FLASHBACK
October 2010, Alex was really impatient for the next to come Assasins Creed game, BROTHERHOOD, Alex liked the new assasin Edzio Auditore, granted, he wasn’t Altair, but he knew how to kick asses too, at that moment he was in his room searching for something well recomended by one of his friends, it was a show about colorfull little ponies who liked to spend their days learning the “Magic of Friendship”. . . . just that information was enough for Alex to try to avoid this show like some kind of letal decease, but one comment of his friends made him at least give this show a chance, stupid comment he thought. . .“HEY REMEMBER WHEN YOU SAID NOT TO JUDGE KINGDOM HEARTS JUST BECAUSE IT HAD DISNEY CHARACTERS, NOW YOU OWN ME ONE, DON’T JUDGE THIS SHOW BEFORE WATCHING IT”.
Damn! that hurt like a bitch, but he was right, now he was there searching in the web for the first two episodes of the show, he found it and started watching it with his sick bag in hands just in case. But. . . he didn't throw out, he could not believe it, the show no matter how childish it was, it was…….really good, even the draws wasn’t bad, the animation, the story, the music, everything, he had memories of the last generations of this particular show, (those ones did really make him trown out), he…..like it, no maybe he…… LOVE IT, maybe as much as he loved Assasins creed and his PS3 (well, not really, but he liked it a lot). Since that day he waited for the next new episodes, he loved every one, he didnt have exactly a favorite pony, all characters had their own good and bad atributes. But maybe what sealed the deal, was the fact they had what he always dreamed, ADVENTURES, what would he give to have adventures like they did, going in the search for some ancients artifacts, facing a dragon, not every episode was about an epic adventure, but somehow they managed to make every day to look like an adventure, he like many BRONIES at least once (no matter how much he and they try to negate it) wished to be there, to talk with Twilight and Rarity, help Applejack with her apples, to fight or spare with Rainbow dash, play and partying with Pinkie pie, and why not… give a crushing hug to Fluttershy and never let go. Of course as with assasins creed's smoke bombs and leap of faiths, he knew how to separate fiction from reality, and of course the day he would photoshop one of his photos with a pony or some ponies claiming to be his special somepony or his herd, he would definitely search for profesional help and seclude himself in the nut house.
THIS IS HOW ALEX WAS GOING TO LOOK IN EQUESTRIA, MY FIRST DRAW OF HIM, I DECIDED TO CHANGE IT A LITTLE, BUT I WANTED TO KEEP THIS ONE HERE, AND I KNOW, I SUCK COLORING.
As any gamer and normal teenager, Alex was not diferent from the rest, some of his activities since he found Prince of Persia, sands of time saga, consisted in going to Comicons and local game conventions, of course when he cosplayed, at firstn he invested good money in the Prince's outfit copy, but since 2007 he cosplayed as ALTAIR, with a crossbow, knifes, everything, and Alex really liked it, then he cosplayed as Edzio and finally Connor, until 2013
He was never gonna forget that day, february 2013, it was a local normal Comicon, same rutine, he took his backpack and suit case full of stuff, in his backpack it was of course his profesional bow and arrows, his bowgun, his laptop and psvita with their unoficial solar chargers and his yugioh cards to play for a while, anyway, this year, his outfit was diferent, in the last convention, his costume was of CONNOR KENWAY, up today, connor was his favorite assasin, because unlike the previous ones, he was a hunter by nature, everything he wanted to be, his costume this year, was not about an assasin one could ever see in a game, because it didnt existed. This year Alex finally made his own Assasin outfit.
