chapter; it's not meant to be a mystery, so I should probably figure out a way to make it obvious who's narrating. I've had people think those scenes are from Iron's PoV, even though there are some clear context clues that it can't be Iron.
Well the truth is out. I wonder if Airdrop will make it out alive.
she's so cute bros
oof, I won't bet on airdrop living long after this
also, I'm worried that sonata will fully take over now that iron is in this state
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I'd give you my Magic 8 Ball's answer, but I think it's broken. I asked it a few different questions about Airdrop, and it just keeps making weird grinding noises and baring its teeth at me.
When did it grow a third mandible?