Alex didnt have anything againts gowns, they look good and treathing with the assasins, but this was the 21 century, and gowns really weren't practical, his outfit was almost plain and simple, not exactly a ninja, but it did the trick, it was really clear that he was not a fan of color White since this outfit was grey, red and black, his ninja belt with 3 mid sized bags, two for the right and left side fo his waist and one for the side of his butt, in one, he carried his throwing knifes, in the other his his darts for the bow gun and in the last one was saved for food, in the game he never saw it, but it was obvious the assasins has to have a bag to store food to not starve) and to finish the touch, one sheath for his sword and one for his tomahawk (yep he added the tomahawk to his arsenal, he thanked Connor for that amazing idea) his T shirt was plain and black with a hood added, but under it, he of course, had his bullet proof vest. For his arms he had his elbow protectors and his hidden blades and brown motocyclist gloves, when he made his hidden blades, he managed to make them as plain and simple as posible, he manage to cover them so no mecanism could be seen, for any person I was just a boy’s toy without anything inside. Except for the blade point imposible to hide no matter what. His black jeans were convined with a his knees protectors and to finish he was using black soldier's boots, Of course, his black t shirt had the distinctive assasin logo, the Hood that unlike all the other outfit was white, (he did it for tribute to the game, after all all hoods had always been white).
ALEX THE "ASSASIN"
He entered to the the event with a proud expression in his face, he thought maybe nobody would like his costume, surprisely, every one in the convention loved it, the originality played great role in it. Alex really sigh in relief for the good result.
The event continued perfectly, Alex showed his agility and some of his parkur moves in an improvised obstacle course his friends helped him to build, he also using targets for a throwing knives and arrows demostration, and some sparring with swords with a friend, it was all a show, but for him, the applauses of the crowd worth it, now that Alex thought about it, he never really knew why he learned to use the Spear, he meant, the assasins never used them in any game, realization then just hit him, the royal guards of MLP use spears, cool! it's all he could think, After the show, Alex just expended his remaining time playing psvita with some randow guys, exchanging cards, etc.
By the time the convention ended it was like 6:00 PM, so he started the long walk home, while he was walking with his backpack and suitcase, he passed next to the local park, Alex remembered how he spent time there with his sister, playing tag, hide and seek, etc, while it was a beautiful memory it also ache his heart.
Not having anything better to do at home, he entered the park and searched for a especific special place, the park wasn't that big, but since the accident, Alex didnt return there again, after 15 mins he finally found it, the big and oldest oak tree in the park, a little deep in the woods, it was a special place since he and his family many years ago gazed a meteor shower under that tree, it was beautiful, he got closer to the tree and stare it for a while, finally putting all his stuff next to it, he sat there and started gazing the stars, many memories came to him, memories of his family, his little sister playing with him, he was fighting to not let his tears come out, but then he remembered something his mother told him once, “if u dont cry when you want to, you will never be able to smile”, there in that very moment one tear came out, but a few second later, a rain of tears followed it,
Alex just stayed there, crying like a baby, it was funny in some kind of way, he didn’t think of his family in years, the memory was too painfull, he regreted not being there at their last moments, sometimes, he really wished to had been there that night, to die with them, thought that banished as soon as he remembered his father last words, it hurt, it hurt so much not being able to say goodbye, not being able to hug them more, kiss them more, being with them more, but the worst of all, was. . .his broken promise to his sister, since that day, he wasn’t able to even finish saying her name, it always ended in Ang. . . Ang. . . , for a long time he wondered why, until this day, he remembered his promise to her, he remembered he didn’t do everything for only himself or his dad's last word. . . but. . . for her, how she always wanted to have a brother like the prince of Persia, (kid’s dreams he guess), and then he remembered, he . . . .promised her that someday he would be one, appareance and all, that he would be the most coolest brother she ever had and she will be the proudest sister in the whole world, he remembered her face. . .a huge smile in it, and then. . . she died, she died before he could fullfill his promise, granted it was a silly promise, but it was their life promise, a promise at least he wanted to fullfill to the end, now. . . 6 years later, here he was, a crazy man pretending to be an “Assasin”, did it worth it?, it was a question he really didn’t know how to answer. After some thinking, he finally thought with his heart, he looked at the beautifull night and said
“Ang. . .Ang. . . Sister, I really hope someday you will be able to forgive me for failing you, I really wanted to make you proud, I hope you are watching me from Heaven, I'm really sorry for being late, but now, look at me please, I hope you like what I became, I hope this would be enough, now, let me make another promise, I. . . promise no matter where I’d be, I wont let all the hard work be for nothing, I will use it as you'd want me to, I will protect anyone who need it, , I will fail to no one again, and finally say dad, I’m planing to keep living, so don’t worry, I. . . Pinkie promise. . . that, cross my heart and hope to fly. . .. stick a cupcake in my eye. . . damn, I think I went nuts, hehehe”
After that and not in the mood to stand up, Alex fell asleep under that beautiful tree, who would say in the very same moment he did that, a meteor shower started, that was odd, it wasn’t predicted by any way, and then a bright light began to cover the oak tree with Alex undert it, many people stared the show with wonder in their eyes, for many people it represented many things, miracles, wishes, good luck, but for one particular person who was no longer under in an oak tree in this world, it was the begining of a new life an maybe the greatest adventure an earthling has ever made.
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It was the 8:00 PM in Ponyville, a little pony named Twilight Sparkle and her friends along with all the ponies in the park, were enjoying the show, the first meteor shower of the year, many were wishing many things, good luck, love, but a very special baby dragon was wishing something really special, A FRIEND, not any friend but somepony who could understand him, someopony who he would want to be, to look up to, don't get him wrong, he loved Twilight and everypony, but he knew he needed more guy friends, granted Big Mac was his friend but it was not enough, he wished with all his heart even knowing it was just a fantasy and nothing more, who would say that this meteor shower would bring somepony or better said someone really special, who now was resting under a very same looking oak tree in the Everfree forest.
This is literally a copypaste description of every crappy Human in Equestria story. Some douche named Alex with a 2edgy4me tragic backstory goes to Equestria to "make friends".
God forbid that you try to be original.
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That is all.
Good story I like it.
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YFW reading.
4596338 thankyou very much, i will try to be really original i cant say it will be a 100% because some clishes stories has to happen, and dont worry i could not care less for COMMANDER and WINTER STORM comments, COMMANDER doesnt have the balls to make a FIC, and WINTER STORM has one only one and is cancelled, what happened WINTER STORM? your balls drop off?, anyway thank you very much, ILL TRY MY BEST
4596360 One, you may want to learn how to reply to multiple users.
Second, I cancelled my story because I was not happy with the quality and could recognize that it needed work. I could also accept and act upon criticism, something you seem incapable of doing.
4596360 I am in the progress of starting 2 stories hopefully soon 1 LoHaV and is crossover I like it when story do something that is new and this is new to me so I like it and hope to see some more of it soon!
Wat is going on here
ok, i have to admit, maybe Alex was not the most incredible orginal name after all, but i liked, many good names were already taken, and i have to say, im not trying to make this FIC just an I GONNA MAKE FRIENDS AND THATS IT. i will try my best i know im not a great author but trustme i have many original plans for this. i hope
The short des says it's not an Assassin's Creed cross.
Only it is....
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It isn't the name as much as the personality.
4596371 i do, and believe it or not i really apreciate your comment, and i started to read your story but when i saw the cancelled status i stoped, but in the first chapter i knew it was good, far better than mine, anyway sorry for my comment. i hope when i made more chapters u can give my story another chance, i will really try to improve promise, and will really try to not use many clishes, but as you know some times its inevitable.
4596390 true, when i said its not a cross, i meant its not like you will see altair, edzio, connor or any assasin appear here, its just a man who trained hard to became as good as them in real life.
4596402 Thing is, there are literally a million different ways to write this. It's simple. Don't call him Alex, and don't make him a teen with a tragic backstory and dead parents.
Make it (for example )Lawrence (Larry), a 20 year old college student who works part-time with his dad, who is an electrician. He comes from a happy family and has a close relationship with his dad.
Now, his arrival in Equestria isn't as happy as it was before, because now he has lost his connection to his family and will be wanting to get back to them. He'll have the dilemma of figuring out where he is truly happy.
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Characters are regardless. If it has heavy elements taken from a series, it is considered a crossover, and requires to be tagged as such.
4596418 nice idea, ill think about it really, maybe not for this story, but when i end this, i ll be better and i know i will be able to do a better story than this,
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4596440 Just want to point out that this is the internet, where everything is permanent. Comments are always screencapped, stories saved offsite. Once you post it here, it's never going to go away.
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Yep, you deserve a medal.
4596390 mmmm, ok let me think it for the night ok, ill see if i add the CROSSOVER tag ok.
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Look mate, it's not a matter of whether you think it's a crossover or not, it's a matter of rules. This borrows heavily from elements of a game series; not cameos or references, direct usage. That classifies it as a crossover by site rules. By writing rules in general.
4596482 ok, ok i did, shesh, u are right, but the fimfiction team didnt say anything but ok, i already add it, but i still has my doubts.
This story is far from bad, considering the fact that you have no editor. I like it. Keep up the good work.
4596506 thanks dude, ill try my best, one question, is there a way to ban a person like that COMMANDER, i dont care what people says about me, but i will not stand when they insult people that like my work.
4596520 That "no balls" thing is pretty immature, and what if the person you're insulting is female?
And if you want to ban someone, just become a site moderator or admin.
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See what I mean? PERMANENT.
4596529 ok, sorry, its just i really hate that kind of guys thats all, but so true, once more, sorry.
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Stop imposing on my rights as a genderfluid ethnic American.
Wat is this shit I don't even
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Ah, Herr Heer! Is it a fine day in Moscow?
4596664 Alas, as long as the Russian pigs have vodka to sip and some kind of domestic animal to fuck, we'll never be rid of the scourge.
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There's two now!? W-what the hell!?
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Ja? Is a common sight in Europe these days herr user.
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At least with winter, the vodka will dry up! Good thing Herr Fueher decided to listen to Herr Guderian and give us all this winter equipment.
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Previous comments are indeed criticism. Winter, when you post on a story, try to do this:
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More often than this:
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Former sounds pretty good (and hell, it's honestly a pretty good idea), and the latter is the generic 'oh God another HiE here we goooo' comment.
Point being, former helps people, latter hinders and makes you come off as a douche.
Same to you, Comm, even though you'll probably reply to this in a predictably trollish manner.
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As for the story, the description right off the bat has my head throwing up red flags. Firstly, Assassin's Creed cross My Little Pony has been done before, and been done, at the very least, more coherently and in with a stronger sense of literacy.
Take notes from how the more well-spoken of us write, as well as the actual stories popping up here and there. Even the Featured Box. Straighten up the description, and people will actually read the story.
For the story... well, all I can say is be prepared. Criticism around here will be blunt and quick, though however painful it'll be to read it, almost all criticism from this community is very informative. Learn what ya can, keep on writing, don't let anyone tell you to stop.
Just, if you do keep on writing, try not to do anything that'll piss people off. We've got enough of those kinds of people around here as is.
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Stop raping me! :c
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Once you've learned to stop being such a bad boy.
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This story is a prolapse.
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I agree with this because it has dubs
4596850 just to be sure, prolapse is a good thing or a bad thing?, just wondering, and what it means, ill really apreciate an explanation.
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birth
english is not my native tongue
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A prolapse is another word for giving birth, so basically he meant that this story is a miracle a start of something new, but also a real pain to go through.
4596383 names don't have to be original if the person themselves is amazing.
4596857 Your drawings didn't really suck. To me they looked really good :) nice drawings.
Pal.. I have to say.. I like the drawing of Alex.
The text in this story is way to clunky you need to space the text out a bit more
4596857 Dammit I wasn't expecting for me to be sad this far in the story. Probably because I have sisters too and will not let anything happen to them. Well bravo to you for making me sad this early and now I know this story just got 20% cooler. Also I'm glad you at least put pictures in your story. They are not perfect but, it gives the readers a way to picture exactly how the character looks so that made your story way better.
Now that it's 2018, he has another reason for learning how to fight with a spear. In Assassin's Creed: Origins, the spear is part of the arsenal. I haven't played Odyssey yet, but since it's set in Ancient Rome, it gives me reason to believe that they have spears as well.
Reminds me of “Robocop”. Murphy’s son always asked his dad to spin his gun around his finger as a finishing trick after shooting it then reholster it. After he became a cyborg it stayed in his memory. So he was able to fulfill the promise.